10 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2008 10:31 am Title: Chapter 1
This was featured in "Story of the Moment." I had never read it before today. I have to tell you that this is just lovely. If only this had really happened. Then we wouldn't have had to suffer through the Vance wedding.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Wow, it was featured in "Story of the Moment"? I didn't even know about it!
Date: June 30, 2007 11:08 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow!! Your such a good writer! I loved your story!
10 [Report This]Date: January 27, 2007 09:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. So sweet. I can't find words to describe it. how embarassing is it that i'm actually crying as i write this?!
Date: January 27, 2007 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
so sweet!
Date: January 26, 2007 06:07 am Title: Chapter 1
That was beautiful. So much emotion.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 25, 2007 09:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Your first person perspective worked well in this! Thanks for sharing such a beautiful piece of writing!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!!
Date: January 25, 2007 08:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
I just watched the three Office episodes and got all misty during "The Call" and now I'm really crying here after reading this, it's just so goddamned beautiful and sweet and it's crazy how badly we all want this to happen.
this time with me leaning against my desk, and you leaning into me, and it felt like falling, but safely falling, like our landing would be soft and perfect, and I wasn't afraid at all this time,
Beautifully poignant choice of words.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad it hits people emotionally, like it did to me as I was writing it. And I'm glad you liked that specific part. It's one of my favorite parts, too!
10 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2007 08:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, oh, oh. Beautiful. I love the title, I love weepy Jim (especially with the chin-trembling!), I love your insanely long sentences that add so much to the flow of this and to the realism of their conversation/interaction... fabulous. Really really.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!! I didn't really mean to make Jim "weepy", but I myself was getting all teary at those parts, so I mean, how could the guy who shed a tear on Casino Night, all while clenching his jaw really hard trying not to cry, not cry at the little events in this story, you know? And I'm glad you loved the long sentences! I love writing in long sentences. Once, I wrote a sentence that was 116 words long. It was pretty awesome. hehe. Anyway, thanks so much, again!
9 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2007 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow...I'm speechless...that was amazing and beautiful and just...wow.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: January 25, 2007 07:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am glad I picked this story to read.
Author's Response: Aww, I'm glad you did, too! :o) Thank you!
Date: January 25, 2007 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just. Gorgeous.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 25, 2007 04:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
"And all the little green and blue LED's around the dark office looked like fireflies around us through my tears." What a beautiful line in a story full of beautiful lines. I loved it. Don't change a thing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: January 25, 2007 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
gah! that was beautiful and i am crying
Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I'm glad this story hits people emortionally, the way it hit me when I was writing it!
Date: January 25, 2007 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love the first person - makes it so intimate and unfiltered.
The office looked like a dark city through a rain-drenched windshield, as all the small lights scattered around the office became wavy and abstract.
What an evocative description. The tone of this is so immediate and emotionally honest. Really struck a lovely note.
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks so much for the great review!
And you're the second person to use the word "evocative" in a review of this story! That is not a word I've ever heard before in reference to my writing! Hehe, thanks!
And thanks again for the detailed feedback!
Date: January 25, 2007 01:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw, so pretty. I love the imagery.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
10 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2007 12:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
What a great idea to do a first person Jim piece! It was just the sweetest scene for him to find her there, & I can believe she would go there to try and capture the vibe of that night as she drew it. Stuff like this is why you're one of my favs! One note - some punctuation seems off, but that might just be me.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! :oD
And thanks for the heads-up about the punctuation. It probably is off in a place or two... it seems like some of my punctuation knowledge has literally fallen out of my head since high school. I'll give it another read-through, though.
Date: January 25, 2007 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, how beautiful!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2007 11:47 am Title: Chapter 1
I am at work and am at a loss for words. The imagery was beautiful. Just awesome.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much!
Date: January 25, 2007 11:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Not sure I like WeepyJim, but otherwise this is just superb. Beautifully written.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: January 25, 2007 11:05 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, that was amazing. I absolutely loved this:
Not just real, as in it-exists real, but real as in you-loved-me-too real. I really liked the first-person perspective.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad the first-person perspective worked, and thanks for being specific about which parts you liked!
8 [Report This]Date: January 25, 2007 11:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Damn, that was good. Just awesome!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!!
Date: January 25, 2007 10:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, thud! This is insanely beautiful!
Love this: The office looked like a dark city through a rain-drenched windshield -- and of course, this: like fireflies around us through my tears.
Author's Response: Wow, "insanely beautiful"? Now that's a huge compliment. Thanks so much! And thanks for being specific, too!
Date: January 25, 2007 10:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. That was awesome. It made me tear up with him.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I was tearing up as I was writing it, so it's good to know it affected others the same way!
Date: January 25, 2007 10:09 am Title: Chapter 1
just... wow. awesome
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: January 25, 2007 10:06 am Title: Chapter 1
Lovely. Just so very lovely. The last sentence - perfection.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! I was a little unsure about the last sentence, so it's good to know that someone liked it!