Date: April 07, 2007 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
that was wonderful. I hate in many Jim Karen fics that Pam is somehow magically forgotten. And even when she is kind of present I don’t really feel she's written about with Jim’s true emotions in mind. This was just perfect. I love the whole angry sex thing and how he feels it isn’t him. Trying to grow up, the Travis song at the end. Very visual so well done. Amazing, two thumbs up. I want to live in your little writing world forever. I'll stop now, though I could go on.
Date: April 06, 2007 02:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
What a great story! It's a nice idea, the importance of going on a trip together, and I lvoe your characterization of both of them. NICE!
Date: March 26, 2007 01:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love when there's a double meaning at the end of a fic to make you think. As another reviewer pointed out, there's a triple meaning with the "track." I really like your writing style, too.
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
This kicked serious ass. Lots of ambiguity and grey area makes for a great fic, especially when we can't really tell what's going to happen, if Karen wins, or Jim goes nuts or anything like that. And you actually know your French and Montreal, which is impressive (either that or you're very good at faking it) - I'm Canadian, I took French in school through to grade 10 and I can't get the hang of it at all.
Date: December 02, 2006 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
Dude, this is amazing. Hope to see more from you.
10 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2006 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aargh, my review disappeared into the internets... apologies if it appears twice... Wow. I love this. Totally incohorently: so well-written: the emotion, banter, sex, and characters are perfect. The last line floored me: I love that it applies to the train, the song, Jim's life... Just wow.
9 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2006 01:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
Logan's Run, and moxie, and half incoherent non-sentences. Yes, yes, yes. Very good :) This has exactly the feel of a long-weekend trip with someone new.
7 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2006 07:40 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, man, love him having deleted and reuploaded the Travis song so many times. And hee, Boy Least Likely.
Author's Response: Thanks! You're like my fanfic hero, so that means a lot. Your Toby fic a week or so ago was what really spurred me to try to do something of my own.
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 06:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very impressive first fanfic. I'm not a Karen/Jim fan but enjoyed reading the dynamic you created with Karen the leader and Jim the follower she is molding to be more like her. The last line was too beautiful for words.
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 04:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
I must confess, I'm not fan of Jim and Karen, and only read this fic b/c I wanted to see what they were doing in my hometown. I ended up liking it a whole lot, and picturing them walking through (and under!) the streets I know so well.
"He could be happy here" - and of course I will be there to take him under my wing...
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
Really sexy and in-character with just this bit of lovely sadness underneath.
9 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 01:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Beautifully written.
8 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was awesome, and rather alarmingly so considering the fact that, while I think Karen is a pretty cool gal, I never would I have thought I'd have a moment where I seriously thought, "God, Jim. Just forget about her and be happy for once, eh?"
Elegantly written and generally enchanting. Well done!
Date: November 29, 2006 12:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yes, yes, yes. When I read this:
It's with Karen that for the first time Jim feels like a grown-up. Something about having her in his life makes wearing a suit and tie feel less like playing pretend, makes fucking with Dwight seem silly, makes three years of pining after an engaged woman seem bizarre and melodramatic.
I knew I was in for a treat, and you did not disappoint. You're aces!
Author's Response: Hey thanks. You've got some pizazz yourself.
8 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 09:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Liar. This cannot possibly be your first fanfic. For damn sure it isn't your first writing.
You got Jim:
"...if you mean that alcohol brings out my deep and abiding love for the mall and sophomore boys, well then, guilty as charged.”
“That was a narrowly averted disaster there, Fillipelli.”
Travis song he's deleted and then put back on about five or six times, because he can't decide if he wants it on there or not.
You got Karen:
“You're gonna put on some of your indie bullshit,” she says.
"I know that you handle your liquor like a fourteen-year-old girl.”
"I swear to Christ, if you leave me in this shower by myself, I will tell everyone at the office that you like Sleepless in Seattle.”
It's all gold. I congratulate you on a first class debut. I hope you post more of your work. Thanks!
Author's Response:
Say, thanks. It is indeed my first fanfic, though I've been lurking around it for the past six months or so, but certainly not my first story.
It's weird, I find it almost harder to write for already established characters than ones I create on my own, like I have to work harder at it. Maybe that's why when author-created characters enter into fanfic it always seems a bit weird.
Thanks for the kind words!
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 09:32 am Title: Chapter 1
This was oh so good, and yet very sad. I felt Jim trying to embrace this, and yet, somewhat holding out. I really feel for him. Their relationship felt somewhat like I imagined it.
By the way, I was very sad to hear Jim and Karen hated Pointe-à-Callière since it is one of my favourite museums, but they're fictional so I'll live. ;)
Author's Response:
I've never actually been to Montreal, it just seemed like a good place for Karen to be worldly with her French while Jim kinda shuffles his feet. I just wanted to show that Jim didn't want to go to the art museum because of Pam, but what he suggested in return didn't really tickle his fancy either.
Thanks for the review!
9 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 08:24 am Title: Chapter 1
This is a lovely study in Jim looking for moments where they fit. Hopefully, he'll realize he's trying too hard before it's too late. Thanks for the good angsty feeling!
Author's Response: Thanks! I enjoyed showing Jim having phantom pains about Pam, but still trying to show that he and Karen would get along very well. It's just that three years of being a sap is hard to shake.
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 07:43 am Title: Chapter 1
Loved this--you really have nothing to worry about :)
The moments were great, real and fun but what made me really love reading this were the hints you included about Jim's thoughts. From the good-loved the 1st paragraph about him starting to feel like an adult-to the not so good-the little reminders of Pam were wonderful-all those thoughts fit really well into the story and into the characters. I can see the next few episodes feeling very much like this--Jim's growing up, trying hard to move on, but can't quite leave the past behind.
The whole thing was great, but my favorites were the 1st and last paragraphs and the scene in the restaurant--really beautiful. Please write more :)
Author's Response:
I really hope the nest few episodes do show this, Jim growing up a bit. I'd like to see Jim being unwilling to return to the status quo (why should he? It made him miserable), but finding that his residual feelings for Pam make that harder than he'd like.
Thanks for the review!
9 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 06:58 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, what an amazing, well-written piece. I can't believe this is your first fanfic! It really makes me believe in Jim and Karen- but I also like how there is the faintest hint of Pam here (adding and deleting the Travis song). Absolutely loved the last line. Wonderful job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I actually tried to go and find that playlist they put on iTunes from Jim Halpert a while back, but I couldn't find it, so Travis it was. I do remember that playlist was a bunch of sad-boy mopester stuff. I'd like to think that Karen would shake him out of that a little.
Date: November 29, 2006 06:53 am Title: Chapter 1
Suckage my ass! This is amazing. Please write more. The mood and tone and dialogue and everything in this are amazing.
Author's Response:
Hee. "Suckage my ass" made me giggle.
Thanks for the kind words. I plan on writing more, but I want to wait and see what happens this week before starting out again. Hopefully the episode will give us some juicy stuff to work with.
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 06:27 am Title: Chapter 1
This was sad and beautiful and perfect. Sigh.
Author's Response: Thanks. I hope it wasn't too sad -- I wanted to show Jim being mostly happy, but just slightly ambivalent about the whole thing.
Date: November 29, 2006 06:21 am Title: Chapter 1
This was SO well done. I'm not a Karen/Jim fan (to say the least), yet I was totally absorbed.
Something to make it so it's just him and her and no one else around the edges, so that her green eyes would be the only ones he sees when he closes his own.
What an insanely good line. As was the last one of the story. The tone of this was simultaneously incredibly sexy, melancholy, hopeful and very believable. Please write more!
Author's Response: Thanks! A lot of times in my own writing I worry about flying off the handle with my language, and I liked writing this a lot because I could write lines like that, and not have them seem out of place. Plus, one of my favorite things I've ever heard anyone say to anyone else when they were in love was something like, "I just want to create this tiny little world where it's just you and me and nobody else."
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 06:12 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this is really good. Really makes you think about these characters. Amazing job, especially for your first fanfic!
Author's Response: Thanks! I hope people will give Karen and Jim a chance, if the show moves in that direction, because I think they're a really compelling couple for a lot of reasons.
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2006 06:12 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this is really good. Really makes you think about these characters. Amazing job, especially for your first fanfic!
Date: November 29, 2006 05:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. OK. Though the subject matter is like salt on a wound for someone as desperate for Jim/Pam love as I am (totally my issue - nothing at all to do with your writing - which was fantastic) I gotta tell you how absolutely incredible I thought this was.
I could see every moment of this story in my minds eye. You did a wonderful job making it real for me - because no one's really been able to convince me of the possibility until now. It made me sad and it really made me think.
And you're totally kidding with the first fic nonsense aren't you? 'Cause - if you've been hiding out - well that's nearly criminal. Really well done. Thanks for so much for posting.
Author's Response: It really is my first fanfic, though I've been writing non-fan stuff for years and years now. This show has just gotten under my skin in a big way, and the idea for this story would not go away.
I'm glad I could make Jim and Karen real for you, even if it is like salt in the wounds. I also believe that ultimately Pam and Jim would work out best together -- especially considering how much we've seen Pam grow in the last eight episodes -- but I also think Jim and Karen would work well together, just not as well.
Thanks for the review!