Date: September 22, 2010 09:57 am Title: Chapter 1
Thats rough. opening line= punch in the gut.
10 [Report This]Date: February 17, 2010 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was heartbreaking.... Beautifully done. Sad, sad, sad. But really good. Wow.
Date: February 16, 2010 08:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Not stupid. Really sad though. I'm glad you left it on a note of hope and recovery.
Date: February 16, 2010 12:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well that about killed me dead. Beautifully sad and well-written. Use your powers for good next time, will ya? :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2010 09:00 am Title: Chapter 1
OK so here's the thing. I saw the first line, and almost hit the back button. See, I can't read about character death. But I couldn't stop reading this. And I cried. And my co worker thinks I'm insane now. You're amazing with ever single writing genre that exists in this world, Yanana.
9 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2010 06:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Why'd you go and do that to me, yanana, huh? Why? I hate this type of story but it was a yanana story so I had to read it. You really did a good job, as usual, but you stuck a knife through my heart before 9:00 a.m. *sigh* Guess I'm having chocolate for breakfast today.
10 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 11:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
God, so not stupid, like at all. This was amazing. So beautiful and sad, yet heart warming. I think I literally heard my heart break in two when Pam died. How you wrote Abbey sitting next to Pam, touching her lips... ahhh!!!
I love good angst and you my friend are like my dealer... my provider.
So AMAZING!
10 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 08:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Christ! SO, so sad! I hate when Pam dies! This was well written and true to life. I can totally relate to this...
"And all I can do in those moments, as mindless as they are, is think, God, if you bring her back, I will do anything you or Pam or this baby or anybody ever wants me to do. And I mean it. I know I do. I'd quit this stupid job, or I'd work sixteen hour days. I don't care. I would do it. I just need her back."
And that, for me, makes this story so real, because I could see anyone making that promise and KNOWING they would, in fact, do anything just to have their loved one back.
Something happy now, 'K? Please? Or angsty with a happy (live-ly) ending. Whichever!
Date: February 15, 2010 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
So sad! I think an obvious choice in a death fic is to end with someone dying. I like that you didn't take the cliche choice, making this not a death fic, but a survivor's story. Seeing how Jim is coping is just heartbreaking. I'd love to see this story continue, though I can definitely say I wouldn't love to see it take the "Jim finds someone new" angle. But it would be great to see Jim and Abby, with flashbacks, stories and imaginings of Pam.
If you want.
Date: February 15, 2010 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
This isn't stupid at all. It's very well done. I like the way you handle Jim's progression in his grief.
8 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 06:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
So very sad, but not at all stupid. You did a great job with a very tragic story. And yes, those are tears in my eyes, why do you ask?
Date: February 15, 2010 05:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really sad. But OMG lady.. it's VERY well written! I like pieces like theses... It kind of makes you consider these characters under a different light. I really enjoyed reading this, as heartbreaking as it was, but you captured something special here.
10 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 03:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
My goodness, I hate stories where Jim and Pam die - but this was actually a good one. (If that's possible, to like something you hate, you know...)
Very well written, incredibly realistic and just heartbreaking in all the right places. I felt all of Jim's sadness, anger and emotions that you were working to capture, and I'm so surprised at how well you made the reader feel what Jim was. Great job and although I didn't like the circumstances for this story (I mean, who does???) this was actually really wonderful.
10 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 02:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yanana, there is absolutely NOTHING "stupid" about this. Nothing. I think it's touching and just...gah!Achingly beautiful. You should be very proud.