9 [Report This]Date: December 23, 2008 07:51 pm Title: Chapter 2
Honestly, I didn't think I'd enjoy this, but wow this is really freaking good. I love it, and am looking forward to where you're taking it :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I am glad you took a chance on it and are liking it!
10 [Report This]Date: December 18, 2008 06:18 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow. I just stumbled upon this story and I already love it. It's such an interesting idea! I think I might be a fangirl. *cough*
Anyways, I'm really intrigued. Everything about this story seems to draw me in. Your writing style is very unique - I love the phrasing you use. It seems very poetic at times.
And the way you write Jim is absolutely spot-on. His dialogue is fantastic, his thoughts are great, and all of his actions are so true to the character that I can almost visualize them.
The way you write Stamford-Jim deserves a paragraph of its own. I really think you're doing a great job! Stamford-Jim is so different than Scranton-Jim, and I can definitely tell. Some differences are really obvious, but I'm drawn to the more subtle ones. I like that you still make him humorous, but in more of a bitter way (“Again with the name?” Jim muttered softly as he turned back around.) It makes the story seem very real-sounding, and just leaves me wanting more.
Oh my. Please excuse that long, rambling review. I'll save everything else I have to say for the next chapter. I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciated your review! I hope you like the next chapter!
10 [Report This]Date: December 17, 2008 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 2
All the references? But there are so many!
Well, I'm tired so I'm just going to guess on a couple, seeing as I haven't seen this movie in a good two years.
1. The wet Tom Sawyer book
2. The old car
3. The waitress's name?
4. Angels have to earn their wings
5. "I wish I'd never been born at all" - That one's obvious.
That's all I've got. x]
Can't wait for you to keep writing! I will keep reading!
Favorite quote:
“What the hell is in this coffee?”
Author's Response: Nice job! You got a lot of the references! I'm impressed! I am glad you're liking the story!
Date: December 17, 2008 09:06 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm really really enjoying this, and it is hillarious that you have Ed Truck as "Clarence". A small note, though- I'm finding it really distracting to read all of your dialog in italics. I keep thinking that the italics indicate thoughts rather than spoken words, and it is a little confusing. I would hate for a formatting choice to dissuade anyone from reading this really great story!
Author's Response: Thanks the for advice on the italics. I changed it for this next chapter so I hope it's easier! Thanks for the review!
Date: December 16, 2008 08:34 pm Title: Chapter 2
ed :]
that's neat.
Author's Response: Glad you approve. :) I was hoping people would like that.rnrnThanks for the review! I really appreciate you reading!
10 [Report This]Date: December 16, 2008 08:33 pm Title: Chapter 2
can't wait for next chapter
Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you like it!