10 [Report This]Date: May 14, 2007 02:07 am Title: Because of You
Usually, i'm all about the fluff.. but i dunno.. i'm feeling angsty and pessimistic, so i'm DEFINITELY loving this fic! it's breaking my heart, but i guess that's why i love it.
Date: May 13, 2007 12:08 pm Title: Because of You
Wow, really interesting! I like to think Jim has some idea that Pam has "more than friend" feelings for him, but certainly you could read "only friends" into that speech, particularly if you were desperately afraid of being hurt again.
I liked your 'physical parity' thing. Do you mean 'sit on his lap'? I've never heard 'lie on his lap'. The last paragraph is very good. Not what I'd want to happen, but extremely good. If he decided to choose Karen, this would be the way to do it. It would send a very clear message to Karen, their co-workers, and Pam. And then Pam would go drown in the chocolate river out of sadness. No wait, I'll just read the next chapter to see what you have happen to everyone.
Anyway, angsty but realistic and very good.
Author's Response: Thanks. I think he probably knows but he's too scared/fragile to believe it, since he feels he was so wrong last time. By "lie in his lap" I had pictured him sitting and her lying down resting her head on his thighs. (My wife likes to fall asleep that way when I'm watching TV). It is a weird phrase though. Thanks for the feedback -- you always leave the best comments!
10 [Report This]Date: May 12, 2007 01:22 pm Title: Because of You
Sorry I forgot to add this: I see it was already mentioned below but I really like the "physical parity" blurb. To me it really gets the essence of Karen. She is tough and hard, etc. but also willing to let herself be made very vulnerable by Jim, which in my opinion takes even more guts. thanks agains.
10 [Report This]Date: May 12, 2007 12:59 pm Title: Because of You
Nice story! This is a great story, so don't be discouraged by the inevitably crap ratings you get for having the nerve to write a non-JAM story. Some of us really like it and are genuinely with you! Great job! Keep it up!
5 [Report This]Date: May 12, 2007 04:55 am Title: Because of You
Beautifully written, but not the outcome I had hoped for. However, after the hurt Pam gave him, maybe a little of her own medicine would do her good...although, I think she's had enough. I need to have JAM together.
Date: May 11, 2007 09:38 pm Title: Because of You
GAH, I love that you wrote this. Really love that you wrote this, because I think you have a really good handle on what Jim is going to be feeling. He isn't going to be all "YAY PAM LOVES ME." He's going to be horribly confused as to what her feelings are and incredibly angry that she let him believe he misinterpreted things for a full year. Not to mention that she called him out in from of all his co-workers/underlings. I think it's a definite possibility that this pushes Jim further towards Karen, and I thought you wrote the end really sweetly betewen them. Bravo for writing non Jim/Pam :)
Date: May 11, 2007 09:25 pm Title: Because of You
Dammit, Jim!
Oh, okay, so I just didn't want him to kiss Karen. Is that so wrong? But I think, under the circumstances, he kind of had to do something like that, lest Karen castrate him in the middle of the night.
This was very astute:
His pride told him that he would be less of a man if he dropped everything for Pam after being forced to endure three years of unrequited love and months of unbearable, painful heartache.
I'm not a guy Jim's age, but that feels like a very authentic reaction, and I sort of feel like that's what Jim's been feeling this whole season, even before he had a reason to believe Pam was harboring this level of affection for him. And you're right, she never said "love," and she didn't lay it all out for him--although, realistically, how could she? I don't think that's something Pam would do, because I believe that she likes Karen, even though she's her "competition."
Nice first chapter. I will continue to read this story.
10 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 04:30 pm Title: Because of You
For some reason the whole "physical parity" thing really struck a chord with me. Very interesting. Great job.
8 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 04:12 pm Title: Because of You
DAMMIT JIM! Well written. I think you've got a good handle on Jim's inner thoughts. While I'm not a Karim fan, I could totally buy this scenario. Nice job!
Date: May 11, 2007 02:56 pm Title: Because of You
Even though I'm a fan of Jim and Pam, I can see Jim reacting this way. He would want to comfort Karen in front of the people she was embarassed(?) in front of. But that is a lot like Pam declaring all of this with their peers watching and listening, so that Jim couldn't run or brush it off, and kind of make herself just say it all once she got started. Jim and Pam try to reinforce their denial by trying to convince others of it.
Date: May 11, 2007 02:53 pm Title: Because of You
what a tool. if I were there, I would totally kick his ass.
Good story!
Date: May 11, 2007 02:51 pm Title: Because of You
Heh... after everything throughout the day, I could actually see this happen. Yeah, my heart broke a little, but it works. :)
Unfortunately, Angela was next to Jim, but that's fine that you put Karen there instead.
Author's Response: You're right... there is going to be hell to pay when Dwight and Karen see the kiss. (and her kissing him back too). Thanks for the comment!
9 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 02:44 pm Title: Because of You
Well. I'm not angry, but it certainly isn't what I want to happen. It was excellent, though, it really seemed like you understood him. Because he seems determined to hurt Pam. And I really didn't consider that whole because v. for situation. Made a lot of sense, and suddenly her speech did seem more hurtful than clarifying. Again. Which sucks, because I was so damn proud of Pam.
Date: May 11, 2007 02:38 pm Title: Because of You
Angry? No. This is well-written, believable, and actually very plausible. It makes me sick to my stomach, but that's because I hate stories that force me to see Karen/Jim as a viable option. Good thing I'm an unconquerable optimist!
10 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 01:59 pm Title: Because of You
You ass! Love the inner monologue. Hate the ending. You're one happy-Karen-ending from being taken off my favorite author list. Seriously, though, just kidding, and I love the story. You do great Jim-angst. Hope you continue it with a nicer ending.
Date: May 11, 2007 01:12 pm Title: Because of You
Good Stuff. I know I'm in the minority here, but I love that he picked Karen.