10 [Report This]Date: September 27, 2008 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Uh-maziiiiiiing :)
So very Jim and Pam =)
9 [Report This]Date: June 14, 2008 06:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really great to read. The dialogue, characterization, voices, everything sounded real and in character. Great job getting inside Jim and Pam's heads and making their thoughts sound realistic. I especially enjoyed their realization that they hold back their thoughts in order to protect each other. That really sounds a lot like a problem they would run into.
Date: May 20, 2008 07:44 am Title: Chapter 1
First fic, eh? It's very good. Loved this:
By the way Pam, I think about you dying sometimes in horrific ways, and I can’t breathe for a little while and I think that if something happened to you I would die like immediately.
Yeah, that's Jim. Your switching of perspectives is great. Also loved this:
"I'm afraid of losing my job."
"I'm afraid of keeping mine forever."
Date: May 20, 2008 07:44 am Title: Chapter 1
First fic, eh? It's very good. Loved this:
By the way Pam, I think about you dying sometimes in horrific ways, and I can’t breathe for a little while and I think that if something happened to you I would die like immediately.
Yeah, that's Jim. Your switching of perspectives is great. Also loved this:
"I'm afraid of losing my job."
"I'm afraid of keeping mine forever."
Author's Response: Okay, so I'm terribly late in responding, which is unexcusible, but thank you! I'm a huge fan of yours so this means a lot! I'm glad you liked it!
Date: May 15, 2008 08:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this was just a lovely story. You took something that was a fairly common Jim/Pam idea and made it into something just original and your own. (Okay, I feel I'm like commenting on American Idol or something. LOL) I love that they have a communication breakthrough in the end. It's not a huge thing; it's just a little moment of honesty that we have in everyday life.
Author's Response: Thanks! Haha, so which American Idol judge are you? I'm afraid that miscommunication is going to cause trouble for Jim and Pam in the season finale, let's hope I'm wrong! I'm so glad you liked it!
9 [Report This]Date: May 14, 2008 04:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
I would have never guessed it was your first Jam fic. Its one of the best i've read! good job:)
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: May 14, 2008 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. This was your first Jam fic? I wouldn't have guessed that at all. You seem to have a very good grasp on their characters, both as individual voices and as one couple. This was an excellent fic!
Author's Response: Thanks! I love Jim and Pam an unhealthy amount, so I'm glad I managed to get a grasp on their characters.
10 [Report This]Date: May 14, 2008 02:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was absolutely breathtaking, bashert! I loved the detail and precision in exploring the characters emotions. You made this very real and tangible, and I found myself "slowing down" as I read so it would last a little longer. Please write again soon; you're very talented! -CH
Author's Response: Thanks! That means like a crazy amount coming from you (because I love all the things you write, for reals). Breathtaking is a super awesome adjective and I'm so glad you liked it!
Date: May 14, 2008 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Don't be nervous - this was great! A Conversation they definitely need to have and I like the idea of Jim proposing at a picnic with both their parents there.
Author's Response: Thanks! I like the idea of Jim proposing with their families too (although for all of our sakes, I hope he does it in the office on the show so we can see). I'm really glad you liked it!
Date: May 14, 2008 11:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Fantastic first story! I never would have guessed it was your first, however. This has the tone and maturity of someone who is very comfortable with their craft.
You've done a great job in giving us just enough of the characters, while still allowing us, the readers, to fill in the blanks ourselves. As a result, it's a very satisfying read.
Hope to see more from you soon! Congrats on a great story!
Author's Response: Thanks! I've been a long time reader and lover (and I guess it goes without saying, lurker) of Jim and Pam fanfics, particularly yours, so I'm thinking my comfort level has everything to do with learning from the best. I dabbled with the O.C. for a little while, but this is my first Office fanfic. I'm super relieved I did the characters justice. I steered clear of ever writing anything Office related because I love the characters so much and wanted to be able to get their voices down. I'm so glad (and super relieved) that you liked it!
Date: May 14, 2008 09:39 am Title: Chapter 1
You nailed the Jim & Pam characters! The diologue, wording, and flow of the conversation is perfect!
Author's Response: Oh good, I was hoping that I would do the characters justice. I love them to bits. I'm so glad you liked it!
Date: May 14, 2008 07:16 am Title: Chapter 1
This is wonderful! Really for a first fic, or for any fic for that matter you certainly made your mark. You captured their thoughts so perfectly and I can't wait to hear more from you!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: May 14, 2008 06:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Brilliant. Loved this. You've set the bar pretty high for yourself, because this is a fine fic.
"I'm afraid of losing my job." "I'm afraid of keeping mine forever." How about that?! Well said. Just great. I hope this is the first of many JAM fics for you, bashert.
Author's Response: Thanks! I hope it's the first of many too, hopefully as well received as this one has been. I'm so glad you liked it!
Date: May 14, 2008 06:05 am Title: Chapter 1
I don't know the songs you're referencing, but the way you flesh out each idea in the chapter is really beautiful. And I love the final chapter, how once they are honest with each other, the 'complications' become just little details they can handle. Sigh.
Cannot wait for Jim to give her that ring! And I agree with Pam, don't worry about kicking her ass, JUST DO IT ALREADY!!!
Author's Response: I know! I want to shake him until he proposes! The lines are all from one song, "Chocolate," and it's possibly one of the greatest songs of all time. Communication is hard, and I always had a feeling that even once they were in a relationship, Jim and Pam wouldn't be very good at it.
Date: May 14, 2008 01:26 am Title: Chapter 1
Very sweet, and one of my absolute favourite songs!
Author's Response: Thanks! Isn't Snow Patrol just like the best?
Date: May 13, 2008 11:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh this is splendid indeed. From the mood you created in the beginning with the intimacy of them saying I love you in bed...to the intimacy of them voicing their deepest fears to one another (and by the way I have to tell you I loved that whole thing about Jim obsessing on ways he could lose her). I think so many people experience fears like that they would never share becuase there's so "weird"...I loved the sneak peak into Jim's psyche.
Author's Response: Thanks! My favorite part was Jim's obsession, I almost scrapped the whole rest of the story and wrote one just about him being terrified of losing her. I'm so glad that you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: May 13, 2008 10:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like this. "Epic fail". Haha... I hope you write more soon!
Author's Response: Thanks!
8 [Report This]Date: May 13, 2008 09:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nothing to be nervous about here - this was a great story, very well written and a fresh look at our favorite couple. I really like how the lyrics go so perfectly with the vignette that accompanies it. My favorite part was "Just because I'm sorry doesn't mean I didn't enjoy it at the time." As much as it pains me to admit it, I really enjoyed the part with Karen and Jim.
Congrats on posting your first fic here - I hope we see more from you.....soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! Karen and Jim's relationship fascinates me for some reason, just as Toby's obsession with Pam fascinates me. I'm all about the Jim and Pam love, but it's interesting to see it from the view of other people. I hope we see more from me soon too!
7 [Report This]Date: May 13, 2008 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
I have to mention some lines I loved, because they were just genius.
"He worries about salmonella in the food she eats..." Can't really explain it. Just love this.
"Epic fail..." How much do I love that Pam says epic fail? SO much. I bet she loves lolcats too.
"By the way Pam, I think about you dying sometimes in horrific ways" Smooth, Jim. Very smooth. ;)
"or had no arms or legs" Just the fact that it's one of the first places she goes. Maybe it's all the talk about the bayler?
Well, I must say this was fantastic. Loved every minute of it. :)
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! Yes, I'm pretty sure Pam is a huge lolcat fan, and if Jim lost his arms and legs, it would definitely be the bayler's fault, and I would hope Pam would still love him. I love that you love the line about the salmonella! Epic success! Thanks for reading!
Date: May 13, 2008 08:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
Excellent well written, I'd love to read your take on the Beesley's and Halperts together for the weekend and of course the proposal.
Thanks,
B
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: May 13, 2008 08:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. You captured the characters so well. I loved it.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: May 13, 2008 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
First fic? I don't believe you. Continue.
Great scenarios, perfect voices, no unnecessary frills, real true emotions. You captured them to a T and wrote them beautifully. Loved the reality of her thinking about and missing Roy sometimes, and Jim thinking about Karen. I loved that he put snow tires on her car!
What a lovely read. Welcome, bashert!
Author's Response: Thanks for the welcome Sweetpea! As a resident of Pennsylvania myself, I know how important snow tires are. I would keep any boyfriend who put snow tires on my car! I'm so glad you think I did the characters justice.
Date: May 13, 2008 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nervous?! You have no reason to be nervous because this was fantastic. I loved how each of the little vignettes built up to the last one. Even though there were still a few things left unresolved I felt like I knew it was going to end up okay. Thanks for the great read!
Author's Response: Whew. I'm so glad you liked it! I didn't want to neatly wrap up all of their communication issues, because I figured that's not how relationships in real life work. Thanks for the great review!
Date: May 13, 2008 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Congrats on an awesome first Jam fic! I thought you did a really good job of brining out everything Jim and Pam are dealing with at this point in their relationship- individually and together. The dialog and thoughts flowed really well...so, congrats! I know you probably intended for this to be a one shot, but I'm sure I'm not the only one who'd like to read more :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I did intend it to be a one-shot, but I do love the idea of the two of them working on their poor communication skills.
Date: May 13, 2008 07:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like this. I especially like your observation that Pam and Jim may be too focused on protecting each other to communicate well.
Author's Response: They both seem the type to be constantly trying to shield the other's feelings. They just need to talk.