Okay, this is VERY CUTE SMUT.

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Yeah, no need for nervousness on this one. I loved it, and it actually kind of made me drool. I really enjoyed agressive!Pam. Definite home run on this one!


Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Oh wow, that was fantastic! Your first attempt?!? Could of fooled me! I think you really have their voices down! I hope you write again soon!

 P.S. - Randy Rogers Band is amazing. My favorite song from them is "Love Must Follow You Around". Has a very Jim/Pam Season 2 feel. In fact, you've just inspired me to make a JAM fanvid to that song! Lol, thanks! =)

Thank you for that during this rough period of JAM

Author's Response: Yay, glad I could help!  Thanks!

Holy Crap!  It was not at all obvious that you were a smut-virgin (ha! just made that up!).  This was all kinds of awesome.

Let's see, you want concrete, so I'll try to give you some of that.  I can tell you, I won't find much wrong with this story.

The whole Karen's gone, Jim is recovering, Pam and Jim are getting more normal montage at the beginning is really excellent. 

I think Pam probably would have let Jim take her to her house, then she would have asked him to walk her in.  That way, she'd be in her territory, know that the sheets were clean, know there'd be no roommate and roommate's girlfriend in the kitchen in the morning.  But, maybe she thought it would be more obvious to go to his place, and she certainly wasn't going for subtle here.  (Maybe she's got a big purse with a change of clothes for the morning.)

I loved this line "it takes all of Jim's willpower not to just lay her down right there on the porch."  That was really good.

It's wonderful how you pointed out that Jim knows it's a fancy bra and what that means, and then matching underwear.  Then Pam's all prepared with the Never Ending Condom Supply!  He knows that this was planned, not a drunken hook-up.  (This is a case of Premeditated Full Frontal Dating.)  That was just great.

"They're in bed now, the comforter pulled up over their heads in a bluish cocoon, and it's too hot and stuffy but neither one wants to leave." - On that part, I thought they'd just throw that comforter off.  I know they do a couple paragraphs later, but they would have done it  before.  Especially since Pam is sweating and has slick thighs (with sweat, not slick in a good way, right?), that comforter would have been thrown off, and brought back later, once they were "cooling down".

"...she can't modulate her voice at a time like this, and it takes her a minute to come back down, to formulate thought. Jim sits back on his legs and smirks, rubbing her calves and waiting for her to return to Earth."  Niiice.  Jim smirking, too.  He knows he just rocked her world.

"...it's not till she realizes he's not just smiling, he's laughing, that she realizes she's been moaning and talking. Loudly. And with cuss words."  Whew, this room's on fire!  Awesome!  That reminds me of another fic where Mark is banging on Jim's wall or something telling him to stop doing whatever it is he does to women; apparently in that story, Jim has magical powers to make women very loud.  Again, niiice. (I have to find that one again and "favorite" it so I don't lose it.)

"Pam... falls in love with the way he says her name while he's coming."  Ooh, sexy and romantic.

I don't really get the The Notebook reference.  I saw the movie, but didn't read the book, and don't really recall the movie that well.  It was good and all, but I don't remember a bird or love all around or anything.  So, the whole Michael as matchmaker part doesn't work really well for me. 

I did like Michael asking about the weekend; that was funny.  I might have ended with a teeny Jim/Pam moment after Michael walks off.  Like maybe Jim is still leaning on Pam's desk as Michael walks off, and very quietly so only Pam hears, Jim says, "I did someone cool this weekend."  Maybe there's a dirty reply, maybe just a giggle and a promising look of "more later", etc.  But, just to bring it back and end on a Jim/Pam note, and maybe a slightly smutty note, instead of a Michael being Michael moment.

I don't know anything about the formatting and all, but it would be good to have a little more space between your last lines and the Chapter End Notes.  Right now they kind of run together.

And that's it.  Again, this is wonderful and very enjoyable smut.  The conclusion people should draw is that you're awesome and you should write more smut for those people who like it.  Whoever those people are.  I mean, I don't know any of ... them.   

Fabulous. Really. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it!

Lovely and true to character and not least of all, hot. I think what I liked best about this was how joyous it was - in so many '1st time' fics, they're so deadly serious - I love that here Jim's mega watt smiling and they're joking and laughing together before, during and after. And Pam, so into it that she doesn't even realize she's cussing, then putting her hand over her mouth? Priceless.

Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much!  What a great review!

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Hawaiian boxers on Jim? 

I love you. 

This is just the BEST!  I loooove realistic, sweet smut, and damn, you delivered!


Author's Response: Hee, thank you so much! 

Hmmmmm.....your first one?   And you wonder if you should do it again.   I'm not sure.  I'll have to read a few more.    

 OK, you caught me.   I am trying to trick you in to writing more of these.   Because, seriously.   Good.   Yes, GOOD.  Verrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry Good.   

 I love that Jim is so excited by the fact that Pam obviously planned her little seduction ahead of time.   I think it's really true to character and their history that he would be bowled over by the notion that she'd been wanting him for a while....

this is awesome smut, because it's so much FUN!  It isn't all about the smexy, it's about the banter and the sometimes embarrassing thoughts and actions and moments, and it goes from moment to moment as you live it, sort of, instead of "wait, what???"  I'm not making any sense, but I blame you ;)  In a good way. 

Author's Response: Yay, thank you!  I really struggled with the pacing; glad to hear I got it right.

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THIS WAS SO AMAZING!! First of all, the sex was awesome, really in character and Jim was so sweet with her. And lifting her up for sex against the wall? Yes plz. Quoting The Notebook was hilarious and so sweet (I love that movie, shut up). The whole story is just so THEM. I could really see this happening.


Author's Response:

Yay, thank you so much!  I'm a big fan of your work; this is so flattering. :D

I love The Notebook too!  You, me, and Michael Scott.  We know what's up.