1 [Report This]Date: September 11, 2023 01:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Fascinating!
1 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2021 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
I feel that I know not enough words to express how beautiful this story is. All that I can do is thank you silently for this wonder.
Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2008 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
Vivid, tender, and sensual. Such a gorgeous story.
Author's Response: I am absolutely aghast that it's been so long since you left this review, albie. Forgive me. Thank you so much for reading and leaving a comment. I loved writing this and I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Date: April 22, 2008 07:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Okay, so this is how my brain works. Pam is thinking about Jim and sculpting him in clay. And I remember my history of making people with clay. There was a reason why I only did three people total (and one was only for a commison!). They really are hard to get the proportions right, and especially the face was always the hardest part. And I only did females (okay, I was like a 12-15 year old, and the figures were fully clothed, whatever i drew/sculpted from imagination, and, the entire thing was usually only like 3 inches high. Because I felt the need to clarify it because of the fact that my clay makings were very different than scultping Jim).
Wow, see, a huge paragraph based on a simple mentio in your story.
Moving on to normal stuff...
Okay, so, I had to take a break. Because real life was interferring. Something like "oh, real people, you must talk to me" I really need a rule about no interrupting me when reading fanfic.
So very colorful, you just get lost in it. And of course love is permanent deep green. It just fits.
Author's Response: I don't even know what to say here, Em, except...you really got commission on sculpting something when you were 12-15 years old? Man, that's pretty impressive! I haven't even mastered wedging yet and I think my teacher hates me! I'm so glad you liked this and thanks so much, in your very own special way, for telling me! :-)
Date: April 22, 2008 05:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Movie with Ewan McGregor naked? (If you tell me he sings too, I will go up in a poof of smoke right here and now). That is sooooo going in my Netflix queue!!!
Author's Response: Dude, that man gets nekkid in nearly every movie he's in! See also: Young Adam and Velvet Goldmine. WHAT?
10 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2008 09:51 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so beautifully written. It's a very unique voice and extremely vivid. Such a wonderful read!
Author's Response: "Unique" and "vivid" are pretty awesome words to read in a review, StarShine. Thank you so much for letting me know and I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
10 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2008 08:27 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so beautiful! I had tears in my eyes the whole time!
Author's Response: PuffingNoise, I'm so glad I'm not the only dork who tears up reading fanfic! And what a fabulous compliment that is. Thank you so much for telling me and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!
Date: April 22, 2008 07:41 am Title: Chapter 1
I know I am a small-minded literalist, but I kept freaking out as I read this, "you can't use serious oil paints or acrylics on bare skin!! It's really bad for you!!!". Ok, my lack of imagination aside, this was so brilliant, SP. Like a song, if that makes any sense, you know how in song lyrics you can push the language and be more figurative, more fanciful or abstract.
The idea that Pam wants to put her mark on Jim is just utterly hypnotic. Well done.
Author's Response:
lisahoo, I laughed so hard when I read this. I don't want to give anything about the movie away in case you ever see it if you haven't (Ewan MacGregor - full monty, like he always freaking does! What the hell? Why can't he start hanging out with JK?), but the toxicity was an issue for me when this started. There was a section of dialogue where Pam was asking Jim to let her do it and she promised to use watercolors and that it would wash right off, but it just didn't fit the whole mood of this piece. Anyway, don't worry! No Halperts were harmed during the writing of this fic!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this and I absolutely feel that Pam wants to lay claim to that lanky hunk of real estate and I loved writing her doing it this way. Thank you so much!
Date: April 21, 2008 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is the color I am, the color of my fingerprints on his skin.
Sweetpea, how gorgeous was this? How freaking emotionally magnificent! Like I said before, you are a wonderful word painter. You have this ability to set a scene so that I can see it so clearly in my mind's eye. This reads like an outpouring of the soul. A one-shot that feels so satisfying and absolutely complete.
Author's Response:
Nobody knows better than you do how much I've been struggling. Thank you so much for all the laughs about it and all the encouraging words and your help. I'm so happy to know you. :-*
9 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2008 08:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
The lover’s eye takes over and it’s function over form now, and I see strong hands, broad shoulders, a soft matting of hair in a line down his stomach and lower. So long, I was blinded by the manners of a gentle man, a devilish twinkle, a schoolboy sweetness in unbuttoned collars and loosened ties. Without knots and buttons and pleats, he’s leather-hard and masculine in the most elemental way.
This is one of the best descriptions I've ever read. Simply amazing. In fact, I'm sure I'll read it about 10 more times before all is said and done.
I liked this one shot a lot. Some great imagery and you created with words something as stunning as Pam's artistic creation on Jim's back. Great work, and I hope to read more from you soon!
Author's Response:
Wow, that does seem to be the passage that struck a chord with folks. Is it because we all have a fascination with a naked Jim Halpert? Hmmm....
Laur, thank you so much for such an awesome review. Rereading is about the best compliment in the world to me. It's always great to read what folks think about something you've written, but especially so with this piece because it's my first one in a long time and it didn't come easy. TWSS. Thank you for the generous feedback.
Date: April 21, 2008 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Seriously, this is completely wonderful and to come up with something like this is amazing. Just the details and how you outlined every part of their relationship with colors and symbolism. Simply marvelous!
Author's Response: Oh, this is so nice to read, JamLover101, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for letting me know!
Date: April 21, 2008 04:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
I adore a story that takes full advantage of every sense, the way this does. Your evocation of emotion as color, the loving description of Jim's body (Without knots and buttons and pleats, he’s leather-hard and masculine in the most elemental way.--Sheer genius), your generous and inspired use of adjectives--everything in this story is calculated to hit every one of my buttons. This is going in my favorites file, for sure.
One of the best things about this is the voice. Pam sounds sure, confident, in charge, in a way we don't often get to see. When it comes to her art, she's gained more confidence than we saw in "Business School", when she appeared so nervous at the art show. And Jim, so patient while she paints him (how that must have tickled) is such a great combination of the Jim who will do anything for her, and the masculine/eroticized Jim you've given us, well, it's just fabulous.
I better stop now, or I'll go on all night. Fabulous work, sweetpea. Fabulous.
Author's Response:
I had this whole big long response typed out, NEJ, and when I hit 'submit' I got a 404 Error. Ack.
Okay, here goes from memory. I think I first said I was speechless and then I blathered on and on, so I'm going to skip the speechless part this time. I don't know how to tell you how wonderful it is to read this and it's going to go in my 'best reviews ever' file. I fought so hard with this thing, from concept to putting a title to it, so to read this...yeah, that's a good feeling.
This is really my favorite kind of thing to write. I'm so pleased with all of the bits that you mentioned because they're the things I work hard on and they're the things that I enjoy reading in a story, too. Usually, I try hard to make sure the characters ring true, but in this case, it was more important to me to convey feelings and emotions and even if that meant putting Pam naked on Jim's ass with a paintbrush in her hand drawing her life on his back at 4 in the morning, well...I was happy to do that. Who REALLY knows what goes on with these characters after dark, right? :)
Have I prattled on long enough? I could have just said 'thank you', right? Thank you.
9 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2008 01:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow! wonderful imagry in this. I can totally see Jim and Pam in it.
Author's Response: Excellent! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, dreamscribe70! So glad you enjoyed it!
Date: April 21, 2008 12:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
I can tell this is going to be one of those times when writing a review is utterly frustrating, because honestly, there are no words to articulate how lovely this is that aren't overdone or cliched. (Case in point: the previous sentence.) :o)
Still...this is just gorgeous prose: flowing, visceral, incredibly unique. I love it, both what you're expressing here and how you're expressing it. It was difficult to pick a favorite passage to mention, but I think this was my favorite (of many): So long, I was blinded by the manners of a gentle man, a devilish twinkle, a schoolboy sweetness in unbuttoned collars and loosened ties. Without knots and buttons and pleats, he’s leather-hard and masculine in the most elemental way.
Guh. I've never seen that articulated so well before...love it. Thanks for this!
Author's Response: Wow. Okay, girl7, here's the best thing about this review: "I've never seen THAT articulated so well before." First, you knew the "that" that I was trying to get at - it's that thing about men that I (and everyone else in the circle, including you) love so much. Not THAT thing! You know what I mean! I'm so pleased you quoted that bit and thank you for the review and the fantastic rec on the boards!
Date: April 21, 2008 10:46 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so beautiful...I don't really have any other thoughts. The details were meticulous, and overall it was just a wonderful piece.
Author's Response: I can't tell you how rewarding it is to read this after struggling with this piece, honeypioneer. Thank you so much for telling me and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
10 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2008 10:46 am Title: Chapter 1
SHUT UP. This piece is ridiculous. no joke sweetpea this is like everything I love about literature. Beautifully crafted and real and symbolic, and I love thinking of Pam as a kind of free spirit in the middle of the night who would want to paint herself onto Jim. ugh. Wow.
"I had curled my hair softly around him, head bowed in supplication to say here, take everything. Eyes open, I try to see what he sees and i think it is softness. Eyes closed, I see his skin stretched across his shoulders. Half-lidded, I let it all blur into movements and breathing and something so deep I can't name it, but I want to write it or paint it or mold it out of clay so I can point to it and say this is what we are."
Absolutely gorgeous. Like really really wonderfully put. This piece totally makes me want to toss famous out the window and write something fluid and romantic. SO GREAT! Ok I'm done gushing. ;-) Why don't I shut up for god's sack?
Author's Response:
i'm so tired of you yelling at me. :)
I've really, really enjoyed doing the beta stuff with you. I can honestly say that even though I've been struggling so badly with my own writing, it's been nothing but a sweet ride and so delightful to watch Famous unfold. Watching your determination no matter where in the world you were jetting off to has been an inspiration. Thanks for letting me rub up against your mojo and thank you so much for this. :-*
9 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2008 10:02 am Title: Chapter 1
Thank god you're back. Don't leave again. But if you do, always come back with awesome stuff like this. LOVED it!! -CH
Author's Response: You know, it's one thing when you're not a fic machine to begin with (like SOME people), but when your little handcrank won't even turn...well, that's not just a shit sandwich, it's the whole buffet. Good to be back, CH, and thank you!
Date: April 21, 2008 07:33 am Title: Chapter 1
This is really really cool and well written. I would love to see a picture of how it turned out.
Author's Response: Admit it, standinginthedoorway, you just want to see Jim naked. :) I'm so glad you enjoyed this and thank you so much for leaving a review!
10 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2008 07:14 am Title: Chapter 1
Sweetpea, that was just amazing. So beautiful and touching and just . . . wow. Fantastic.
Author's Response: wendolf, it's not been a pretty couple of three months unable to produce anything worth posting, I can tell you that. I've been a spotty reader and a worse reviewer lately, but I'll tell you that I'm so envious of the prolificness...prolificosity...uh, lots of fic some writers, like yourself can turn out and make it seem effortless. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Date: April 21, 2008 06:15 am Title: Chapter 1
beautiful :]
i was so pleased when i saw you had added a story! you are one of my favorite writers and once again, this was so delightful to read.
Author's Response: Oh, Sunday, that is so good to hear! Writer's block (like PMS and Dwight) is very real and I wouldn't wish it on my worst enemy. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: April 21, 2008 05:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, when you come back, you really come back. This was beautiful, almost epic without even meaning to be. Even though this sounds weird, I feel like I saw this story more than I read it, the imagery was so strong. Seriously great. Amazing!
Author's Response: Are you kidding me, Catie? It doesn't sound weird, it sounds wonderful!! I'm so glad you enjoyed this and it's great to see you again!
10 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2008 05:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Absolutely stunning. Magnificent job, sweetpea.
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! So good to see you, Nan!
Date: April 21, 2008 05:20 am Title: Chapter 1
Not sure this was intentional, but I loved that Pam used manganese blue as the hue of the lost period (cheap, synthetic, without real vibrance) and cobalt (the real stuff) to represent the depth of her love/joy at being with him. Very appropriate. Okay, will stop my pigment geeking now.
This line is all kinds of gorgeous and erotic and full of palpable emotion: I press my tongue to him, thinking, stay. And this was such a lovely resonant detail too (love how you subtly worked in the ref to CN via color, without 'explaining' it): This is no temporary sky blue that can shift and turn gray, no periwinkle blue that can fade and vanish into the night.
What a quietly magical scene. Glad to see you back ;-)
Author's Response:
Yeah, uh..yeah! I totally meant to do that, Colette! What a happy little accident that turned out to be! You know, I figured someone here would really know what they were talking about and I was hoping that just picking the colors that felt right would work out (kind of like picking the horse based on the jockey's silks). I hesitated on using the periwinkle blue because it's so obvious, but I figured that I wasn't beating anyone over the head with CN angst, so it seemed to be okay.
Man, it was an ugly fight to the finish with this, but I was determined not to scrap another half-written fic because it didn't feel right or was just plain old dumb. Thank you for this. Words of praise and encouragement from you mean so much.
10 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2008 12:55 am Title: Chapter 1
yay, Sweetpea! I've been hankerin' for a story from you ever since Allentown ended, and oh how I loved that story. I happened to be listening to "Strawberry Fields Forever" from the Across the Universe soundtrack while I was reading this, and your painting descriptions reminded me of Jude's painting of the strawberry for the record label.. I'm rambling, but it's a great movie. And a great story too! I'm kinda speechless, but this was beautiful, so thank you :)
Author's Response:
Aw, chelibelle, it's so nice to see you again! Thank you so much for reading and these encouraging words. It's very good to be back, and I'm praying to Thor himself that I'm not gone so long again!
Date: April 20, 2008 11:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
Your writing is so beautiful, and the detail of this makes me think you're an artist. If you're not an artist, you certainly write one well. It's lovely.
Author's Response:
Wow, it's nice to see you on THIS side of the review! It's been a long time for me!
I do not have a single artistic bone in my body! I just started taking a pottery class, and to put it as mildly as possibly, I suck! I mean, so bad that the teacher isn't even pretending to hide it from me and encourage me! So. I do have a fascination with all the materials and tools and and names for things and the processes of painting and potting, but alas, I am talentless. I'm thrilled you think this sounds true, but I'm a big ole faker! :-*