7 [Report This]Date: October 12, 2006 01:51 am Title: Chapter 1
I wish I could write dialogue that flowed this easily. Well done. I love the "Yeah. I need you to look up." What a great gotcha moment!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I usually try to avoid this much dialogue. Glad you enjoyed it:)
Date: October 11, 2006 06:21 am Title: Chapter 1
Can you make this really happen? Like now? Pretty please?
Author's Response:
Don't I wish! Will have the 2nd part soon:)
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
so great! i didn't expect that ending at all!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 05:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love their conversation - and I'm intrigued by the last line. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 12:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great job. So simple, yet so engrossing. More please!
Author's Response: Thank you! 2nd part will be up soon.
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 11:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Well that sounds promising. Now we need more.
Author's Response: Very soon! I promise:)
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 08:15 am Title: Chapter 1
Gave me the biggest chill, made me stop chewing my sesame chicken on the spot. This is excellent - so true to their voices, so understated and realistic. God. Could you please storm the NBC lot where they're filming and force them to make this happen on the show?
Seriously - sheer brilliance, this. Love it! Will there be more....?
Author's Response:
You are too kind:) Glad you are enjoying it. Hope to get Part 2 up this evening.
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 07:12 am Title: Chapter 1
I love the simplicity of this, and you have their voices down so well that it works.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Appreciate it.
8 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 06:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Look up, Jim! *searches in vain for second chapter*
More, please :)
Author's Response: Ha! Chapter 2 should be up tonight. Thanks for your patience:)
9 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 05:45 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh! Cliffhanger!
I like this dialog-only style. It sounds like them.
Author's Response:
Yes, a cliffhanger. My first. I'm very nervous. Thanks for the review:)
Date: October 09, 2006 11:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
SQUEAL - that was fantastic! Woo!
Author's Response: You are very sweet. Thanks for the review:)
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yay! Was not expecting that last line--it's perfect! I love it.
Author's Response: Thank you! Hope to have the 2nd part up tonight.
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 11:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love this! More please :)
Author's Response: Thank you! Look for Part 2 tonight:)