1 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2023 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh very well done. Could totally see this as happening, wish there was more!!
10 [Report This]Date: May 15, 2007 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
I wasn't expecting to comment on this so long after it's been posted...but WOW. That was really, really awesome. I totally think you should write another chapter from Pam's POV if you have the free time and the inspiration to do it. :)
Date: February 19, 2007 11:36 am Title: Chapter 1
This was the perfect fic - hot and funny and (I thought) in character. I love toread smut from a guy's perspective. The coarseness of the language makes everything that much hotter. Guh.
Did you ever post the Pam POV fic mention in other reviews? Because I'd love to read it!
10 [Report This]Date: February 10, 2007 09:35 am Title: Chapter 1
You somehow have managed to make this fic all things all at once, running the gamut through humour, ensemble characters, smut, and angst in so very few words. Kudos.
10 [Report This]Date: September 22, 2006 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
um.
wow.
that was ... just ...
wow.
Date: September 20, 2006 06:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Wait...that's it? It's completed. I think you could work out one more chapter? No?
Author's Response: I hadn't planned on writing more but all the encouraging reviews have stimulated my Muse. So I have in the works Pam's POV of the conversation. Not so much a sequel as a companion to it. I'm hoping to get it up sometime on the weekend.
10 [Report This]Date: September 19, 2006 08:29 am Title: Chapter 1
That was so HOT , yet sad..... great story !!! Loved it !!
Author's Response: Thank you very much!
10 [Report This]Date: September 18, 2006 10:14 am Title: Chapter 1
Yowza. Their beginning banter about Phyllis was spot-on and the ending was so incredibly sad--I could totally see Jim feeling guilty & ashamed after that. And everything in between....sure a bit OOC for Pam, but so hot that it didn't bother me much :)
And I have to agree...I wouldn't mind reading a Pam POV for this one...
Author's Response: Thank you. I think I am now obsessed with shamed filled Jim. Stay tuned for Pam's POV...
10 [Report This]Date: September 18, 2006 06:45 am Title: Chapter 1
Hot but oh so sad. I would have liked to know what Pam was doing.;)
Author's Response: Ask and ye shall receive. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Date: September 18, 2006 03:24 am Title: Chapter 1
This was hot. Poor Jim. Pam is certainly careless with his feelings.
Author's Response: Thanks. I like to think that Pam did what she did partly because she enjoys the way that Jim can make her feel wanted and partly because she thought she was doing him a "favour" of sorts. Giving him a small part of what he can't have, I guess.
10 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2006 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh - poor Jim at the end!
Their pre-phone-sex banter was spot on, you did a great job there.
You were right about warning that Pam was OOC, but it didn't bother me that much...I kinda got too caught up in the story, ahem, to mind very much.
I think you have a future in Jam-smut...if you can make them this hot over the phone, I shudder to think of what they could do in person...
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I was worried most about the pre-phone sex banter. I wasn't quite sure if it worked or not.
8 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2006 04:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
First? Pre-sex, their dialogue is very in character. Great job with that.
From that point on, the situation and Jim's POV is incredibly hot. And the possibility that Pam was masterbating on the other end of the line pushed it into super hot.
And this?...
"Pam, I-Oh, God...Pam!" he groaned between clenched teeth,...
SCORCHING.
So, welcome to MTT! What's your next story?
Author's Response: Thanks for the welcome. Next story looks to be Pam's POV of the conversation.
10 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2006 03:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved the phone exchange about Phyllis's one night stand. And the erotica that followed was very hot, even though, as you said, it was OOC for Pam.
Author's Response: Thanks, I wasn't quite sure about the whole Phyllis thing but I guess it worked.
6 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2006 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
I thought your story was well written, and it was funny to read their exchange where they try to guess who Phyllis's one night stand was. I had an issue though with characterization, which took me out of the story. I know you warned about it in your notes at the beginning. I couldn't really recognize both Pam and Jim in being so explicit. Pam and Jim are so much about what is unspoken between them that I just don't think she could be that forward, at least not without having been dating Jim for a while. But certainly, YMMV.
Author's Response: When I was finished, I realised that the story was less about Jim and Pam the characters and more about the tragic side to their relationship. Something outside the box, I suppose. Thank you for the construcive critism, I do appreciate it.
Date: September 17, 2006 12:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well... *gulp.*
Works for me, if you know what I mean, and I think you do.
Welcome to MTT! Hope to read more of your work!
Author's Response: My first review! Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it.