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Reviewer: desert island Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 11:04 pm Title: Karen

That is so awesome. I didn;t think I could believe it, but you did a really good job. I still think Karen acted like she had had sex... although I can't comeup with an example, but... anyway...
Bravo. Really well crafted.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Beeswax Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Karen

This is so great!  I can't wait to see where this will continue ;-)

Author's Response: Aww, thanks!

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 09:54 am Title: Karen

Very nicely done! I think this story is just getting better and better with each chapter. :)


Author's Response: Aww, thank youu!! I'm kind of afraid of the next chapter though. hehe.

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 09:23 am Title: Karen

Have to admit, I was skeptical of this premise, but within the context of your story, you made me believe it. I'm impressed! Especially liked the touching college chapter (big, aw Jim there) and the Karen one too - you integrated it well into the 'actual' story of their relationship. And now, needless to say, I'm really looking forward to what happens next (let me guess ;-)

Author's Response: Aww, yay! A Colette review! I'm very honored to know that someone who had been skeptical was convinced.
The college chapter is my favorite. :o)
Thanks so much for the review!!

Reviewer: WildBerryJam Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 07:39 am Title: Karen

ooh good take on the Jim/Karen relationship! I can see this being an issue with them and whatnot.  Love it. 

"I think it's sexy that I get to be your first," she whispered.

Definitely the best lead-in to the next chapter ever.  Can't wait for the next bit!! :)



Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: feared_or_loved Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 07:25 am Title: Karen

Sex phobia, thank God!  I was reading that thinking 'she's a man, she's a man, she's a man' so the sex phobia was a bit of a relief.  Very nice and I can't wait for the continuation. 

Author's Response: lol!! I hadn't even thought of the idea of Karen really being as man! When I was first planning out this story at the MTT boards, someone suggested the idea that Karen had some psychological problem and she doesn't like sex (which I've heard of), and I was thinking of using that idea, and then I thought this one made much more sense for Karen's character, with their trust issues, and Karen making Jim endure 5 nights of talks, etc.
Anyway, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: supergirlsudz Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 07:23 am Title: Karen

I really like the changes you made! You give the sense that the Jim/Karen relationship is just completely doomed. Like, relationships require a lot of work, but not that much. Good stuff :-)

Author's Response: Eee, thanks so much!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 07:11 am Title: Chapter 1

I was wondering how you were going to deal with Karen. Well done!  Very plausible and sad. 

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16, 2007 07:04 am Title: Karen

Oh, Karen.  You actually were messed up enough to fit in with the nutjobs in Scranton after all....  

I hope Pam can make it all better... 



Author's Response:

I'm sure Pam can. ;o)
Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Cassandra Mulder Signed [Report This]
Date: August 14, 2007 12:32 am Title: Katy

I can totally believe he never slept with Katy. It just seemed too casual for that, and I don't honestly believe Jim is a casual guy.

Now how you get around Karen, that is something to which I look forward, because the thought of him sleeping with Karen... Ugh. Though I believe it most likely happened, it's not a pleasant thought. 

Awesome work thus far! :) 



Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad it was believable for you.
The Karen chapter should be up soon. I got a good portion of it written yesterday. So, stay tuned. ;o)

Reviewer: JamLover101 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 13, 2007 11:40 pm Title: Katy

OooOoo Karen thats the one I'm waiting for


Author's Response: hehe, I'm working on the Karen chapter as we speak.

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: August 13, 2007 08:09 pm Title: Katy

Mark pretty much thought Jim was gay for those few years.!!!

 

Awesome to have friends like that.

 

And now we get to the hard part...  What do you have in store for us, Puff?



Author's Response: lol yeah...
You'll see! I'm working on the Karen chapter as we speak. Stay tuned!

Reviewer: Beeswax Signed [Report This]
Date: August 13, 2007 10:39 am Title: Katy

You did a fabulous job with this chapter and you are starting to convince me that Jim is "inexperienced" in certain areas.

Now for Karen, I'm looking forward to that "interesting story"!

Reviewer: desert island Signed [Report This]
Date: August 13, 2007 09:43 am Title: Katy

I think this story about Katy is really believable. They never seemed very close, so it could have been extremely casual.
Nice work here... I am looking forward to Karen's story!!

Reviewer: officefreak Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 13, 2007 07:32 am Title: Katy

I'm sure it'll be interesting. I can't wait to hear the sordid details of that too. :o) Excellent chappie!

Author's Response: Thanks!!

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 13, 2007 07:27 am Title: Katy

Excellent work here, puff! I think you're accomplishing your stated goals quite nicely--staying true to Jim's character while simultaneously crafting this interesting and totally plausible back story for him. 

I think the changes you made (minor, though they were), really helped tighten the story up and make it just that much stronger.

I'm fascinated to see what you do when you get to Karen. (My guess is that she was just too scary for Jim. :P) 



Author's Response: Thank you so much for the long review and again for your help with this chapter! :oD

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: August 13, 2007 07:06 am Title: Katy

Alas, poor Katy. She really go the short end of the stick with Jim (wow, that pun was SO unintended). Hee.

Author's Response:

lol!!
And thanks for the review!

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: August 09, 2007 11:25 am Title: College

OK, the idea that he loved her enough to wait is very, very sweet. I like it very much.

Author's Response:

Thank you.

And I know, isn't it sweet? :o)
It only makes sense, though, doesn't it? I can't picture Jim ever being the type of guy to not wait if his girlfriend wanted to. If he didn't, then he'd be kind of a jerk. The only time we've ever seen him do jerky stuff is when he's trying to protect himself from heartbreak.

Reviewer: supergirlsudz Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 09:41 pm Title: Chapter 1

You already know that I really liked this! Jim and Josie's relationship feels so real, although what is wrong with her? If only she knew what she was missing now! I didn't mention this before, but it just came to me now. I love how Pam is so eager to hear about all this. It must be somewhat difficult for her but I bet she is relishing learning all these new things about Jim. Great job :-)

Reviewer: BlueJeanBaby Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 07:38 pm Title: College

So it has to be a Packer fan from Wisconsin that breaks his heart, eh??  Hmph.  ;)  Oh well, I'll accept that just because I'm enjoying this story.  I'm looking forward to the next chapter. 


Author's Response: THanks!!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 05:46 pm Title: Chapter 1

The photo I mentioned -- I was referring to the decoration on Jim's lamp.  Jim's college story made me think of it  ;o)

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 04:46 pm Title: College

Such a unique idea to explore, and you're doing a great job with it. All of Jim's reasons for not "going all the way" with his previous girlfriends are totally plausible. I especially liked the way you wrote this chapter. I'm not sure if I can explain why...it just felt very real to me. Excellent work! Keep it going!

Author's Response: Awww, thanks so much for the wonderful review!!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 02:37 pm Title: College

Ooh, good college story.   Which reminds me of this photo:

http://mtt.just-once.net/gallery/displayimage.php?album=77&pos=1 



Author's Response:

Thanks!

And that photo is of Jim and Dwight... should it be?

Reviewer: Jordon Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh poor, poor Jim. This chapter hits a little close to home, but I love it anyway.

Also, great touch with the Green Bay stuff - Brett Favre's #4 on each cheek and swearing at the tv? Yeah that's a dreamgirl.  



Author's Response: Aww. I'm glad you liked it anyway. I loved writing this chapter. It's my favorite so far.

Reviewer: secondrink Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08, 2007 01:49 pm Title: College

Aw, that brought a tear to my eye.  Poor, sweet Jimmy.  That was a great chapter.  The relationship between Josie and Jim was v realistic.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I loved writing this chapter.

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