1 [Report This]Date: October 19, 2020 01:03 am Title: Chapter 1
This is just really well put together.
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 01:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
So much of this fic was great. I can't comment on it all, so I'll just highlight one little thing that almost made me vomit... "Maybe it’s all her talking but she knows what to do with her tongue, and that’s something." Nice work.
7 [Report This]Date: February 10, 2007 10:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
I always like round robins. This is one of those fics that can go on forever. Each time seeing into the dynamics of a different relationship. I especially liked the couples that the show ignores : Roy/Karen, Toby/Angela, Creed/Kelly. Nice work!
8 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 04:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so great! All of the voices were just spot on- loved Kelly's especially because this line:
He just seems really lost, almost like Tom Cruise before he met Katie but not because Tom’s so, so much hotter.
made me crack up. Also really enjoyed the progression/transition between characters. Great job!
9 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 04:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love how you progress from character to character - so much is noticed + judged in an office environment, but left unspoken. You've captured that perfectly here.
10 [Report This]Date: December 02, 2006 04:55 am Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed reading this--loved the way that each story led into the next and how you infused each story with the character's voice.
Really cool insights into some of these characters as well. And Michael's and Kelly's really had me laughing. Nice use of Toby's POV to round it out.
10 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2006 12:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very nice observations. Good job!
10 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2006 07:35 am Title: Chapter 1
And OH, Michael characterizing men as tacos and women as hot dogs HAHAHA wtf. Beautiful!
10 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2006 07:32 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so clever and well done! Love these little glimpses into all the characters and the way they all transition/link together. "Just two completely heterosexual men having some fun." made me completely crack up. I also really like Ryan's insights into Kelly as someone genuine, and the last line of the Jim/Jan section, and Karen having brothers and aww, TOBY.
Date: November 30, 2006 11:11 am Title: Chapter 1
Forgot to add: I agree that the rating on this story should be changed to an M. I'm not being judgmental (I prefer adult stories), but I do think the current rating is misleading.
Date: November 30, 2006 11:09 am Title: Chapter 1
Great Jan characterization: "She ignores it, keeps her head high and her heels sharp"
But I didn't agree with your take on Angela. I doubt she's a Catholic, she has too much of that Puritanical vibe about her. Also, no one in the office is committing adultery; at most, they're committing fornication. Angela would definitely know the difference.
10 [Report This]Date: November 30, 2006 08:58 am Title: Chapter 1
This was a really great piece of writing. But I would change the rating to at least an M. Good work!
10 [Report This]Date: November 30, 2006 07:53 am Title: Chapter 1
You slay me! Awesome, and every voice is so right on! I love this, btw: Say women are like hot dogs and men are like tacos, okay, well, it’s okay to like hot dogs and it’s great to like tacos, it’s just that he likes hot dogs. That's just brilliant, and so like Michael to reveal the truth and have NO idea, and think he's making his point so well! Keep writing, ok?