I can't believe I took so long to read this chapter. You might have guessed that I'm a bit more sympathetic to Karen than the average Jammer, so of course I LOVE what you've done with her here. I mean, right from the point when she says, “Let’s try the truth for a change Jim.” and he says,  "but in the end what you have to know is…… I didn’t mean to hurt you." I mean, wow. That is just a perfect start to this falling out. And your middle and end are perfect too.

Because honestly, if I was Karen, I'd feel just as you depicted her here. Shocked, because he seemed like such a great guy. Angry, because he led her on, whether he meant to or not. 

There is too much awesome in this chapter for me to detail, but suffice it to say it's perfect. On to ch 8! 

“Course, Jim, you’re gonna have to come closer, if you recall this is sensitive information and the walls do have ears.”
 
GUH. So hot. I love flirty!Pam!

Jim stepped forward until he was standing right in front of Pam. He rested his fingertips on either side of her on his desk, trapping her; he would not let her go this time.  

Seriously, this is one of the hottest images in the history of images. Fantastic. 

“I’ve waited, wow, what feels like forever, to hear you say those words to me.  Pam, I definitely still love you, I don’t know how not to be in love with you.”

This struck me as such a Jim way to say this. I could jsut see him saying every word of it. I think it's challenging to write these big emotional "I love you" moments, and you did a great job here.

And the “Your place or mine?” moment? PRICELESS. And I loooove what you've done with the ending. This part:

“We could leave a Staples bag on Creed’s desk Monday morning.”

Made me laugh out loud. Seriously. I'm sort of sad to see this fic go! You better send me some stuff soon :) 

Adorable! I must have laughed out loud ten different times. Your dialogue is fanastic!


Author's Response: Hooray, thanks shan! It's good to hear that the dialogue works, and I'm glad you liked the story! This was a really fun challenge!

Wow. I've never read such a realistic break up scenarior for Jim and Karen. I am so loving this story. Please continue!

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHhhhhmazing.  This line here:

"actually I’m pretty pissed he fell down because I really wanted to hit him…and it just seemed wrong to do it once he was already lying there…”

Made me smile this huge goofy grin, because I love imagining Jim saying this. I am completely enamoured with this fic. Thank you! 

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

Don't hurt Jim!!

Oh, this was just fantastic! Every scene was so realistic. I could see it happening on the show! Especially the Wake-n-Bacon and Michael's "coming out" announcement.

But such a crazy, amazing cliffhanger! Too cruel! 

Oh jeeze! I was giggling through this entire thing! I was so excited to see the reference to Creed stealing Kevin's DVD. Awesome way to incorporate the scratched DVD prompt!

That deleted scene from Cocktails really made me think that Angela and Oscar could have an actual friendship, and you showed perfectly how it could work. I love Angela's inner thoughts, I love that Kevin wound up with water on the front of his jacket, and I LOVE this line:

"She spent the day in a state of constant fear."

Wow. This is like an EPIC. I love it so very much, because Jim/Dwight interaction is the best part of the show.

You both showed such a fantastic progression in the... friendship?... of Jim and Dwight. Totally believable. I really felt for Dwight when his plans for Jim's visit to Schrute Farm didn't go as planned. 

And oh my god! You're dialogue is unbelievable on target (funny, perfect) and the POV of both Jim and Dwight were equally amazing. I am so happy that you wrote this. 

Okay, I don't know how the hell I missed this fic, but it is fanTAStic! I love anything involving Karen/Pam interactions.

I looooove Pam finding Jim's boxers. LOVE it. Karen and Pam would get along so well if it wasn't for the fact that they both love the same guy. Heh.

Can't wait for the next part!

(p.s. I just read your end notes, and I expect your firstborn whenever he/she comes along) 

1) I adore Karen too, and I love that you didn't have her explode.

2) As much as I love a good JAM kiss, I can see your point

3) I feel like you have a baaaad experience with hangover jokes. (Did you have a happy childhood? Tell me about your father.)

4) Yeah Karen/Pam friendship! 

I can see how you could have shortened Karen's dialogue a bit, but it wasn't ridiculously long or anything. I love this story just the way it is. The part where Pam realizes that Jim is holding the mug of hot cocoa? Priceless. (although I've had a bad tequila experience and if anyone approached me with hot chocolate the next morning, I would have... well, it would have been messy. Water only.)

Beautiful. You have real talent as a poet. I love that each line is three words. 

Oh jeeze, Moxie. You are amazing. I've tried to read fics that integrate chat text like dialogue and I've never liked it... before now. I'm still beyond excited to see what happens next. I love that Jim is going to use this info to his advantage. Sneaky, sneaky.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much, shan21!  One of the things that helped me write the chat dialogue was to just type it as I heard it happening, then go back and accredit the lines later.  But maybe that works for me because chaos reigns supreme in my head!!!  Thanks for reading and reviewing - I so appreciate your thoughts!

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! Perfect ending! Perfect! I love that Jim can sort of... "toy with Pam" isn't what I really want to say, but you know what I mean?

So good!