10 [Report This]Date: August 19, 2009 05:21 am Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
Yeah! The update I've been waiting for. You were right in a way: while it was awesome as expected, it was also not what I was expecting (does that make sense?)My ideas for what would happen were boring and this is totally original. I loved it! ;)
Author's Response: You just made my day with the "original" comment. *grins like a fool* Thanks!
Date: August 18, 2009 03:56 pm Title: Chapter 3 Dance Me Through the Panic
loved it, especially the last line =]
Author's Response: Aw, thanks ilovetoJAM. That last line was a 3 am addition, so I'm glad you liked it. I love writing LittleBoy!Jim.
10 [Report This]Date: August 18, 2009 11:28 am Title: Chapter 3 Dance Me Through the Panic
Phew! So glad the floor didn't make things difficult between them. I used to eat Lucky Charms' marshmallow too like Jim and now I eat Special "K" (blueberries) like Pam! I gotta stop finding similarities between these 'fictional' characters & myself :D
This chapter was really great! It's obvious that the house holds special memories for Jim and not all of those memories would be good. Jim's story was very plausible since I think sometimes kids internalize stuff like that. I really liked it because it's another glimpse into Jim's childhood. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you bkwrm, I think there is much for Pam to learn about Jim by living in the same house he grew up in, both good and bad. I love trying to "figure out" the character of Jim Halpert. I'm glad you found the story plausable - that's what I was aiming for. And the little marshmallows in Lucky Charms rock. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
10 [Report This]Date: August 17, 2009 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 3 Dance Me Through the Panic
I've enjoyed reading this :)
Author's Response: Glad to hear it, Liv, thanks for the review.
Date: August 17, 2009 06:36 pm Title: Chapter 3 Dance Me Through the Panic
How absolutely lovely! The combination of the rain, the quiet angst they were both feeling, and of course that completely believable childhood story felt absolutely profound. I've never really thought about how many demons Jim could potentially exercise in that house. Loved this.
Author's Response: Thanks lovefool, I'm especially glad you found Jim's story believeable. I would imagine there are a lot of ghosts to be conjured up in this house, so to speak, some good and bad - besides the clown painting. Your comments are much appreciated.
Date: August 17, 2009 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 3 Dance Me Through the Panic
Oh! I like this ending MUCH better! You rock. This one was great! As you know, I just love how you presented Jim reliving those feelings from when he was five. Perfectly melancholy without being babyish or melodramatic. I think you hit it out of the park on this one, jazz!
Author's Response: Thanks VB. I'm glad you liked the "new" ending. Nan liked the "old" end sentence and you didn't, and I was left conflicted and decided to sleep on it. I literally woke up at 3:30 this am and came up with the "new" one. I really appreciate your help.
Date: August 17, 2009 01:49 pm Title: Chapter 3 Dance Me Through the Panic
Another gorgeous chapter. I was hanging on Jim's every word when he delicately recalled his "Optimus Prime" story. The bedroom scene was also very well done ;-)
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it Beeswax, and especially that you liked Jim's little confession. For some reason I love "psychoanalyzing" Jim Halpert. I'm not a big smut writer, so I appreciate your comments there, because I must have written that bedroom scene a dozen times. Thanks for the read and review.
10 [Report This]Date: August 17, 2009 11:22 am Title: Chapter 3 Dance Me Through the Panic
Urm hi, that was awesome.
The end :)
Author's Response: Thanks Hannah_Halpert. I forgot I left that little "The End" in there, but I guess they needed somewhere to dance toward. *snicker*
Date: August 06, 2009 04:01 am Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
Just had a chance to read this last night....and, I don't know...but even "shrill" Pam makes me smile. This is fun...great job!
Author's Response: Mr.Bill, if I didn't know better I'd think you have a thing for Pam. *grin* Thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it.
Date: August 05, 2009 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
I read this story during class this morning! Haha. I love so many things about your story, I love the way you write Jim.
Of course, at this point I'm just afraid of that damn window being open. Close it! Save yourselves the trouble! ;)
Author's Response: I'm delighted I could contribute to your delinquency, yanana, thanks for reading. *grin* I'm also glad you like my version of Jim, but I think it's too late on the window.
10 [Report This]Date: August 04, 2009 09:19 am Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
I, of course, loved this story. It felt very real. I did want to tell you that I came across some spelling mistakes, like when Jim mentions strokes, it says 'stokes' and there are some other places like that too, so you might want to read it over it real fast. I hope you don't think I'm being an annoying reviewer by pointing that out---I really, really loved this! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the heads up on the spelling booboo, I'll fix that one and check it over again. Not annoying at all, I really appreciate your catching it - any time you see something please please tell me - I'm horrible at proofing. Glad you felt the interchange was real, and thanks for reading.
Date: August 04, 2009 05:15 am Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
Saw that this story was recommended this morning and had to come over. I'm on the edge of my seat; can't wait to see the upcoming drama!
Now I shall go and recommend it as well...
Author's Response: WhichOneIsPam09, I hope I don't disappoint with the next chap - I don't think it's exactly what folks will expect, but hopefully it will be interesting just the same. Thanks for the rec and the review.
Date: August 04, 2009 12:09 am Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
I loved this sneak peak into a Jim/Pam fight. Also all the delicious nuggets you dropped in...high blood pressure = no birth control pills....Michael saying something stupid that she might ordinarily be able to brush off...but well...perhaps maybe her emotions are slightly out of wack given the bun in the oven...this is good stuff.
Oh and am I right in thinking that window is open and the floor is getting soaked? oy...ok, on to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Well...about that bun...I might be wrong but our kids have been pretty careful up to this point. That's about to change though. And yeah, the window is still open. I'm glad you're enjoying, and thanks for the review.
Date: August 03, 2009 09:18 pm Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
This is a great story. I love the quiet moments and gradual set up. But let me tell you, this made me sit up straight at my computer:
“No!” He paused a beat. “Wait!” Jim barked, in a voice as strong as she had ever heard him use. Her utter shock at his demanding tone drew her up short - clearly the desired result. Then he continued more gently. “We are not going to do this.”
I absolutely loved this. It made me think of how Jim went through too many years of Pam not saying what she thinks and he won't take that crap anymore.
Oh, and Angry!Jim is also very hot ;-)
Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Hey Beeswax, I'm a big fan of Angry!Jim as well, and I'm glad I improved your posture, if only for a moment. *grin* Their communication has improved though, hasn't it? Thanks for the comments, much appreciated.
Date: August 03, 2009 02:31 pm Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
Well, now, missy ... I have a bone to pick with you. I thought one of the perks of being a beta reader was that you got hints about what's ahead before the general readership does. But, NO, you post this little snippet about the emotional event right here on MTT. Tsk. Tsk.
Seriously, you know I loved it. Can't wait to see the next chapter!
Author's Response: *hangs head* I was just trying to keep everybody from dozing off...give ag gal a break. Thanks again for your help, much appreciated.
9 [Report This]Date: August 03, 2009 01:58 pm Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
I've only heard this song by Ella Fitzgerald. Now I must find the Billie Holliday's version.
On to the story, I really liked reading this: the idea that Jim and Pam have 'off-days' like they once mentioned in Baby Shower. After the day that Pam had at the office, the insults she had to put up with, it's not surprising that a little tidbit like that from Michael made her "shrill" to Jim. What I especially liked was the fact you made Jim calm and understanding instead of bristling at the fact Pam was being irrational.
I'm nervous about the open window, all of Jim's hard work!! I guess you already had Pam's blow up, now it's on to Jim? Also, I'm super curious about this emotional event from Jim's past.
Great job! Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks so much bkwrm, I appreciate your comments! Yes, the open window may pose a problem, but will Jim Halpert actually blow up? And you'll just have to wait and see about the other "event". BTW, I looked for the Billie Holliday version on youtube to link it, but couldn't find one. I know I've heard her sing it - I'll look through my CDs and add the reference to the story when I find it. Nothing wrong with Ella's version though.
Date: August 03, 2009 01:13 pm Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
I'm driving myself crazy shrieking "no polyurethane! no!" :) Can't wait for the rest.
Author's Response: You weren't getting shrill, were you? *laughs* Thanks for reading and reviewing variella - I hope you enjoy the conclusion. It may get a little messy.
9 [Report This]Date: August 03, 2009 11:07 am Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
Dude, you need to hurry up and write this next chapter NOW lol. U want to know what this emotional event is that happens in Jim's life AND if the boy's floor is ruined :)
*added to favourites*
Author's Response: I'm a'workin' on it. I'm glad you're interested to read the conclusion - sometimes little things have big consequences.
9 [Report This]Date: August 03, 2009 10:47 am Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
I'm really enjoying this and cannot wait to see where you take it :)
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch, Hannah_Halpert.
10 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2009 10:16 pm Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
Awesome. Totally in-character. :)
Author's Response: Nice to hear you thought they were written in character, and thanks for sticking with the story, Sarah42.
Date: August 02, 2009 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
Enjoying this story. I love when people explore their home life and normal disagreements that every couple has. Looking forward to what happens when the floor gets rained on, oops!
Author's Response: Thanks EH, I was worried that folks would find these first couple of chapters just plain boring to read, but they are necessary for the setup of the final chapter. I'm happy that you're enjoying their "little moments." /Angela Yes, the window is open, and you know what the weatherman predicted, but that problem is still leadup as well. The really intense drama in this story occurs when Jim starts to take up some quarter rounds. Seriously. Thanks a bunch for the review, and for giving it a read.rn
10 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2009 07:09 pm Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
“To Pamela Morgan Beesly – the fish faced, shrill Dunder Mifflin saleswoman who will never, ever, have to make another copy or take another message for Dwight K. Schrute, no matter how many times he calls her a secretary.” Love that :)
Author's Response: It's a strange toast, but it was a strange day. And Jim is a little buzzed. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: August 02, 2009 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
aw, very nice. crossing my fingers that jim doesn't get mad about pam opening the window, i hope not. then again, i love when they fight, because they're still so respectful and are so sweet. (not that it's good to fight, but they do it well!)
Author's Response: The window will cause friction, but it's still leadup to another incident that's going to to promt the real drama in the story. Thanks so much for reading and for your comments.
9 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2009 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 2 Staple it Together and Call It Bad Weather
I really enjoyed this! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks Dwangie!
9 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2009 06:12 pm Title: Chapter 1 ill wind
I like it already! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Part of the third chap is written, so I'm really hoping for next week on the conclusion. Thanks for your encouragement.