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Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11, 2007 05:27 pm Title: Pam

I like this chapter.  This part is my favorite: "Roy does know me.  Not the way Jim does. The way that weakens my knees (God, I'm being cheesy), that encourages me and makes me laugh, convicts me and drives me to be more than I am. The way that doesn't require words. Or... didn't."

I hope they get back to this kind of communication!

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 06:55 am Title: Jim

I love this chapter.  Seeing some of the inner workings of Jim's mind regarding Dwangela? Priceless.  I love how he figures out that Pam knows, and that you've quoted that amazing exchange between Jim and Pam from E-mail Surveillance.  

I love any reference to Veronica Mars and/or Kristen Bell.  They are probably not on Kelly's "things that are a-may-zing!" list, but they're definitely on mine.  And I love the thought that Jim has a thing for Kristen Bell.

I'll be here when you have more! 



Author's Response: Who doesn't love Kristen? ;) One of my friends and I have discussions about how we're sure she'd be our friend... if she knew us! Silly! But I've noticed guys like her too, my husband does for sure, so Jim's gotta love her!

And that note on your last review about the chapter titles. Totally there. I get confused when I'm uploading as to who is next! I really didn't expect this story to be as long as it's turning out... so I guess that's why I started that way. Oh well, next time!

thanks for reading! Glad you're enjoying it. :)

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 06:50 am Title: Pam

Wonderful.  This is so good.  I've actually enjoyed this all along, and I have NO idea why I haven't reviewed... sorry.

This is a great line: "She'd caused a bar fight, an office attack and a job loss - all in the span of a two days."  Of course my crazy mind imagines her saying this to someone, and the reply is "Well, you've got to start somewhere!"  I know, I'm sick.

I found that break room scene so heartbreaking.  Now we know why it's called the "break" room, right?  Poor Pam.

I really like your list of images and the following lines. 

I think you said this story has a stream of consciousness style; it definitely works for you. 

My one suggestion for the future (you probably don't want to change this one for now) is to have unique Chapter titles.  It's always hard to tell where we left off when all the titles are either Jim or Pam.  Mind you, I will re-read and figure it out, but it would be easier with unique titles.

I promise to be a faithful reviewer from here on. 

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: April 10, 2007 06:27 am Title: Jim

Oh, lovely. Hopefully he comes to that same conclusion in canon!, too - considering, especially, how they were standing in the same frame [!!! - heh] in the Safety Training promo...

The thing is, this is completely believable! - I can't help love how well you get across the situation, how much I can understand why they're going through the motions the way they are, and therefore sticking so well to the show, and still there seems to be a clearing in the distance, some light, some optimism - diverting there from the show, because from watching the JAM scenes of the show all we get is a fat scoop of depression topped with a cherry of never-going-to-happen...oh, the writers, how they torture us so!

And how well you read them still! ;)

Amazing stuff, as always, tv_dream: it's not funny how much I love this story. I literally jumped when I noticed a new chapter up [while I kept refreshing the Most Recent page ;)]. 



Author's Response: Heh... yeah, the Safety Training promo is what made me realize I had to even Jim out a little because he's obviously speaking to her in some capacity by then. Will definitely be interesting to see.

I always love your reviews as they sort of confirm what I'm shooting for. Sometimes I feel like I'm just rehashing the episodes - and I am, in a way, but I like to imagine the undercurrents, so I'm glad it registers that way! I see things happening and I think, "Oh my god, I totally know what that feels like." and here we have the fruits.

Hehe... glad to know I'm not the only one who refreshes the page endlessly. At work. When I have a pile of crap to do. Like right now! :)

Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: quietdecember Signed [Report This]
Date: April 07, 2007 08:14 pm Title: Pam

Awesome, now honest Pam: drive to work, lock Jim in the breakroom and we'll be in business

good job, looking forward to more! 

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 06:47 am Title: Pam

And I have to say the wonderful poem-ish, prose-ish feel this entire story, let alone this amazing chapter, has - beautiful stuff. As always. 

I adore the way you shifted from her laughing to crying with such unbelievable ease - pretty bleeding perfect, if you ask me - and then direct and courage and honesty - and then the descriptions!! If done right I can fall in love with descriptions, and I'm JimandPam-head-over-heels in love with your decscriptions. You know that that is a lot. So subtle, so little, so perfect

I love this story.  

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: March 13, 2007 06:43 am Title: Jim

God, I love that you managed to get that across - this horrible, so strange a relationship that Karen and Jim have, so awkward, unsure that they have to have a 'discussion' the next day. I love that. 

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed [Report This]
Date: March 12, 2007 07:13 pm Title: Pam

Oh that last line's a killer.  This is really well done.   

 

Reviewer: shan21 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06, 2007 11:19 pm Title: Jim

Ha! Love the title of the list and every little thing on it! Especially number 3, 7, 9, and 10. Oh, #10 makes my heart ache.

Reviewer: Amalia Kensington Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06, 2007 11:00 pm Title: Jim

GAH!!
I think that I love Jim's list.
In an earlier chapter, I like that you mentioned how he had just decided to flat out ignore her, game over. That was really harsh, but it struck home.
Thanks so much.
cheers.
--Lex

Reviewer: Treble Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06, 2007 09:59 pm Title: Jim

I really loved this chapter. So many fics have tried to explain Jim's pov and you summed it all right here. It just works. Nicely done. 

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 24, 2007 06:31 pm Title: Pam

These alternating POV's are so heart-wrenching.  Their pain is so palpable.  I just love this series.

Reviewer: shan21 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 18, 2007 07:27 pm Title: Pam

Oh my god, HOW DO YOU DO THIS? How do you so perfectly sum up the inner thoughts and feelings of these characters in so few words?

I love these. If you wrote a hundred more chapters, I'd eat 'em like popcorn. 

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2007 11:02 pm Title: Jim

The Shins! So apparantly you're all-around awesome. 

And considering you've spent the waking hours of those nine months trying to convince yourself of NO - the yes comes out smooth as silk.
I loved that line. Pam is an overall warm and easy person who is hard not to love, and to fall out of love with, even worse. I don't see how Karen can replace her.

I'm interested to see the POV from the next episode, because I don't get it, how she can still be with him and not be completely Krazy!Karen.  

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2007 10:53 pm Title: Pam

I loved this; plopping the sombrero on his head, laughing with his old and tapped laughter, instructions in their office short-hand, feeling ready to SQUEAL because she didn't think he would ask her.

I loved that she's remembering last year because we did, too; I didn't love, however, that he returned and she thought he would stay but it didn't. Stay that way. And that just really, really wants to make me cry and jam their heads together. Idiots. 

Oh, God, I want them together. If I owned Jim Halpert, I would put him with Pam first. If she died, though, then I would be next. =P 

Loving this story!  

Reviewer: shan21 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2007 05:56 pm Title: Pam

There is so much of this that I LOVE. If I were to quote every part of this that made me smile or made me think "this is worded so perfectly" this review would... well, it would be as long as your story.

I love that they have their own Office shorthand. I love that he brought the sombrero home. I love that she plopped the sombrero down on his head.  And I will quote this last part, because I love it wayyy too much to paraphrase it:

The laughter that broke out of him was old. Tapped from a place she used to know. And hers rippled up from somewhere deep to match it.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2007 03:09 pm Title: Pam

I don't know how I missed this awesome story when it was first posted.  I love your  style here - short but powerful sentences that say so much.

Reviewer: fireworkfiasco Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2007 06:40 am Title: Jim

That last line did it; amazing.

I always look forward to read the updates of this - it's always a beautiful glimpse of hope. Fantastic

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: February 10, 2007 05:09 pm Title: Jim

Harvey was right, Pam did look hot today?
Amazing.
This fits Jim in so many ways it's a little scary, actually.

And don't even get me started on Pam: thinking of Jim even after the PMS comment? Oh, goodness.

Idiots.  

Reviewer: shan21 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 10, 2007 02:46 pm Title: Jim

Oh my god, chapter seven just about broke my heart. All of these are so honest. They really seem to get at the very core of these characters' hearts. You are very talented.

Reviewer: bitobsessive Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 10, 2007 10:43 am Title: Jim

I love the drowning metaphor here. Very well done. 

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: February 10, 2007 12:39 am Title: Jim

I don't usually like the use of caps where you can put in italics and bold and stuff but it added to the effect this time so it was good. 

You only meant to say goodnight. Yeah, it does seem like it's more of a second thought to come up to her again at the end of the episode, and I love that you mentioned that. 

you're pretty sure if she looks at you like that one more time, you're gonna break. oh, genius. Jim, you are painfully stupid. And protecting yourself too much.

I need to smack these two's heads together.  

Reviewer: moofoot Signed [Report This]
Date: February 10, 2007 12:36 am Title: Pam

I love how so many of these sentences seem like she's trying to assure herself, much more than anything else, and it's so painfully Pam I want to hug her. I think part of the reason this is hurting me a bit more than Jim's hurting in S1 and S2 and all is because I know he has friends, a life, basically, but Pam? It seems her closest friend is her mom and if she's made any friends since then she's not saying anything about it. 

These two make my head hurt.

Loved this chapter.  

Reviewer: Beth Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 10, 2007 12:25 am Title: Jim

ok, wow I loved this.  It was beautifull written.  The last line is just incredible!

Reviewer: annagirl93 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 09:06 am Title: Jim

i love this. you convey a lot of meaning with only a few words, which is something a lot of people can't do.

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