8 [Report This]Date: September 22, 2008 10:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so beautiful. I liked that it was "gushy and romantic" but I beg to differ with you about the "not very original". I think it was quite original and very well written. Great job!
Date: September 10, 2008 01:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
This story is wonderful. It's so fluid and lovely and aching and honest. You should be so proud of yourself. I really wish I had anything but insane, gushing praise for you, but that's all I have. I'm always so excited to see when you have something new posted. Thank you! (The way you write Jim, by the way, is so perfect. He's just perfect!)
Date: September 10, 2008 08:37 am Title: Chapter 1
Gorgeous imagery as usual. But I love the melted butter one so much.
And this is timely for me personally because I'm definitely feeling like I've missed out on something by not living in another state before. Traveling the world had been enough but I definitely can relate to Pam's wish to truly experience someplace else.
Date: September 09, 2008 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is really good. I have to confess I haven't been reading much fanfic lately, or at least not Office stuff, but this caught my eye and I'm so glad it did. What a lovely little piece. Well done!
Date: September 09, 2008 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Welcome back, dear! I was thrilled to read a new story from you. It's nice to see that Pam can start to feel a little more cosmopolitan in NYC, but not forget about her paper salesman in Scranton. And of course, he'd go anywhere with her.
Lovely writing, beautiful imagery as always.
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful piece. The imagery here is just incredible, as is your portrayal of Pam.
I also love that you've incorporated three of my favourite things into this: Maps, Cheese, and fluff ;)
Date: September 08, 2008 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
My mushy brain can't come up with anything more insightful than: Good. Really good.
Date: September 08, 2008 08:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
what you do is the epitome of word painting...the sun melting like butter on toast...jeez. You're so...great.
Date: September 08, 2008 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Le Sigh. Love this little peek into a side of Pam we don't get to see on the show. Who's to say that a few months in NYC won't open her eyes to some of the other things she wants in her life. And that doesn't preclude Jim.
Your writing in this is like poetry, BTW. So vivid and evocative.
Date: September 08, 2008 05:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
I certainly know what pam is feeling. I was jolted awake when I saw this: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zlfKdbWwruY
I can't travel the world just yet because I'm married with two small kids... but my husband and I have Matt days once a week where we take the kids and go exploring. We hope we are teaching them about the wonder and excitement that the world around us has... and we are training them in the art of travel. One day we will go. Hopefully soon.
Hope you enjoy the link :)
Luchy
9 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
“We don’t have cheese factories in Scranton,” he stated, simple and pleased and exactly the way she wanted him to be forever.
This line is so much love. :)
I really like the imagery in this, it's a very visceral type of story.
Date: September 08, 2008 05:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Truly an amazing type thing! Good to have you back! You're my fave. Still waiting for the novel...
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 03:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is absolutely beautiful. I love the idea of the two of them leaving Scranton, even if eventually they end right back where they started. I love the idea that her summer in New York makes her want to explore other things and places. It's a feeling I can totally relate to.
This is wonderful! I'm so glad to see you back!
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 12:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Tillamook Cheese Factory...yum. Jim and Pam could move here, that would be ok with me. Ok maybe just Jim. :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 12:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lovely. I love that she's sort of aware that they'll probably end up back home, but that there's a whole world to call home if they're together.
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 11:20 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so good! So nicely written without sounding like you're trying too hard. I don't think the largest cheese factory in the world is in Oregon, though. Tillamook is the largest in Oregon.
Author's Response: well we all know how reliable wikipedia is ;-) I'm sure that fact is wrong but I felt like that was ok for Pam to get things a little out of sorts, sort of endearing. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!! And also, the word Tillamook makes me smile, so thanks for that as well.
Date: September 08, 2008 10:54 am Title: Chapter 1
Yay to a new fic by you! And I love the concept too :) Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love this idea too, the whole thing of them being romantic and faux adventurous together, so cute. Thanks for reading and reviewing Jenn!
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 10:44 am Title: Chapter 1
Stablergirl, I just put out an APB on you--yesterday I think--and here you are! You don't know how happy I am to have you back. I've missed you! So sorry you're having trouble with Harold Moran. Sending you inspiration.
This? Fantastic. Yeah, I know I'm a groupie and my opinion probably doesn't count for much but, sincerely (and I am always sincere when reviewing your work), this is beautiful. Your writing is so vivid, and I'm always swept away by it (thus the tendency to gush).
Two of the stand-out passages for me:
Horns honking like angry geese and panhandlers circling like vultures, assuming she was just green enough to give them a few dollars (that whole paragraph actually is great); and,
She sat in a diner and she thought about Minnesota and California and whether their plates of pancakes looked the same.
I love how you've painted Jim and Pam's relationship--so romantic, but so in character.
*bows* You are a goddess : )
Author's Response: NANREG! Shut up, your reviews count for EVERYTHING. Thank you so much for letting me know your thoughts on this piece, lord knows I'm never sure if things get pulled off properly (twss?) and your reviews always reassure. Also, thank you for noticing my absence and caring enough to send out an APB! That is amazing, you're like my comforting internet family, going "uh...she said she would call, this MUST be writer's block." ;-) Love hearing your thoughts, as always. ::bows:: Review dundie goes to you.
10 [Report This]Date: September 08, 2008 10:15 am Title: Chapter 1
What a little beauty this is. It's easy to imagine Pam having a certain sort of wonderlust, that her New York adventure would make her want to see new places. And of course, Jim would go anywhere with her. Pam's vivid take on the Big Apple and the light but weighty conversation at the end are wonderful, and could only have been written by you.
Author's Response: Brokenloon thank you so much (as always) for being the greatest beta ever and keeping my characterization completely in check. My stories would leave many a folk scratching their heads and going "huh?" if it weren't for you. Sox.