I don’t get to kiss you again until our second date, which is three weeks after our first date, which is a year and a half after our other first date.
I never read fanfic. But I read this, and it was wonderful!
This part made me lol, quite literally:
I’ve never been this close to you in the dark for so long, except on movie days at work, which don’t count because we are also really close to Meredith and Creed.
Ideas for Cold Openings (the pre-title gags) always pop into my head. So these will be just a bunch of teasers that, hopefully, you will find funny. I don't know how many I will post but I'll keep putting them up as they occur to me.
10 Ha these seem totally plausible, spot-on and hilarious! Great job! Keep 'em coming!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks!
10 LMAO Lincoln Log made me SERIOUSLY laugh out loud. There were tears!
Great job :)
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you!
8 Oh man I laughed so hard at this. Got a little out of character for pam towards the end I think, but great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really went back and forth about whether this was something Pam would do. After I read it back, I felt more comfortable with it, especially when she sort of snorts and laugh at it. I feel like she is looser and freer with Jim but still doesn't realize just how sexy she is. But I can understand if it feels out of character. I think that Fancy New Beesly is still growing, though!
Ha the whole time I was reading this I thought, hey, someone should do a choose your own adventure story! Apparently that was running through your mind as well :)
Nicely done!
Author's Response: Ha, thanks! It's not exactly a choose your own adventure, but you do get to be in the story! Thanks for the review!
9 SANTA ISN'T REAL?????
Besides crushing all my Christmas dreams, I liked it! Are you continuing it or is this a one shot? :)
8 "It reminds her of that night when he shoved all this bloody mess into her hands, asking her to take it and deal with the guilt. He didn’t know he’d walked away with her soul stuck to his shoe."
That is just superb imagery right there!
Haha I loved the modern update to Say Anything and I laughed so many times through this. Good job!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked the reference, I thought it was kind of appropriate. I was going to have it rain actually, but decided against it. Thanks for the kind words and review alucier.
You might consider a title change or modification. I definitely thought this was "Baby Talk" by LoveFool.
Other than that, I'm interested to read more!
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