9 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2016 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Again, I'm reading this about 8 years late, but man, you brought tears to my eyes with that phone conversation. Actually with both of them. Hurt sad tears during the drunken conversation, something more like hopeful happy tears near the end. It hurt, but it was good.
Date: August 03, 2008 03:49 pm Title: Chapter 4
Is this the end? It works as an ending, optimistically looking into the future. But I'd love more as well because I really enjoyed this.
Date: August 03, 2008 07:10 am Title: Chapter 4
This is the most amazingly real and well written drunk dialing I have ever read. Seriously. You handled Jim perfectly- he has to get angry SOMETIME and you having it come out of being hurt was a very good reason.
Also, Jim having the guts to call her back (almost too late!) was brave, but keeping him a little reticent was a good call because Pam held all the cards as far as knowing what had been said- he really would have been aware of the disadvantage.
Great ending- realistic I think.
Also, Call and Answer? I've seen BNL live several times (helps that I'm Canadian) and it's always dead quiet in the crowd when this one is sung. It's great.
7 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2008 10:55 pm Title: Chapter 4
yay! this was really wonderful. angsty, yes, but the good kind - the right kind. nothing too specific to say, but i really enjoyed the read.
10 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2008 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 4
This was a amazing, as was the rest of this story. You carried though the awkwardness and hopefulness of the phone call perfectly. They were both so cautious, yet each willed themselves to be just courageous enough to say what they needed to and figure out what the other was thinking. I really, really love what you did with this story and I'm sad to see it go. Looking forward to your next story. Thank you, again, for sharing this lovely story.
Date: August 01, 2008 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 4
Great AU story!
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 4
See, kids, that wasn't so hard, right? I think you struck just right the balance here, with them making progress but not getting past all their issues in one fell swoop. Also, a tremendous job writing the conversation...very, very real and well paced. I will look forward to the epilogue.
Author's Response: Well truthfully this could go on and on, but I will refrain from that. Perhaps just what we were discussing for the epilogue. However I did buy the books for my class today, so....I may be busy (yea!). Thanks for listening to all my childish rants.
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 11:43 am Title: Chapter 4
I felt a bit let down at the end of this chapter, so I waited a while and read it again. I realized my feelings were not from anything lacking, but simply because it was over! I really think you captured them both so well that I don't want to leave this little universe - I want to know what happens next!! Well done, uncgirl. :-)
Author's Response: I'm so grateful for this review moxie. I was really sort of flummoxed by the lack of response to this chapter, but at the same time I worried that people wouldn't really like the "end" from the get-go. But I cannot tell you how much I appreciate the fact that you really told me your initial and secondary responses to it. I'm happy that you liked it better on second read and really I love this little universe too. We never get a full conversation on film with them, and I really enjoyed being able to just "listen" to them. Weird? I hope not. Thank you for all the kind words. I really value your opinion highly.
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 10:02 am Title: Chapter 4
Oh, PLEASE don't mark the story complete!!! PLEASE write more than an epilogue! Take your time, by all means but ADD MORE! It's a really good story.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you took the time to review. I'm a push over and I probably will, but as I said, it will take time. I'm SLOOOOW. Speaking of updates and time, it's time for an update on yours don't you think? ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 06:58 am Title: Chapter 1
Hi! Me again!
So, I loved the newest chapter. You know, I thought it was going to be one of those fighting phone matches where Jim and Pam both shout at each other through the PHONE.
But, you took to it to a whole new angle and it was wonderful. I mean, it wasn't angsty and you also got the tones all wonderful AGAIN. Actually, my favourite part was when Pam was like, I thought you were going to stand me up, or something.
It was awesome. And I loved like this entire story. You know, it's not those normal stories you read so much. This story actually brings points across and it seems like you wrote it because you want to put in your OWN views and you love writing the fic and you wanna just make people see in your point of views too instead of some idiots who just write for the SAKE of writing.
I think you earn alot of kudos for this wonderful fic. I will be your number one reviewer, I hope.
Wonderful, awesome and loveable. Keep up the awesome-filled work!!
Author's Response: Oh you are number one in my book! Seriously, I'm not sure I deserve all your praise, but I surely appreciate it! I work really really hard on realism, and character. Sure, I'd love to write some glossy romance but in the end I just don't have it in me. Again, not sure what that says. But I learned so much about these characters the last few pieces I've written. And I love when that happens. I can't tell you have much it means to me that you took the time to review and I'm very happy you liked it.
9 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 06:46 am Title: Chapter 4
Write an epilogue. I haven't even read this chapter yet, but I know there has to be more. Why you ask? Because I say so!
I think this work could double as a anti-drinking piece. Halfway. It got some things said that needed to be said. But the not remembering... thats kind of bad.
"comfiest sweatpants and his favorite Death Cab t-shirt"
Nice /Kevin
“I’m so sorry, I didn’t mean to…do that.”
Very Jimmy
But they did need to yell. Yelling is healthy. Not fun. But, one of those sucky necessary parts of relationships. Disagreements. Talking it out. Screaming until you are blue in the face. Making up.
Mad about Roy. And the what he did to Pam. How he broke her in some ways.
So cute (and in character) how they never really know what to say.
“Oh yeah, I’m sure if you were Stanley he would have done the exact same thing.”
Stanley and Michael = OTP.
"“…best friend, I know.” He sighed, right back to same place they started months ago. "
*sigh* But no. I mean, yes, she misses you as a best friend, but more than that Jim. I miss my best friends when they disappear for a day, heck, even an hour. But I never miss them in the way that Pam misses you. Never.
"“Because you were right.”"
BEST LINE EVER! YOU ARE SO NOT EVIL! LIKE, A MILLION TIMES OVER NOT EVIL!
Man, that next part kind of brings back the pain of he secret all over again. I remember in the commentary how one time, Jenna walked back to her desk and cried, and with your interpretation, I could totally see why!
“So…where to from here?”
Hmm, "where do we go from here...where do we go from here.... the battle's done, and we kind of won.." what, you aren't singing buffy right now? Just me... *shuts up*
Its never too late Pam.
write the epilogue lady! I want more. Like now.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much.... I probably will, but it will take time. I'm glad you liked it, I worried people wouldn't, it isn't flashy or anything, but I liked the dance they did with each other. And I'll glad you loved "the line" because I have to say, I thought that was GOOD. ;-) And I'm very glad I'm not evil anymore.
9 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2008 03:47 am Title: Chapter 4
While I'm hoping you can muster up an epilogue, this ends quite nicely just as it is. Great job, uncgirl. Thanks for the happy : )
Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews! Really it's been so fun with this fic. I'm not saying that the epilogue won't happen, I just don't want people constantly checking for updates at this point because as we both know, I can take a long time to draft and update. I figured it was best to be upfront. Thanks for sticking with me the whole way!
Date: July 30, 2008 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
Somehow my last review got cut off! Anyways, I've loved reading this story and whether it ends with an epilogue/kiss or not...I've loved reading it!
Date: July 30, 2008 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 4
Aww....sweet. I wish it would of ended with a kiss however....so an epilogue would be reall nice!! If you're up to it!
Author's Response: Well I hear ya about the kiss. Oddly enough I had that exactly conversation with xoxoxo saying that I thought I should do an epi with a smooch. But for sure I couldn't quite figure out how to work it into this chapter without one of them doing kissy noises in the phone and really we both know that's no good. :-)
9 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2008 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 4
This has been a wonderful read. Very difficult at times because of the raw emotion but real all the more for that. I've been enjoying it. Will there be more chapters? I hope so.
Author's Response: There may be. I didn't want people to feel that there wasn't a real resolution here. But it did take me two months to write this, so I just wanted to be sure people knew that if there is more, it will take time. I'm so happy you liked it, and I've had such fun watching people's responses to it. Thank you for taking a moment to review.
Date: July 30, 2008 06:07 pm Title: Chapter 3
I'm really enjoying this story, even though that phone convo from the last chapter was so painful. But it was also quite realistic, and I could easily see Jim saying a few things he normally wouldn't while under the influence.
Nice to see Pam taking the lead again in an attempt to salvage their relationship. Good for FNB. Don't let him get away this time!
Author's Response: So happy you are liking it EH! I was trying for realism, I guess I've been trying to make a point of what could really happy the last few fics I've done. It's something that I work hard on, so it means so much that it does seem real to you, the reader. Thanks the review, and I think she'll do her best, don't you?
Date: July 30, 2008 11:28 am Title: Chapter 3
Outstanding! Please makeit all better now.
B
Author's Response: I will! Thank again for reviewing! And I'm so very happy you're enjoying it.
Date: July 29, 2008 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 3
Very Pam-ish to be assertive enough to call him, but do it with the safety of doing it at work... and then leaving it up to him to call her that evening.
Oh for the love of humanity do not leave us hanging too long!
:)
Author's Response:
I think that's very them, put it out there, take it back, put it out there, take it back. I'm so happy you liked it, and thank you for taking the time to review. I won't leave you hanging much longer.
Date: July 29, 2008 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is a good drunk!Jim conversation I think... drunk man's words = sober man's thoughts, so this chapter rings true to me. I really like this so far!
Date: July 29, 2008 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
ARRGHGghghh..oh curse you and your cliff-hanging chapter. No. No. Love you. Write more please! Love seeing your take on drunk/hurtin' Jim. Love Pam and her courage. Rock on, uncgirl and I'll try to rein in the hysteria.
(NOT a weak chapter, plenty happened...)
Author's Response: HAHAHA.....okay so this may be my favorite review ever! I won't leave you hanging much longer....and I'm so happy you love it. May I say I think we are a match made in heaven, Mint Choc Chip is my favorite.
Date: July 29, 2008 12:34 pm Title: Chapter 3
She didn't sleep at all? Thats.... not a lot of sleep.
" so alone and so broken"
Man, that just hurts.
Crying in the shower .... its like, its.... well, I've probably cried in the shower more times than I should admit, but also, in the rain, those two places are like, it sort of adds to the sadness factor. It always seems to be a better place to cry. Maybe its just more pathetic and alone and so, you cry. But... is this making any more sense. But, there was a point, but I think I lost it quite a while ago.
Pam, Jim loves you so much, he would be in pain for the rest of his life if... well, everyhing that happened never happened. I would hope he would evetually be able to maybe move on. But I think if, in 10 years, he ran into you again, it would still be painful.
Just admit it Pam. You are amazing, and Jim is totally, completely, 100% in love with you. And you are with him.
And that kind of rocks.
Wait? What? Jim is real and... not perfect? Not that knight in shining armor?
Damn, that kind of sucks. Because he is still fictional!
" piece him back together"
:O..... Jim is Humpty Dumpty?
Jim, that is like... the waking place of shame, dude.
Oh, nothing happened last night. Just the most painful drunken conversation EVER. Nothing big Jim. Its okay you forgot!
Pam got me addicted to Sudoku. True story.
"Man, I'm so in love with you. I look like an old fart." Yeah, it doesn't really flow as well as the real love songs, does it?
Pam, if you are going to hide from the world, its so much better to just stay home. The bathroom is gross. Home is nice.
Yay! Pam in a ponytail!
Much friendlier start than last night. Thas a start right?
:( You and the evil cliffhangers. You are evil. Like, with devil horns.
Oh, fine, I guess since you are having a crappy work sitatuion maybe I won't call you evil. Or at least I'll take away the devil horns comment. So evil. Without devil horns.
Author's Response:
Ok, seriously, I am NOT EVIL. I am a tease, I thought we cleared that up.
I will post, work drama is over now. But it's been one of those come home and curl up on the couch and want to do nothing weeks. Again, i love your review, it's like reading with you. And yes, something about the ponytail made me happy to. Like watch out world, I am putting my hair up!
Date: July 29, 2008 11:37 am Title: Chapter 3
This is really good so far. I think by the time they got together they'd both resolved a lot of this hurt by themselves. If they'd gotten to it earlier, they really may have needed a good cathartic shouting match. I like how you let them start to resume a little of their normal banter in this chapter, while still showing the strain. I'm interested in what's next!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing. I do think that in S3 I felt like they really needed to get it out, and I do think this would have happened, especially with the addition of alcohol. But you are right, by now, and by the time that they did get together, I think that so much time had passed that perhaps they could be more rational. Some times I wonder if they have ever really addressed it all, they do seem to be a couple that would prefer to let something go instead of talk too much about it if it is painful, especially Jim. But anyway, I'm glad you're still liking it.
Date: July 29, 2008 11:11 am Title: Chapter 3
The morning after… I think it’s very enlightening to Pam she finally realized how hurt Jim was after Casino Night. Unfortunately, Pam realized the truth only after the harshness and honesty of her conversation w/ Jim the previous night. The visual of Pam in the break room suddenly looking old was a great visual of the physical toll Jim’s absence and words took on Pam. I like that this story is a realistic approach about how Pam and Jim where at that time in their “love story.” Both still hurt and angry with each other for what happened and for what did not happen. (Sidebar: congratulations on taking the first step to a possible life change… if you love it, it will be a perfect fit for you.)
Author's Response:
I think that the whole thing with Pam in this chapter was something I really learned about her by writing this. I'll admit I don't ponder on internal motivation that much with the show outside of when I read good fic or if I'm writing. So I hadn't thought that deeply about whether or not she understood his scars. Especially in light of her actions in S3. But in writing it, I thought about how he would suddenly seems so complex in the morning whereas she had always seen him lighthearted and happy. I'm thrilled that it turned out and read well, and I actually I love that it gave me the chance to learn more about Pam.
Thanks for the encouraging words. I was thinking today, I mean worst case scenario, I make a change and come back to law when I'm not so burnt out. I think I would love it though. I hope that you are also doing well. As I said, you live in a state with one of the hardest tests EVER. I'll be rooting for you, you're going to do it!
10 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2008 10:04 am Title: Chapter 1
As usual, I do my first read through and if I like a fic, I go back and try to give specifics of what I like. So, this is just my initial review saying, "Fantastic!" I love this so far and I have a soft place in my heart for angry!drunk!Jim and the way you've articulated so many of their feelings so well. Now, I'll try to come back soon and pick out some specifics for you (because I know how great that is). But for now: keep it up!
8 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2008 06:51 am Title: Chapter 3
Not a weak chapter at all! So sorry to hear that you're having a hard time at work. I hope that turns around soon. Still loving this story. I look forward to their talk.
Author's Response:
I think I feel that this is weak because it is a bridge between two BIG conversations between them and it seems a little ho-hum knowing what came before and what comes after. I couldn't tell if it could stand alone....but I'm really happy people liked it. At work? Well, I can't give details, but it was just a bad emotionally draining situation. But it is over now, I hope, and the weekend is close. Thanks for all your support and kind words.