Date: July 24, 2008 12:09 pm Title: Act Four and Tag
I love that you had the engagement be silent. What a great touch!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked that. I thought it was a nice compromise between actually seeing the proposal and Jim and Pam wanting some privacy for it. Thank you for taking the time to review belsum.
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2008 06:07 am Title: Act Four and Tag
Very cool. I really enjoyed the confusion over Jim and Pam being engaged and/or Pam being knocked up. And the whole mics off thing seemed very realistic to me, I love how the proposal went. This show wants to make us not so privy to everything that happens so that felt really Office like. Great!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review kgreene. I'm glad that you liked the proposal and the other scene as well. I like to write those kind of scenes, they are a little difficult to convey in only words, but hopefully it gets through. Thanks again!
Date: July 14, 2008 11:38 am Title: Act Four and Tag
OK, this was adorable. I think you've managed to convey that wonderful mix of awkward and sweet and laugh-out-loud that the episodes do. And of course we got an engagement, and that is always good! Very nicely constructed, and I especially like the way you've written Michael.
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked the way I've written Michael. I think he kind of swings from being an obnoxious kid to a tragic grownup, and I enjoy sort of showing both sides of that my self. Thank you for taking the time to review nqllisi.
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 09:08 pm Title: Act Four and Tag
ahhhh!
AMAZING!!!!
Author's Response: Haa, thank you! I'm glad that you liked it Dwangie.
Date: July 13, 2008 08:06 pm Title: Act Four and Tag
very good story! i could have used more JAM, but i feel that way about the real show sometimes. ;-) thanks so much for sharing!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked it officerules06. I think we can always use more JAM (at least I know I can) but with the proposal at the end I didn't want to go too heavy during the "episode" as a whole. Thanks again.
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 06:29 pm Title: Act Four and Tag
WOW! I don't know how I missed this story. I just read all 5 chapters in one sitting and felt like I watched the lost S4 episode!
Everyone was completely written in character and you pulled off the JAM stuff amazingly! Just the right amount of sweetness without being overly sentimental. I really felt for both Jim and Pam..you wrote them so true to character, I felt just as anxious while reading your script as I do when I watch an authentic episode.
I'm actually glad I read it all in one sitting because it flowed so well and like I said, made me feel as if I was experiencing an actual episode.
I don't normally like the script format fics (which is maybe why I missed it when it was originally posted), but this was just...WOW! /Pam
Author's Response: Thank you very much Abigail. I'm glad that the whole thing flowed together for you,and that you found things in character, those are the two things I try to achieve most of all. I'm glad that you liked the JAM stuff especially, I was worried how people might view the scene with Pam in the stairwell or the proposal, so I'm glad that they seemed to work for you. I appreciate you taking the time to leave such a nice review!
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 07:01 am Title: Act Four and Tag
I admittedly haven't been reading much newer fic lately--outside of those submitted for moderation--but I wanted to tell you that I thought this was absolutely amazing. I wish more people would try the script format. It helps fill the void of not having the show around. :D
In terms of writing and characterizations, you've nailed it. I dare say that the characters sound more realistic here than I've heard them on most of S4. ;) Great balance of humor and tension, but never going too far with one or the other. That's a delicate line to walk, and I think you managed it perfectly.
Thank you for writing this, as it's helping to reignite my own will to read and write fic. :D
Author's Response: What a lovely review! and I believe that you are the reason I now have a shiny blue ribbon next to this story (as I believe you did with A Kwanzaa Christmas as well), so doubly thank you! I'm not sure why more people don't try script-format, to me its different but still an interesting way to create fic. Thank you for the ribbon and the very nice review, I appreciate it Cousin Mose.
Date: July 12, 2008 06:48 pm Title: Act Four and Tag
Pitch perfect amount of tension with Pam & Jim. And a proposal I could imagine being captured on film. Although I really want to see it, I can't imagine Jim giving that to the cameras.
AWESOME episode, DFG!
Author's Response:
I agree with you about Jim not giving that to the cameras, and I'd be very surprised if they showed Jim's proposal on the show. I went back and forth about it a little, but in the end I wanted to see him propose and I wanted it to seem a little realistic, so I found a middle in them taking off their mics.
Thank you very much for you review lisahoo, I appreciate it very much.
10 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2008 03:37 pm Title: Act Four and Tag
O..M..G... I LOVED it!!!!
Author's Response: Well I glad that you did, BuffyFreak7. Thank you for all of your reviews for this story, I appreciate that you took the time to let me know how you felt about my little story.