Date: October 11, 2008 09:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
ADORABLE!!!
Date: June 27, 2008 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Poor Jim, doing such a sweet thing and Pam thinks it's Roy stocking her yogurt... I'm glad she found out, and I love how you gave us the backstory for that line from the show.
Date: June 19, 2008 11:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
This has got to be on of the sweetest little snippets I've read in a long time! I can definitely see Jim doing this sort of thing... So much love for this!
Date: June 18, 2008 09:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
First let me say, wow, I've never read an explanation for the yogurt, and I love it. Second, you made Jim even more perfect than he already was. So, you're pretty awesome. I love that opening paragraph.
Date: June 18, 2008 06:12 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so sweet and a great backstory to their rooftop confessions. Looking forward to more of your work!
Date: June 17, 2008 08:38 am Title: Chapter 1
You're a natural storyteller, Dee Dee.
He'd always had a tendency to notice things that other people didn't, like the way his mother smiled when she put her wedding ring back on after washing dishes. He was only a little kid, but she did it every time, and it was hard not to notice. Whenever his father folded the laundry, he would fold his own clothes haphazardly, but take time and care on his wife's. And Jim noticed that neither of them ever noticed. He got it into his head, then, that love was often not noticed. Love those images. So sweet.
Date: June 16, 2008 09:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Awwww. So sweet. Very Jim-like. I love the tone you take in your prose. You use simple, lovely sentences that make it almost fairy-tale like. And I don't mean childish, just heightened reality. Thank you for this.
Date: June 15, 2008 03:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aww I like this. Creative idea for why that moment was the moment Pam knew.
I also like the idea that Jim's parents were a happy couple, I think it fits for his character.
Date: June 14, 2008 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
awwww. "but if there was yogurt, it was made of berries, and those berries were mixed." haha, i love this sentence.
Date: June 14, 2008 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Cute! I love it.
Definitely something I could see Jim doing. Adorable.