Date: March 13, 2010 12:22 pm Title: Chapter 4
Yep, another FINE chapter! I hope you are going to let us see Pam's sketch of Jim. I think you're capturing the hesitation between them as they rekindle their relationship perfectly. Looking forward to the next one!
Author's Response: I will try to slip Pam's sketch of Jimbo somewhere in the next chapter, definitely. Just gotta think of the perfect thing. Thank you so much for reviewing!!
Date: March 13, 2010 11:30 am Title: Chapter 4
That was so sweet that they were happy for a little minute. But keep going and I hope that Jim (NOT KAREN) show up! Don't ditch Pam! Don't ditch Pam! Is what's chanting through my mind. Then again, it would be kind of cool for Jim and Karen to break up before or at the art show, but that could bew kind of awkward.
Okay, I'll stop plotting/writing your story for your and wait to see what you come up with. I can't wait, this story is great so far!
Date: March 13, 2010 09:02 am Title: Chapter 4
Very c ute indeed. I love where you are going with this, and I loved Angela at the end :)
Author's Response: I like to close my chapters neatly, and when I wrote about Jim thinking of his interactions with Pam as a 'game he doesn't know the name to' ... I remembered it DOES have a name: Pam Pong. ;) I'm so happy I'm making the right moves! Thank you for all your kind reviews.
Date: March 13, 2010 08:13 am Title: Chapter 4
I'm always happy to see your updates. More soon, please. :)
Author's Response: I promise it's on its way, haha. I already have the art show designed in my brain. Just a matter of getting it down before it goes away!
8 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2010 07:51 am Title: Chapter 4
Really enjoying this story andthe careful and thoughtful interactions between Jim and Pam. Looking forward to the art show and yes, even more angst :)
Author's Response: Angst is so fun to read an write, which makes season 3 a feast for writers. ;D Thank you kindly for reviewing!
Date: March 13, 2010 06:50 am Title: Chapter 4
It’s like running a play on the court; all motions and memorization for a game that he doesn’t know the name to. It's always been that, hasn't it?
“Hey,” he greets, feeling like a buffoon and thinking that Karen’s probably staring daggers behind him. He sees Pam’s gaze flicker briefly beyond his shoulder, and he knows it, now. I can envision that so clearly--all of this, really.
Pam looks delighted, and his heart skips a beat like picking up a game of hopscotch. I can't recall having read hopscotch referenced before. I really like it for some reason.
Excellent job at conveying a nervous, anxious, joyful mood here, Mel.
Author's Response: I really liked the hopscotch line, too. It kinda seems like a good description of the sudden jumping of the heart like in Jim's sitch. Thank you again for your awesome reviews, I'm so pleased you're enjoying this. :D
Date: March 13, 2010 06:02 am Title: Chapter 4
I just opened this, thinking I'd read a chapter or two, and ended up reading the whole story (so far.) Your writing is so well worded, the small character moments are so sharply observed, that this really has a sense of...not sure of the word...presence? Their states of mind at that conflicted point in time are really palpable. Even Karen makes sense, lol. Anyway, I don't have time at the moment to go into particular passages (or be very articulate, apparently ;-) but I'm really liking this and looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! That's so flattering, especially since I'm a huuuge fan of your writing on here. I'm really happy tha everything is coming across so well, so again, thank you. :)
Date: March 12, 2010 06:49 am Title: Chapter 3
I love this! I miss the angst, honestly. I really loved this: It’s one of the most fulfilling conversations she can ever remember having in the office.
Well, one that wasn’t involving Jim, of course.
so spot on :)
Author's Response: Awww, thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you're enjoying! Yeah, I'm saddened to realize we will never have the same amount of grief and heartache like s3. That's why we have fanfic, I guess!
Date: March 11, 2010 08:06 pm Title: Chapter 3
Nice job bringing up the FTC, haha. And the teapot (not for you, Karen, honey).
Author's Response: Haha indeed! I love the FTC so much. And the teapot, it's one of the best things on the show, I'm glad they kindahave it in the background of some scenes. Thanks again for reviewing!
Date: March 11, 2010 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 2
Okay, I thought I was going to hold off on this until it was finished because all these great angsty WIPs make me impatient. But this is just too good, and I caved. Moving onto chapter three.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2010 05:04 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wow, I really loved this chapter. And the teapot part, heartbreaking. Karen, get your hands off of Pam's little piece of Jim. (not in a TWSS way...)
Author's Response: I knew I wanted to include the teapot when I thought about Branch Wars, and how Pam was still using the teapot during Finer Things Club. It's one of the most significant items on the show, and I love little reminders like that.
Date: March 11, 2010 12:40 pm Title: Chapter 3
This definitely fits, and I love the chance to see things from both angles. I particularly liked the talking heads sections. Can't wait for more :)
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Date: March 11, 2010 08:19 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm really fond of this, too, Mel. The teapot was a nice little touch, as was the seed of The Finer Things Club.
Author's Response: I love both the teapot and the Finer Things Club so much. And I love implementing "reminders" in my fics, just 'cause they're fun and I enjoy seeing them in other writings, too. :) Thank you for reviewing!!
Date: March 11, 2010 05:58 am Title: Chapter 3
Ooh...what does he decide??
I was thinking while reading this chapter that Jim was always that character who had trouble saying what he felt until he really needed to say it, then he would be very simple and direct about it: Let's break up (to Katy), I'm in love with you, Yes (to Karen's question about if he still has feelings for Pam), Will you marry me?
Nothing extra or no flowery lead ups.
You're doing so well at showing that Jim-queasiness that comes before anything that really needs to be said is said. I'm looking forward to what happens next.
Author's Response: He decides on two things: 1) Grape soda 2) .... you'll see. ;) And you're absolutely right about Jim. He's not close to confessing to anything (yet...) but it'll probably be alot like that when/if I get to that part of the fic. I'm glad I'm portraying him well, since he's so fun to write for.
Date: March 11, 2010 05:00 am Title: Chapter 3
Is it silly that I may have let out a little whoop when he picked grape? Nice touch. I also thought that Jim kissing Karen instead of answering was very in character. He could never quite make himself verbally lie, could he? Nice job.
Author's Response: Hahaa, not silly at all! That's what I was going for. It's kind of like a little victory, like when (in the show) Jim asks Pam to help him destroy Andy's sanity after Karen tells him no. And I'm pretty happy with having him kiss Karen instead of telling her a lie or the truth. Jim in season 3 was kind of taking the easy way out of alot of things, and he's not quite to the place where he's ready to just deal. We'll get there, though. ;) Thanks so much for your reviews!!
Date: March 11, 2010 04:56 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm so glad you've updated! I like the pace of this. I'm enjoying every chapter. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you're enjoying, and I'm formulating how to write out the next chapter. Hopefully it'll be done by the end of the week. :)
Date: March 11, 2010 04:02 am Title: Chapter 3
Ohhh I have to agree with you, I LOVE how this chapter turned out. This is getting sogood and I cannot wait to see where you go with it.
Season 2/3 angst is sooo good!!!
Author's Response: This was a fun chapter to write, I loved going back and forth between the two. I'm pleased that you're enjoying this! And you're right, the angst is just wonderful to wallow in. Especially since we'll probably never have anymore, now that they've got their perfect life+baby. ;) Thanks for your reviews!!
Date: March 10, 2010 01:10 am Title: Chapter 2
This is soooo good :)
Date: March 09, 2010 09:43 pm Title: Chapter 2
This continues to be awesome. My favorite part:
"But he continues as his hands slip around into his pockets, and he keeps his gaze leveled somewhere at her shoulder. "I've been trying, you know?" He half-wonders of her, looking quickly into her face for a second to spy any agreement. She nods once, and he accepts with an inclination of his head. "It's just … it's been really, really hard. You … have no idea."
"I think I might," Pam dares softly, and she's startled by his sudden glance up. There's that confusion, that scrutiny. Like he's scouring her for the definition of a word that means everything. It's almost intrusive."
That's just plain wonderful.
Author's Response: I was really happy with that part, too. :D I could just imagine the 'intrusiveness' of his stare, since sometimes the way Jim would look at Pam ... it was like he was looking right into her effing soul. Which can be really startling, I think!
Thank you again for reviewing!
Date: March 09, 2010 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 2
Please continue this. I love the angst, but, please, at least let it end happily. 'K? Great job of putting a new spin on the disaster that was Phyllis' Wedding
Author's Response: Haha, fret not! I promise happiness and sunshine in the end. I'm still following what Season 3 gave us, but putting my own spin on things. :D
10 [Report This]Date: March 09, 2010 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is absolutely wonderful! You did such a good job describing the simmering anger beneath the surface. I thought I would DIE when Jim gave Karen the keys and told her to start the car & he'd be down in a minute. What an electric moment. I am VERY much looking forward to the next chapters!
Author's Response: The keys part is probably one of my favorites that I wrote. I'm so glad you're feeling it. Thanks so much for the review!!
Date: March 09, 2010 01:28 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow. This is wonderful, I'm a real sucker for the angst and this is just perfect. You've got s3 Jim and Pam down wonderfully here. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: It's such a relief to hear that I'm nailing them (TWSS). Thanks for the review!!
Date: March 09, 2010 11:46 am Title: Chapter 2
I really like where this is going. Its a different move to write Jim & Pam as they head to the same destination but through a different route. Nice break away from the usual baby stuff.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I really like going back and seeing how things "could have been." One tiny change - Pam saying 'no' to Roy at Phyllis' wedding - could've made a world of difference. I'm trying to stick to what happened in Season 3, but put my spin on it for this story, so like you said: same destination, just a different route. ;)
Date: March 09, 2010 11:35 am Title: Chapter 2
Eeeeee still getting better! I totally loved everything about this chapter, especially this magnetic pull you created between Jim and Pam, especially with Karen there. Awesome, can't wait for more
Author's Response: Even though I love Karen and Jim Halpert was one of the luckiest guys ever to have her, there's no fighting the force between J&P. Thanks for your review!! :D
Date: March 09, 2010 08:03 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm so glad you're continuing; I love stories like this. As happy as I am that they're happy, I do love to wallow in the S3 angst, especially stories that move the action up and stretch the tension out. This is very well written and a believable break in the storyline - I'm looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Happiness is the reward, but the angst is just so good, really. I'm glad it's not such a far-fetched idea; I really think it could've changed alot if Pam had just told Roy 'no' at Phyllis' wedding. Hopefully I can keep true to the season and characters! Thanks so much for reviewing. :)