Date: March 31, 2009 07:41 pm Title: The Bulkhead
Sorry I'm late reviewing, but I wanted to thank you for continuing this story. I love how Pam's gently breaking through the barriers that Harold and the Captain have erected in their lives and I think she will continue to be instrumental in helping them.
Take your time. The warm weather is returning. :)
Date: March 18, 2009 06:06 pm Title: The Bulkhead
Oh my. I've got such a lump in my throat, stablergirl. S.O.S. The explanation? I could cry. I don't know what you worry about. Everything you write is so good. Really. This was supposed to get me through summer without our fave show and now it's getting me through these last days of winter. You. Are. Amazing. That is all.
Date: January 05, 2009 10:39 am Title: The Hull
Ooh, I love the description of The Captain in the first paragraph. And the entire confrontation between him and Jim was spectacular. I like that you have Pam working with Harold while Jim is working with his guardian. Nice paralleling.
Date: November 18, 2008 10:59 am Title: The Hull
My goodness, what a mood and a feeling this creates, SG. I'm seeing the heat and the haze of summer and the dust on the infield so vividly. I can almost smell the gloves. I don't know why I almost have a pre-war (WWII that is) feeling here. I know it's not AU, but it's such a throwback in a way to a simpler time with Jim coaching baseball at the B&G club.
Love. Can't wait to see what happens over chili and what goes on with Pam and Harold.
Date: November 18, 2008 09:38 am Title: The Bow
I have been waiting for an update on this FOREVER! I'm so happy you added another chapter! This is seriously just so intriguing and it keeps me wanting more every time. I'm not real big on AU or when people create characters, but you are always the exception to the rule. And you make me love it. KEEP GOING.
Date: November 18, 2008 06:21 am Title: The Hull
Let me set the scene. I come to work like any other Tuesday. I make my breakfast in the kitchen, enter my office, and log in to my computer. After very minimal effort at checking my work e-mail, I log on to my home account. "Update to one of your favorites," said the e-mail. "Hmmm...wonder which one?" I replied. I click on the link. "HAROLD MORAN! GET THE F*CK OUT," was my reaction. So, yeah, I was pretty happy.
Stablergirl, I am beyond thrilled that you've continued with this, because it's that good. Needless to say, I haven't forgotten this story at all. So glad you were moved to update. I hope your writer's block is gone, because I am so into this.
The interaction between The Captain and Jim and then the interaction between Pam and Harold are just perfect. I just can't wait to see what happens next. Thanks for starting my day on a happy (euphoric? ecstatic?) note.
Date: July 28, 2008 11:52 am Title: The Keel
Wow. It's so rich and thick with the heat of the summer air and the dryness of life and evocative in so many more ways than you normally except from "mere fic". Transcendant may be the word I'm looking for. Simple phrases such as "the fists of his past" are revelatory.
Date: July 17, 2008 01:22 am Title: The Bow
Definitely on board with this one. I don't think I will ever tire of early-in-the-relationship stories. Since we were robbed of seeing it happen during the series, it leaves so much interpretation to the creative forces, such as yourself, and I love all of the different authors' takes on how J/P got their start. In the case of this story, I really love the hesitation on both of their parts to not advance the romance physically at first. Don't get me wrong, I like a good smut-fest where they fall into bed on the first date, but I think it keeps more with the characters that they did take it slow at first. It's very like Jim and Pam to be cautious and nervous around each other at first, then fall gently and naturally into the love that they now share. Excellent.
Date: July 16, 2008 07:31 pm Title: The Bow
I think you know my feelings on this pretty well at this point. Would it be wrong for me to gloat that I have the good fortune to see new chapters before anyone else? I guess that would probably be bad manners. Oh well.
Date: July 16, 2008 05:43 pm Title: The Keel
Love the metaphor of the heat, the irritability, the restlessness, the anticipation of a much needed downpour. It parallels our couple as they negotiate the tentative, early steps in their relationship with all that UST brimming just below the surface. Makes me think of "Love, Reign O'er Me" by The Who.
"Great, because I have a place I want to take you." I'll bet you do, Halpert.
And every word Pam spoke to Harold, she could have also been speaking indirectly to Jim. "It looks like you're working really hard here." "You look hot." "Me too." "I think you're doing a really good job." It's almost like she accepts and appreciates how Jim is handling things, at least for now.
And then again, I could be reading way too much into this, but that's what I got the first time I read it through. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: July 16, 2008 12:44 pm Title: The Bow
Wow. OK, this whole piece has such an atmospheric feeling to it- you can feel the heat, the dryness, the tension in Pam and Jim and Harold. The way you vary your sentence structure is deft and delightful, and every word is precisely chosen. And all of that is aside from the plot, which I find engaging and intriguing and I can't wait to see what happens next. Beautiful work.
Date: July 16, 2008 11:44 am Title: The Bow
Every paaragraph is filled with descriptive and captiving words. You have made it easy for the reader to visualize exactly what is happening. Poor little Harold -- the description of him at the gym was heartbreaking. The back story of Jim was great. It fits exactly to the Jim we have seen.
Date: July 16, 2008 11:11 am Title: The Keel
I honestly have absolutely no idea how you do it. I'm not a big AU type of reader, but I somehow become completely obsessed and enthralled by every piece you write. I LOVE the unique views and storylines you create. This is just incredible and I love every story you come up with.
Date: July 16, 2008 10:01 am Title: The Keel
I feel like I keep repeating myself but this is absolutely fantastic. It's like a refreshing drink mixed with great characterization and beautiful descriptions that perfectly capture the ambience of a hot hot summer day. I can't wait for more.
Date: July 16, 2008 09:03 am Title: The Keel
Stablergirl, this chapter was just gorgeous. I could picture everything. It is so believable that Jim and Pam would be scared and cautious in the beginning. I never believed that Pam was not good with children. She's such a gentle soul. I'm looking forward to Jim and Pam bringing Harold out of his shell and growing closer in the process, yes? Look forward to more.