9 [Report This]Date: April 20, 2007 01:47 pm Title: Friday
Wow...this was so cool. I love the flashbacks in it, I love ow worried and excited they both are, and it all seems so realistic and in character. great job.
Date: April 18, 2007 04:40 pm Title: Friday
Oh, this was fantastic. I love her fears and doubts, how she wants to confide in him but wants to do it alone, and how he wants to help but doesn't know how and if he's wanted... and the Australian birthday! Perfect. I also just adore how they have this little moment tinged with grief, and then it's back to the outback. Just awesome.
Date: April 18, 2007 06:02 am Title: Friday
This is so good. Seriously good. The flashbacks worked beautifully. Perfect execution!
Date: April 17, 2007 11:52 pm Title: Friday
I HEART THIS STORY! What a great piece. I think the best thing about it was that neither of them really knew how to handle this moment. Pam had all this stuff floating around from how Roy had handled it and Jim just really wanted to be there for Pam, but they were just so confused as well. I just loved this. Not to mention Jim being so freaking dreamy with the fake Australia!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it.
I think the thing about The Office is that the show is meant to be realistic, and there's no reason why fanfiction shouldn't be, too. I've read a couple of Jam pregnancy stories in which the two of them get together, get engaged a week later, and get pregnant a month after that like it's the "happily ever after" trifecta, and they just always leave me scratching my head, because really, if that actually happened, who would be happy? Who wouldn't be freaked out beyond belief?
Date: April 17, 2007 09:59 pm Title: Friday
This was a really great story. I loved how they both reflected on their past relationships - pregnancy scares are a real litmus test for where things stand (and where you heart *really* is.) I thought Jim handled the situation perfectly. I loved the girl-talk translator comment...I can *so* see them talking to each other that way.
And the relief tinged with regret...god that is *so* true. I'm married with 2 kids, *absolutely* don't want any more, but whenever I get a negative pregnancy test, I'm always a little sad. Why is that?
I thought you might end the fic at this line "The song ends." It was perfect for an open ended ending...but I'm glad you didn't. I prefer closure, myself.
Great job! I'm checking to see if I've missed anything else you've written here.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
You know, it's funny you mention that, because in my head the story did always end at that point when the song ends. And then I was walking around my house the day I was writing it, and all the sudden, I could just see the two of them sitting on the edge of the bathtub side by side, and I realized I really wanted to write that scene, too, because I guess to me, this piece is really not about a potential pregnancy so much as it's about Jim and Pam's feelings about the future of their relationship, and the point I was trying to make was that a baby might seem romantic to readers of fanfiction, but for them, at this point, it would throw everything into question again, and they've just started to settle things between them. So I guess I wanted to let them off the hook a little bit at the end, and I also wanted this to be a moment that would strengthen their relationship going forward instead of causing all that turmoil.
Date: April 17, 2007 08:59 pm Title: Friday
wonderful! I didnt understand Pam's reasoning for wanting him to not be the supportive guy...i'm very glad you explained. Nice job!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: April 17, 2007 07:36 pm Title: Friday
that was incredibly beautiful, I thought you got Jim spot on, he's so much like a little puppy wanting to be loved and appreciated and it must be crushing for Pam not to be able to do that properly. And I so know the fear of being together because you have to rather than because you want to. The only thing I wish is that you had fleshed out the end a little, I'm sure you left it intentionally short but I'm a sucker for a little denouement. But overall brilliant! Can't wait to read what you have up next!
Author's Response:
Thank you!
I think Pam does love Jim, and it's actually because she loves him so much that she's afraid of herself and what their relationship could turn into. She just got out of a long-term relationship that was pretty much in limbo half the time, and the thought of her relationship with Jim ever becoming that breaks her heart.
10 [Report This]Date: April 17, 2007 06:41 pm Title: Friday
Wow...earned the rare immediate "Add author to favorites." One of the best things I've ever read on here. The flashbacks were poignant and realistic and added resonance to the story. The dialogue was great...it seemed like them as they really would be together, not doing a sort of schtick. The whole characterization was vivid and real. The "we've only been dating three months"...paragrpah of Pam's was brilliant. Plus, so many great little details...her picking the teenage girl at the checkout, for instance. And you captured the mixed emotions very well....it's great you didn't have them despearately wanting one outcome or the other or being totally overjoyed or terified. Really, really, really great.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much!!! I'm so glad you liked it!
Date: April 17, 2007 06:17 pm Title: Friday
I enjoyed this. I liked how you set it off with the 3 pregnancy scares in the past.
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Date: April 17, 2007 06:15 pm Title: Friday
SO. CUTE.
Oh, wow, I really liked this. I liked the idea of them being FREAKED OUT by a baby and what it would mean to them.
Thanks so much for this.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Thanks! :D
9 [Report This]Date: April 17, 2007 05:47 pm Title: Friday
I really liked this. Great Pam and Jim introspection, and it's actually a topic I've thought about a lot so it was nice to see this.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: April 17, 2007 04:33 pm Title: Friday
Is Dwight Karl a mix of two things? Because Dwight's middle name is Kurt. I like this story a lot, you really wrote this pregnancy scare well.
Author's Response:
Nope, that was just me being a doofus and forgetting to double-check the rewrite. *headdesk* I went in and changed it now; thanks for pointing that out!