1 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2021 11:10 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this story, but it confused me because false positives aren't really a thing with those tests, so I'm glad you clarified in the comments, cause I thought maybe she had a miscarriage or.. something.
In any case, I'm new here, and this is literally the first story I've read on this site! I can tell you're a great author, and I'm excited to read the rest of your works!!
10 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2011 07:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is told so well. The last part is absolutely beautiful! I don't know that you'll ever read this since it's well after the fact but if you do, I'm confused about the second part here. It seems to indicate that she is in fact pregnant yet there never seems to be a baby or any other mention of this. I'm probably reaing it wrong but I thought I'd ask in case you do see this. You write really well!
10 [Report This]Date: August 27, 2010 09:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
You're on of my favorite authors, so anytime you post, I rush to read it... unfortunately, I'm not always rushing to review :( I've been busy with finals, but I DO want to review, since this is amazing. This feels a little different from your other stories, but still great. Happy. Are we going to be lucky enough for another story from you soon? Maybe the new season will bring ideas? :)
Date: August 21, 2010 04:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Unfold, whenever you post a story, I know it's going to be good. I loved this. It was all good, of course, but I especially loved the idea of them actually trying to have a baby as they were planning the wedding--the idea that they just couldn't wait. As I was reading this, that glorious scene in the hospital was playing through my head, and I just felt happy all over again. Nicely done :)
Date: August 21, 2010 10:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Gorgeous as always. I love so many things about this story... the depth you added to the "I can't," and how they could have been semi-trying for Cecelia, but she was still this wonderful surprise for them.
I'm always so happy when I see a new story from you pop up. I love the way you write Jim and Pam. :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 20, 2010 06:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was amazing. I love how you managed to get so much in to each section. It's not an easy thing to do without being all INFORMATION OVERLOAD, but you did it perfectly.
Am I being stupid, was Pam pregnant in #2 or was it a false positive? Whatever that was such a great twist.
Love love love. Hope to see more of you on here soon.
Date: August 19, 2010 09:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved this so much. I'm assuming number two was a false positive, right? Jim in part three kills me dead. I like that they were trying for a baby and ended up with Cecelia, still lightly unexpected. I love your Company Picnic insight, too.
I've been busy lately and save different pieces when I see them on the archive, and I'm so tired and should've been in bed a couple of hours ago... But when I see your name here I can't help myself. There are so many wonderful things about your writing. You bring a little light to every situation you touch on. This is just so sweet, and I enjoyed it so much. Thanks for writing for us! :)
Date: August 19, 2010 08:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
It's a real talent to be able to express so much in a small space and you've got that. For each part, here's what I really appreciated:
1. The thought that she would leave Roy if she weren't pregnant, but then she doesn't. I felt a sense of regret there, but also a sense that she would have regretted leaving. In one sentence, you convey a very profound emotional conflict.
2. Wait, so Pam was pregnant? Whoa... what an interesting idea, if she had been or thought she was and there was a deeper reason she said "I can't" to Jim.
3. I loved how eager Jim was. It's very typical to have him do the "take your time, it's up to you" thing, and I loved his "indulge my curiosity."
4. Pam referring to Jim as her husband, even if they aren't legally married yet. I just... loved that.
Okay, cannot actually remember whether the story is complete. It seems like it is. But I'd love to see a series of this style of story from you, addressing different experiences. Just a suggestion. This was a lovely read.
10 [Report This]Date: August 19, 2010 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
guh. major love for this! i can't myself find the words to express how much i love the way you write jim's voice, just poetic enough that he doesn't come across as actually a female fanfiction writer, or an excessively eloquent narrative author. so perfect, and pam is pitch-perfect too, of course. :) well done!
Date: August 19, 2010 06:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Guh, I love reliving that moment they found out about the baby!
Nicely done, unfold -- so happy to see you posting something new!
10 [Report This]Date: August 19, 2010 06:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is so sublime and wonderful! I like your little twist on 'I can't' I've never seen anyone write that in a story. Also, very nice input into Company Picnic. Again, this is the first time I've read in a story where they were trying for a baby. Really cool and original while staying with the show. I like! Here are your stars. Please write more.
Date: August 19, 2010 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Um, I guess I'm confused. Title is Three Negatives and a Positive ... but it sure seems like both ii and iv are positives.
My favorite of the vignettes is iii. I really like the intimacy you create between Pam and Jim in that one. Love his hopefulness even though they're not married yet. "Just indulge my curiosity, please?" So sweet!
Yeah, I'm looking for my favorite passages in iii and ... well, I just want to copy and paste the whole thing.
P.S. Lovely to have you back on the boards.
Author's Response: Well, I guess I was hinting that the second one was a false positive and she later found out she wasn't actually pregnant. I guess that was sort of vague though. Also, I fail at coming up with titles and this was the first thing that came to my mind. *shrug* But, thanks! I was going to go somewhere else with the third part but then sort of fell in love with the idea of Jim being really excited about getting pregnant even though they weren't even married yet. Glad you enjoyed it. :)