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Reviewer: flonkertonxx Signed [Report This]
Date: September 30, 2007 07:56 am Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

ooo i liked that!

i hope you end up writing another chapterrr! i want to see what will happen [:

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: January 16, 2007 06:34 am Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

Bummer, I was hoping it was Karen not Kelly. Though Kelly  was good for a laugh, as usual.

Reviewer: sazey Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: January 15, 2007 02:28 pm Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

I've been meaning to write you and tell you how much I'm enjoying this story.  I really like your characterizations - I can't wait to read more!

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: January 15, 2007 01:56 pm Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

I really liked this one.  So many emotions!  Poor Roy, poor Pam, poor Jim, poor Karen.  I liked how the truth was forced out rather publicly. And I always love Kelly as a Cupid/plot device.  Heh.  Interesting that you left things quite unresolved at the end.  How long before Jim remembers that he forgot the details again?

Reviewer: LadyLuck Signed [Report This]
Date: January 15, 2007 12:14 am Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

lovely! can't wait to see what happens next!

Reviewer: LoveFool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 14, 2007 11:42 pm Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

He watched her walk away and he felt himself sliding back into his old skin. 

 

I LOVE that line! Keep it coming!

Reviewer: Sheppy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 14, 2007 10:51 pm Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

Oooh, I can totally see this happening JUST this way.  I like how Karen is annoyed, but not bitchy.  She seems like the kind of gal that would keep her cool, but demand honesty.  Looking forward to more of this!

 

Reviewer: Kath Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 14, 2007 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

Another great chapter.  Well done!  And this isn't a reflection of your story as much as it is with my fear of the show's direction.  I read this and I can't help but feel that Jim's a bit of a jackass.  I know he's trying to move on, but those of use able to hear his thoughts know he is still in love with Pam.  Ugh, can't they just talk already (on the show and in fic)..LOL

Reviewer: Amy Anonymous 9 [Report This]
Date: January 14, 2007 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

I think you write Karen really well! I hope that you give us a happy jim and pam ending though.  Can't wait for the next chapter!!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 14, 2007 09:48 pm Title: Chapter 3: Miscommunications

"Pam would never be this up front with him…this honest."  I love that you pointed this out.  It really is the crux of things.  Pls continue! 

Reviewer: Amalia Kensington Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13, 2007 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

See, I love fics that make Jim wake up and realize that what it would mean for Pam to admit her feelings for him right at Casino Night would actually mean, and the giant leap that should took even when he wasn't there.
Poor Karen.
I can't wait to see where this goes.
Thanks.
cheers.
--Lex

Reviewer: tigger Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13, 2007 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

Very nice narrative overall. I especially liked Jim's vocalisation in the last paragraph :r0;Shhhr30;Pam..heyr30;itr17;s okayr30;Ir17;m here.r1; He whispered as she sobbed into his shirt. The feeling of her against him warmed him and she smelled exactly as he had remembered. That hadnr17;t changed. He closed his eyes and let the feeling of her in his arms wash over him r11; the suffocating feeling in his chest seemed to subside r11; until he heard the door of the roof open.
And what a nice cliffhanger too!
Waiting for the next chapter.

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13, 2007 12:50 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

Evil cliffhanger.  Who could it be?  Can't wait to find out;)

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13, 2007 09:19 am Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

This is sad and realistic and very nice. I like the pacing of this sentence, it leads to a very clear visual: It was like slow motion…watching the realization of it all hit Karen…and he couldn’t do anything to stop it. 

 

Continue, please!

Reviewer: Chicgeek Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

Oh, please don't let that be Karen. I don't want to see Jim die. Although, he may slightly deserve what he is going to get. Poor kids.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 06:44 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

This chapter was so good - I can't wait to see who is coming through the door!  Please please update soon!!

Reviewer: DunderSnob Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

Omigod!!!!

Reviewer: Kath Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 03:57 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

Ruh Roh.  Please update soon. I am dying to find out what Karen has to say.

Reviewer: beth Anonymous 9 [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 03:48 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

this chapter was so sweet.  I love the cliffhanger at the end.  I cant wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 03:44 pm Title: Chapter 2: Realizations

This is a great point: He hadn’t stopped to think about what she’d been through. Almost as good as Karen starting to put together more of the details.  (Yesssss!)

And OMG, who is coming to the roof?!?!  Must. Know. Right. Away! 

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 1: The uncomfortable silences

I want a second chapter!  Please continue, this was good. Makes me feel better after the last episode.

Reviewer: annagirl93 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 12:38 pm Title: Chapter 1: The uncomfortable silences

please continue, i love where this is headed!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 10:01 am Title: Chapter 1: The uncomfortable silences

continue soon please!  very nice!

Reviewer: DunderSnob Signed [Report This]
Date: January 12, 2007 09:23 am Title: Chapter 1: The uncomfortable silences

That was really good..Can't wait for more!!

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