9 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2007 09:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
The index cards was my favorite part, particularly the pause written in.
Date: November 13, 2006 07:57 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so lovely! Beautiful imagery. (Sorry about being slow to review!)
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh, I LOVE LOVE LOVE this! Beautiful, poignant, evocative.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 03:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
I can't even describe how much I love this. Everything about it, so poetic and beautiful, are exactly what I needed today. It's perfect.
I know how you're feeling though. I have about four different one shots formulating in my head, but none of them ever get finished. But I'm happy this one was.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 10:22 am Title: Chapter 1
absolutely gorgeous.
9 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 08:10 am Title: Chapter 1
*sigh* So beautifully written. Love the imagery and the attention to detail -- Jim feeling the map creasing underneath his feet, Pam's phone slipping between sofa cushions... And I loved that Jim only charges his phone because he's hoping for a call from Pam... very angsterrific, as always. Great job!
Date: November 06, 2006 05:57 am Title: Chapter 1
Love this: And he pulled punches he should have pulled long ago.
And this: Her shirt was back on. Her heels were back on. YES!!
The imagery you use in this is just breathtaking, really lovely.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 05:41 am Title: Chapter 1
As if he wouldn’t know his way home without that map.
I feel like quoting about half of this back to you, but I'll content myself with this one line. It's so sad and encompasses so much about his feelings for her- it's truthful, and painful.
I am constantly amazed at your ability to take the raw material of a comedy about a very real (if heightened) everyday workplace, and polish it so that we see the poetry within it. Your prose flows, always, and this structure builds and progresses in a way that suits your plot perfectly. I'm, again, in awe. Thank you for this.
9 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 10:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. This was incredible, I loved it. You are so talented, sooo talented, I'm in awe.
Date: November 05, 2006 09:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. [/Jim]
Thank you for this. Lovely imagery. Love the watercolor metaphor, the triangle metaphor, all of it. Nicely done.
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is poetry. You have such a gift with words. I'm in awe.
Date: November 05, 2006 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
A perfect representation of what Jim and Pam's seperation is like... they're both not quite themselves without one another, are they?
I loved this: "She stayed after five every day, but he never called again. "
Wow. SO heartbreaking, adn SO something Pam would do.
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
These are exactly the sort of fics I like to read and then close my eyes because I can feel and see and imagine everything, crystal clear. I love the imagery, I love the characterisations. Watercolor boats, staplers and pencils - the cue cards were just PerfectPam: hopeful, anxious, nervous; trying to be prepared but not really. And I love the line. I shall never draw my graphs the same way again.
Marvellously connected for something you put together from different attempts at different one-shots. I love how this flows! Gorgeously written.
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very nice. I like the beautiful imagery.
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 06:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
I liked all of these. The longing, the failure of Pam to call him sometimes, the desperation they both felt afterwards, the (several) failed attempts with Karen ... the watercolor sailboats. Lovely.
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 06:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love that she was cheesy and said they weren't a line... The whoe fic was lovely! Great job!
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
I particularly loved the part about Pam writing conversation topics on index cards. It denotes such hope, and such a desire for change. It's almost sad that she never got to use them.
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2006 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just beautiful. I loved the idea of Pam making 'cue cards' - just right for her. And this line was perfect and heartbreaking: There were no goodbyes. Just her palms laid flat on the surface of her desk as she waited for the sound of the door closing. So many good lines though...and lovely imagery and clean, evocative prose. Terrific.