10 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2011 09:21 pm Title: Parenthetical
This particular chapter is, I believe, about the most beautiful piece of fan fiction I have ever read. Personally I have always believed that after all the time and heartache/heartbreak, trials and tribulations this special couple, who are, to me, so obviously soulmates, after all they went through, I believe they probably took things really pretty fast. If I did think however that they did choose to go very slow, then I think I choose to believe that it would have gone exactly the way you have written it here.
This is really a truly incredible and powerfully beautiful chapter you have written. I have enjoyed all of this piece, each chapter BUT, since authors don't tend to see reviews that are written so long after the fact, I rarely write them for older pieces like I used to. I just HAD to make an exception here. If there is even a small chance you will read this I wanted you to know just how incredible I think it is. REALLY a great job setting the scene and painting a beautiful picture with your words! Thank you so much for sharing this!
10 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2006 01:58 pm Title: Definitely Not a Date
This was cute! I was just waiting for the untitled silent presence to make himself useful!
10 [Report This]Date: November 16, 2006 10:31 pm Title: Her Apartment
::sigh:: after tonight's episode I sooooooo need happy Jam. Thank you!!! It's like therapy!
Author's Response: So thrilled I could be of assitance. Thank you for the review.
10 [Report This]Date: November 16, 2006 11:45 am Title: Definitely Not a Date
Mmmm, protective Jim. Nice. And how very, very Pam to still deny, still hold back, still hesitate. You capture a very true-feeling moment here.
Author's Response: Thank you. Gotta love Protective Jim, except I always feel like I'm writing them in the 50's when I go that route. You know, black leather jackets and poodle skirts at the sock-hop. Oh well. Thanks for the review.
8 [Report This]Date: November 16, 2006 06:04 am Title: Definitely Not a Date
Very nice but one complaint - I want it to be a real date! Other than that, it's lovely. And a piece of good advice for dealing with unwanted attention "he tells her to tell the next Loser that she's either a nun or has the bird flu because, without fail, all guys are afraid either of God or avian viruses". (And I think your spell check missed this: "it is in know way")
Author's Response: Thanks for catching the typo. As for it not being a real date, denial is very powerful and persuasive. Thanks for the review.
10 [Report This]Date: November 16, 2006 03:43 am Title: Definitely Not a Date
It may not be a date, but whatever it is, it's lovely. I like the way Jim doesn't say anything, just 'claims' Pam via body language. And how he's still tentative enough to be unsure he should act possessive...very Jim-like. Ending with them subtly walking closer together, smiling, joking around was perfect. Just enough of a shift in mood. Very, very sweet.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much. I feel like, once they finally get out of their own way, he won't put up with anyone getting between them because enough is enough! Plus, possessive Jim is yummy. He should always be "claiming."
Thanks for the specifics and the review.
Date: November 15, 2006 10:44 pm Title: Definitely Not a Date
Sure it isn't a date. Uh-huh. :D
Author's Response: Denial is a very powerful (and necessary) tool.
10 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2006 10:40 pm Title: Parenthetical
Okay, I've read the other ones and I've enjoyed them immensely, but this one brought tears to my eyes. I'm seriously almost sobbing here (which is why my roommate is shooting me odd looks).
This is amazing. The word choice is light and hard, at the same time, driving to a rhthym, a tempo that swells like an orchestra. /cheese.
Amazing. Thank you.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much. I'm pretty sure you give me way too much credit, but I'm very, very happy that you enjoyed it. (Does your roommate not appreciate The Office? What a nightmare that would be!) Thanks for reading and reviewing.
9 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2006 09:38 pm Title: Definitely Not a Date
I really enjoyed this chapter! My favourite parts:
the silence an aisle away listens I just like this image, it reminds me of the time Pam's mom asked who Jim was, and even though he looked "busy" he was listening to intently I thought he might pull a muscle.
And: She laughs her Jim laugh, and he smiles his Pam smile
Because, yeah, they totally have those things, that they only use with each other.
Awesome.
Author's Response: Man, you are observant. I didn't even think of the Pam's mom scene...at least not conciously. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review.
10 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2006 09:25 pm Title: Definitely Not a Date
Awww, hanging out at a bookstore before going to the movies! That is a perfect evening. Oh, and I love protective Jim. It is not a date but the best evenings are spent with friends so it is all good. ;)
Author's Response: It would pretty much be my perfect evening, so yeah. Protective Jim is hot. I'm all for women taking care of themselves, but sometimes...it's nice for the guy to step in.
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 06:33 pm Title: Parenthetical
This was so powerful. Very hot, as well. I'm in love with this chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much I appreciate that. I'm really happy you enjoyed it.
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 03:08 pm Title: Parenthetical
wow. :) i love the sugar!
Author's Response: Aah, thanks. I know - I can't seem to wrap myself around the angst...I've tried. I just want them happy!
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 08:39 pm Title: Parenthetical
Just started reading these one-shot drabble-things, and I think this last one is definitely the best. I love the style, the use of the parentheses to detail the otherwise simple sentence. I've always loved stories that are written in different styles, and this is as different as any other. =P Lovely, awesome, lovely job.
I love...hmm...she twists the key to turn off the car (permission), and skin contact (electric) shocks them, because that can be read in a couple of different ways. (She wants him closer.) after the line about invasion is brilliant, too.
And this has to be my favourite line - She catches her breath at the expression there and knows she is (already) his (wife) choice (and has been time after time after time). It's gorgeous how that sentence alone basically shows Jim and Pam. JimandPam.
There's so much more I can say, but this is already (incredibly) long and I think (know) I should shut up. Wow, I feel so inspired...I need to write something. Now.
Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. I can't tell you how much I appreciate specific reviews. I think the parentheses accomplished what I was going for. I'd been working on this for a while, and it just wasn't happening - until I added them.
As I stated in my previous response, your favorite line is also my favorite. In my head, that is who they are...which is why I'm not that concerned about the whole "other woman" aspect this season. It'll work out.
Thanks again, and definitely write something.
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 06:32 pm Title: Parenthetical
She catches her breath at the expression there and knows she is (already) his (wife) choice (and has been time after time after time).
This has such an unusual style, but it works really well. It's almost impressionistic. It's definitely poetic. Beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I really appreiciate that. I'm very glad you enjoyed it. I'm so happy you picked that line to quote - It's my favorite. It really encompasses the way I feel about them.
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 03:14 pm Title: Parenthetical
This was very romantic. I love how you used the words to describe what they were feeling and thinking.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. As it turns out, I love reading the smut, but I feel much better equipped to write romance. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 11:20 am Title: Parenthetical
Simply breathtaking. So, so beautiful - sheer poetry. Love what you've done with the language here, the images you create....just perfect.
Author's Response: Thank you girl7 - that means a lot. I really appreciate and am glad you enjoyed it. (And since I'm not the best at reviewing, let me say that After the Dance was just lovely...exactly what I needed when I read it.)
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 10:14 am Title: Parenthetical
It's great that you've played with the language as you did, took some chances. And it works! Very sweet too.
Author's Response:
Thank you. It's always nice when taking a chance works the way you want it to. (Poor, sweet Jim!) I'm happy you enjoyed it.
(BTW, your Betty was one one the first M stories I read - hot!)
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 09:05 am Title: Parenthetical
I love what you've done here - both stylistically and of course the end result for our two lovebirds.
Just gorgeous.
Author's Response: Thank you. I appreciate the attention to the style, truly. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 06:42 am Title: Parenthetical
Wonderful chapter. I love all the thoughts.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 04:01 am Title: Parenthetical
I just adore those stylistic exercises. You play with language so well; this was a truly gorgeous piece.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Language is my favorite plaything. I really appreciate it.
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 01:55 am Title: Parenthetical
WOW!!!!! Hot DAMN! This is GOOD. Grammar? Why are you worried about grammar? This is sheer freakin' poetry. I am saving it. Hell, I am STEALING it. I won't sleep for days! THANK YOU.
Author's Response:
Wow! You are welcome! Why am I worried about grammar? That's just who I am...big nerd (I believe that may be my Native American name).
I'm always astounded when people think I'm capable of something poetic, because I really don't feel that I have anything like that ability. Thank you for such an enthusiastic review - I really appreciate it. (But I think maybe sleep would be a good idea.: )
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 01:40 am Title: Her Apartment
Well done. Very wel done. The essence of good writing is sensual detail, and you have a gift for it. Cultivate it. I can see her apartment. You bring dimension and depth to Pam without directly describing her, letting us see her through Jim's eyes directly. And this piece is just long enough. Any longer would have been too much. Lack of self-restraint is a hallmark of bad fanfic--you have avoided this pitfall admirably. I applaud you.
Author's Response: Thank you. Specific reviews are wonderful. I really appreciate the time you took. I'm very glad you enjoyed it. (Every time I post I fear the label "bad fanfic.")
9 [Report This]Date: October 08, 2006 11:21 pm Title: Parenthetical
Oh, I loved this chapter. Beautiful and poetic.
Author's Response: Thank you very much, and thank you for reviewing.
10 [Report This]Date: October 08, 2006 10:21 pm Title: Parenthetical
That's absolutely gorgeous. I'm a grammar geek, too, and I loved the run-ons and the parentheses. I swear I didn't breathe while reading this.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. Grammar geekdom - a blessing and a curse - I love words, but bad grammar, punctuation or spelling can ruin just about anything for me.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for reviewing. Also, any prolonged lack of inhalation is extremely dangerous. (But I really appreciate the sentiment.) ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 08, 2006 09:15 pm Title: Parenthetical
This is really lovely. The style reminds me so much of e.e. Cummings, and you pull it off beautifully, which is an amazing feat.
Author's Response: OK, seriously? That humbles me - I really feel unworthy of such praise, but I am so gratified that you enjoyed it. Thank you so much.