Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: March 22, 2020
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Great introspection through all the canon-correct moments. I really liked how you got into their heads while everything we saw on screen was going on.
I was wondering when you were going to take this story AU. Dwight's friendship and his encouragement was a lovely way to do it. Clearly this Pam has done quite a bit of growing since Jim left and came back, but I think it's entirely realistic that she needs that little extra push.
Interesting take with Karen there. He's given her what she wanted, more clear signs that he's putting effort into their relationship and then she just breaks it off. I appreciate that you gave us the whole conversation. Those scenes can be tricky to write, but I think you did it well in order to achieve the effect you wanted.
Then of course when Pam comes over it's all just wonderful. Well done Pam for being the one to fight for Jim. The reward is waking up in his arms which is always a lovely image to envision. Great job.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, this means so much! I love trying to figure out what the characters are thinking while watching the show, so I'm glad to finally be able to write down what I think is going on.
I was a little worried about writing additional dialogue for the Pam/Dwight scene, because Dwight is such an interesting character and it can be hard to keep him that way while also trying to expand on him, but I think I did okay, hopefully lol. I definitely think that Pam was a lot stronger by herself at this point, but you can see throughout the show, even after she's with Jim and is at her best, that sometimes she still needs that little bit of encouragement.
I also wasn't really sure how to get Jim and Karen to break up, because I knew I needed them to for the end of the story. I considered having Pam confess and then Jim would break up with Karen, but that just didn't seem right. So, I figured Karen deserved a little bit of justice and dignity and would break up with him once she finally accepts that he's just too far gone with Pam.
I love a good Jam fluff sesh, especially if it follows a confession lol. I'm glad you think I did well on it! When I first saw the prompt, my initial reaction was to have Jim fight for Pam, but we need some girl power.
Thank you so much for your detailed review, I really appreciate it!