1 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2021 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
I LOVE THIS SO SO MUCH
Date: June 04, 2007 01:47 am Title: Chapter 1
Awwww. Just Awwww.
Date: February 02, 2007 02:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
This just killed me: "She drives with all of her windows down despite the chilly air, the now crumpled Mapquest directions clutched tightly in her hand, but then when she’s about to merge onto 84, she hears the finality in his voice when he says, “Bye, Pam,” and she turns around." I think you've written all of this beautifully, and I love that she finally has the courage to go to him. :)
Date: February 02, 2007 11:25 am Title: Chapter 1
She drives with all of her windows down despite the chilly air, the now crumpled Mapquest directions clutched tightly in her hand, but then when she’s about to merge onto 84, she hears the finality in his voice when he says, “Bye, Pam,” and she turns around. I so wanted her to do this and I even wrote a fic where she did but your take on it is much more realistic. She really wasn;t able to muster the courage to get past her fears. And #5 is a lovely way to end!
9 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2007 11:13 am Title: Chapter 1
yeah, very nicely written. some rather good stuff here. much respect.
10 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2007 10:48 am Title: Chapter 1
unfold, your writing is flawless! so beautifully written, especially loving the last line! if only it were true... i like your version better.
Date: February 02, 2007 10:43 am Title: Chapter 1
Absolutely lovely. I have this tingly feeling in my stomach and I'm kind of thinking that this actually might of happened... which is good and confusing all at once.
It feels like the ending of a formulaic romantic comedy when she climbs the stairs to his apartment after waiting for someone to let her in the front door so it would be a surprise.
Loved that. Everything was perfect.
Date: February 02, 2007 10:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh how I love alternate universes where everything gets worked out before he comes back and the drama with Karen gets too involved. So believable. Love that she told Roy while they were in bed. Such an intimate location for such a painfully intimate revelation.
Part I Typo: the he’d get there at three. I think you mean "then".
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out that typo. This was riddled with typos and I thought I had caught all of them. Thanks also for reading! :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2007 10:14 am Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful.
Date: February 02, 2007 09:45 am Title: Chapter 1
she’s sitting on the floor with her back against her dresser, crying because the truck’s gone and she’s sure Jim hates her by now anyway and she’s ruined everything.
Yes. Of course this is how it was. This is why she didn't call, or drive there, of course it is. This is sad and very, very true-feeling. And even number 5 is sad, now, because we know it didn't happen, but it feels so good and right and it will happen somehow. Right?