10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2011 02:21 am Title: Monday
You SO deserve that blue ribbon, this isamazing. I have nothing constructive to say, but thanks for updating and I hope you have something new for us soon. You are super talented and I love this!
Date: January 29, 2011 05:08 pm Title: Monday
Your characterization is so spot-on. I could easily picture all of this. Love everyone injecting their own little comment. "Birth control, man" = LOL! Poor Pam. And Jim. This was just a perfect update. Looking forward to more!
10 [Report This]Date: January 29, 2011 04:55 pm Title: Monday
Glad to see this updated. I forgot about this story, and it's great. I just had to re-read it from the beginning! You've got a great bead on the characters; this feels very authentic. It's quite a mix of emotions, and you're capturing it all. I also love all the reactions in the office. "Spawning Tuna!" Awesome. :D Hope the writing bug stays with you, I am loving this story.
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2010 10:03 pm Title: Again
So happy this finally posted - really, really can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: October 22, 2010 08:36 am Title: Again
I like it a lot! I think you do a great job of capturing Jim's perspective. I like the alternating fear and excitement ... and how you had it take a little while for him to process what this second pregnancy will mean to Pam. I think you're presenting this very realistically and that you most definitely stayed in character for both of them. Well written!
Author's Response: Thank you! We haven't seen a whole lot of Jim/Pam angsty-ness since they've been together AND this is my first Office fic, so I'm always a little worried that I'm not getting them quite right (it's hard to judge that kind of thing on your own fic objectively). So thanks for the feedback on that because I'm really trying :)
Date: October 22, 2010 01:53 am Title: Again
You, young lady. Are a very talented writer and I freaking loved everything about this chapter. How Pam felt so guilty for not being happy, and for ruining Jim's "happy time"... actually I could go on and list everything I like but it would be literally the entire chapter. Keep writing, you are VERY much appreciated xx
Author's Response: Aw.. thank you :) I'm a little bit of a slow writer, but I really try. Thank you for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2010 08:48 pm Title: Again
Thank's for the update - it's so great to see Jim caring for his family and hear his inner thinking, wonderful job with that. I'm really excited to see this the rest of this story play out, it's one thing to have a Jam and their baby story, but it's entirely another to have them trying to prepare for another one, while Cecilia is still just a little baby. I know this happens to people in real life all the time, but I'm glad you decided to bring this to MTT where the idea is original.
Take your time posting, I frankly don't care if it takes three months (well, yeah, I'd miss the story) as long as you continue to give us such solid, well written chapters. So thanks for that! And let me know if you'd ever like a beta, I'm more than happy to help! I believe you can find my email on my bio page.
Author's Response: Thank you! And honestly, I'm excited to see the rest of this play out, too, because at the moment, I don't have a really solid direction. ha. : So we'll see. As for beta-ing, I have one beta, but I don't think a second could ever hurt because I want this thing to be as good as it possibly can be. I also might need someone to bounce some ideas off of, seeing as I don't have an actual plan.
Anyway, thanks so much for the comment :)
Date: October 21, 2010 02:25 pm Title: Unexpected
Glad this got posted formally!
Author's Response: Meee too. I'm assuming yours is still waiting? That's so lame of them. I don't get it.
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2010 01:43 pm Title: Again
I'm so so glad this chapter's finally posted properly. I loved reading this chapter as a beta, second person sometimes can be tricky but you've done this so seamlessly I barely notice it. I love Jim's POV, I love how much he loves Pam, how caring he is and how he knows what she's going through and is being so sensitive toward her, especially with her being so extra hormonal. I really love how you ended the chapter, very much them. Looking forward to the next update!
Author's Response: It was easier to do second person seamlessly when it was just a one-shot, but then I felt like I had to keep it that way for consistency once I decided to turn it into an actual chaptered story. I definitely catch myself going back a lot thinking, "Okay, I've used 'you' and 'your' like 4324324 times in this sentence, and it sounds ridiculous. FIX IT!" .. haha It's also the only second person story I've ever written so that makes it a even more of a challenge. Sometimes I wish I had stuck to first or third. Anyway, thank you so much for reading and commenting and beta-ing :) I really appreciate it
Date: October 20, 2010 08:58 pm Title: Confessions
I really like this. I think you're doing a fine job with the characters. We saw Pam have some freakouts during her pregnancy with Cece, and I can imagine especially at the beginning of this next one, she'd need some time to adjust.
The other thing to remember is that on the show, Jim and Pam are among others and are being watched. Parts of this chapter reminded me a lot of my fella. We don't have kids, but we let each other in at our weakest moments the way neither of us does with anyone else.
The perspective of Pam's morning sickness through Jim's eyes is really interesting and heartwrenching. It's worse to watch someone you love hurt than it is to hurt yourself.
And I love the details. Cece trying to eat her foot is delightful.
Author's Response: Thank you! :) Since this is my first Office fic, I'm still not sure whether I'm writing the characters in a believable way, so it's always nice to hear that I'm doing an okay job. And I'm glad you liked the details! I wanted to make sure Cece had enough of a presence in this chapter.
Date: October 20, 2010 08:41 pm Title: Unexpected
I like how you've made Pam conflicted. I love that they were so immediately happy on the show, but another unexpected surprise like this... I think it's only natural that she'd have a swirl of emotions.
10 [Report This]Date: October 20, 2010 08:04 am Title: Unexpected
As I mentioned on the forum, I love this story and am so glad you linked it. I would have hated to miss an update! You shouldn't worry about your characterizations, because they're spot on (IMHO). Despite the angst of a second unplanned pregnancy, this is just bursting with love. Please keep going, and please continue to notify us on the forum when you update.
Author's Response: Thank you very much :) I'm trying to keep things not-too-sappy and not-too-angsty, and because this is my first Office fic, it's still a little hard for me to judge whether or not that's actually working. I'm definitely trying, though. Thanks so much for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: October 20, 2010 02:48 am Title: Confessions
Dude, I had completely forgotten about this fic and damn it's amazing. I love how you have them coping with this, both a little differently etc. I am so looking forward to another update, because this really was brilliant. I'll review again once they submit your actual chapter 3. Seriously though, one of the best baby fics I have ever read. I hopey ou have a long series planned out for us ;) *is greedy*
Author's Response: Ahh! That is quite a compliment! Thank you very much :) I'm definitely trying hard on this one (hence the almost 6-month wait). I'm not sure about a long series. I'm certainly open to it, I just don't have a whole lot of ideas at the moment. This story is meant to be a 5-7 chapter thing, but I'll think about a sequel since the response to this has been better than I expected. What would you like to see?
10 [Report This]Date: October 19, 2010 07:50 pm Title: Confessions
I caught this on Fanfic.net and loved the new chapter. It's so very sweet and real and I'm so glad you were able to add it to your story somehow. Please continue to write - I loved this. :)
Author's Response: Thank you :) It took me a while to write, so I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
10 [Report This]Date: May 29, 2010 01:42 pm Title: Unexpected
hey just saying, i love the story so far! little surprised by the amount of angst in chapter two but the realistic way you phrase pam's thoughts and actions along with jims really make the story worth reading. hoping for a chapter three soon!!!
Date: May 12, 2010 02:55 pm Title: Confessions
Just letting you know that folks are out here patiently waiting for chapter 3!
Date: April 30, 2010 10:34 pm Title: Confessions
Wow this sure didn't disappoint. Still so beautiful and a little heartbreaking. But above all, you've stuck the truth and realism of the situation even if that's difficult to address. I can't wait for more!
Date: April 28, 2010 09:20 pm Title: Confessions
wow this is the real thing...im always open for angst(usually with happy endings). i really yearning for the next part!
Date: April 28, 2010 04:14 pm Title: Confessions
Great chapter! Poor Pam. I can definitely see her freaking out like this! Yay for Jim's reaction!
I can't wait for next chapter!
Date: April 27, 2010 06:31 pm Title: Unexpected
This is so, so wonderful and in-character. I love how you're going through each of Pam's thoughts, dealing with all of her emotions... from feeling guilty of loving one baby more than another, wanting some piece of romance left for another pregnancy, worrying about her marriage, and even still thinking of the baby weight "that will probably never go away now." I'm so happy you had Jim "elated" about it. I think he would be, too, despite all of the things that Pam's going through. I can't wait to see what else you're going to do with this. Hope to have another chapter here from you soon. =)
10 [Report This]Date: April 27, 2010 06:17 pm Title: Confessions
Oh my goodness. This is just priceless and so dang perfect! That was, oh wow, I have no idea how to put to words (just like Pam) the incredible feat you've completed here. All the emotions, all the dialog and all the descriptions were just flawless and they flowed together beautifully. Since I'm unable to give you anything higher than a ten (quite unfortunately) I will be bookmarking this page as this story is probably the best I've ever read. It has all the things I love, Jim and Pam together, with a cute baby, great dialog and description, the writing and topic sound realistic and all of that is even better when an author writes something about a brand new topic. Congrats, this was the greatest thing I think I've ever read!
9 [Report This]Date: April 27, 2010 05:15 pm Title: Confessions
Wow! Poor Pam. Is she still feeling a little post-partum depression? Add that to pregnancy hormones and it's no wonder she's having a hard time.
Good chapter!
Date: April 27, 2010 08:34 am Title: Confessions
I have to say again how great this chapter is and how great this story is turning out! It's angsty but very believable. You're very talented and this is really very realistic and in character. I loved how you described Jim playing with Cecelia, and how much it shows that Pam loves them both so much. I really enjoyed getting to read this as a beta, and I can't wait for the next chapter, send it over when you're ready!
Date: April 27, 2010 07:05 am Title: Confessions
I think this is quite realistic, actually. Pam's concerns and fears and her guilt about feeling uncertain and not just happy are perfectly understandable. (I also liked the part in the first chapter where she lamented that they didn't get to 'try' for their second, like so many couples do.) I like how she's at war with how she truly feels against how she thinks she should feel.
The visual of Jim playing with Cece on the blanket and your description of how he plays with her and talks to her is awesome and just how I'd imagine Jim to be as a dad, very in-character. As is his excitement about the new one, and his instant recognition that her tears aren't happy ones. I wonder if Pam's fear and uncertainty won't get him thinking about the downsides of having another baby so quickly, too.
Anyway, this is great! Looking forward to the rest.
Date: April 27, 2010 06:55 am Title: Confessions
Really happy you continued this, more_awake. Is it bad that I enjoyed the angst? I think it was absolutely in character. Great pregnancy reveal, btw--romantic in its simplicity. Poor, poor Pam. Really looking forward to more!