When everything reminds you of the past, it is best to embrace it.
There's a little formatting problem with the underlining of 'not.'
I love how you've introduced Dwight and Angela's situation in this chapter. I could definitely see them having this sort of conversation. I love Jim's last line.
Ha! "It hurt my soul." Funny.
Author's Response:
Hi. Twelve years ago, you commented on this story. On one of the chapters, you said it was OK if I didn't respond to each chapter review individually, and I said OK.
But those unanswered reviews are sitting in my profile mocking me. So I'm replying today. Yes, I am neurotic. That's why I was so obsessed with fanfic back in the day! (Thanks for reading and reviewing!)
I'm with Pam on the groaning. Send Jim and his bad puns back to Stamford. Cheesy!Jim. ;)
If I suddenly stop reviewing, don't worry, I'll come back later. I don't know when my reading time is going to be cut short. :)
That's so nice!
For some reason, your list in the first sentence seems very poetic -- it just flows so nicely, I guess. A TWHS for "she was inexhaustible." Jim's explanation of the day vs. the night for him in Stamford was really good.
Wow! I forgot about the candle, too! What kind of JAMmer am I? (A forgetful one, I guess.) Very nice.
Author's Response: If you are a forgetful JAMmer, I am an obsessed one. Thanks for liking this chapter!
Aww! Very sweet, lis. What a nice job you did on this challenge!
I came into my TLK gmail after...I don't know how long...and imagine my surprise to find this. And of course, I went into my own fics and reminded myself that I...used to write fanfic? Whaaaa? ;)
Author's Response: Ha! I hear ya. One of the current fic writers is bringing me great joy by reading through all my old stuff so I’ve been back on this site a bit— which is how I saw your unanswered reviews. This was a fun time. I’m glad we were part of it together.
Ha! Fun! Nice job.
A collection of stories and vignettes in response to the Word challenge. They all involve the conference room in some way. The chapter titles are the prompt words from the challenge.
"This is where I snapped out of my quiet reverie and felt quite alarmed" -- that's such a great little moment in this. I also love how you've sprinkled little character bits in here, like Angela born looking uncomfortable and Michael wanting to be Penn and Teller. Also the hecklers and security perhaps being on a lunch break are fun little moments.
Only Kevin would evaluate a potential mate for her lead singer potential -- I'm not really sure how you thought of that. Are you in a band? ;) Good job putting yourself in Kevin's head there.
Also, you're entirely welcome. :) I'm so glad to see the first chapter up!! Yay!
There were other things in Kevin's head. Like Angela, cookies and Sting. I didn't stay long.
I love when you write Creed, and I can imagine him doing this. There's very little I'd put past Creed, really. ;)
I'm glad Michael sold Jan's too-expensive book on eBay. I've just re-watched the episode (Money, maybe?) where she's talking about redecorating his apartment -- "It costs what it costs." Grrr.
I love this view of sad Dwight and his relationship with Angela. It renews my interest in what will happen to them in the last part of this season. Will Angela choose to come back? Is she a smart kitty? ;)
I also applaud any appearance of Cousin Mose in a story or on the show. No doubt the Seamonster is back at Schrute Farms, waiting with some cat food to welcome Mose and Garbage home. He'll be disappointed the cat isn't with them.
"It's all about who you know..." Poor Andy, always trying to get into the exclusive clubs. ;)
I'd try to choose a favorite, but I'd have to list half of them, so I won't. You've done a good job showing everyone's little quirks and personalities in these short sentences, like Angela's understated "and vote to convict." I'd way rather have Michael Scott judge me than Angela. She's... severe. ;)
I like how the chapters are so different from each other.
I was wondering exactly how long it takes Creed to play solitaire. It probably takes a really long time because he's waiting for the other guy to take his turn. ;)
Oh, and one little nitpick...
Nah. Just kidding. ;)
Wallace "liked to keep his distance and thus his sanity" -- if only Dwight had kept his distance -- or perhaps he never was sane.
"I bet whatever suggestions you have are better than what I heard just now." -- Nah. How could there be a better idea than blimps? Dirigibles! Nothing could be better. One went right over my back yard once. They're surprisingly loud.
And did I hear an implied "Dunder Mifflin, this is Pam"? I'm sure Jim is very happy he's not hearing "Dunder Mifflin, this is Grace." :)
Yay for sympathetic Pam!
I would think poor Michael would get nightmares from the new Terminator show. Dwight might believe Terminators are around every corner. He shouldn't worry though. Not that many of us came through, and Dwight's not in our mission parameters... ;)
I enjoy how these all continue to be so different from each other. Fun! :)
Ha. I like your changes.
You know, not that anyone really 'clicks' with Michael, but he and Jan aren't really on the same wavelength, are they? What are they doing together? I guess it makes a little bit of sense once they started showing how screwed up Jan is; they're two misfits.
I think two of my favorite lines are "Sex with Jan was no longer Sex with JAN! to him but he was still in awe of their relationship at times" and "the chickens coming home to the rooster." I also liked the little mention of Hunter. I hope he's not letting them change him. ;)
Eh. My kid is "timing me." I said we could do something on the computer "in a minute." Aargh.
Nice job on the stories, Swedge. :)
Think, Phyllis! Think!
I enjoy those moments when Angela turns on a dime, like she has here. Another one of those moments was when Pam said she was more of a dog person (in the newer scenes of...Traveling Salesmen, maybe?) In any case, the temperature in the room suddenly drops to a deep freeze.
Ooh, Darryl! Bad advice. Not that we would've wanted Roy to have been able to hang onto Pam; of course, we wanted her to move on. But still... ;)
Excellent job on the Darryl voice.
Finis.
It was good to finish with one that had the conference room as the main subject like this, and I can imagine that Michael would have a lot of love for that room. But I enjoyed, in general, how different all of the stories were. It seems just about all the characters were included somewhere.
Good job, Swedge. And now it's off your plate. :)
MEMBER'S CHOICE - Katy and Jim are still dating during Jim’s “Email Surveillance” BBQ. When Pam sees them together it lights a fire under her.Wow. I intended to read this eventually, but hadn't gotten to it. Then I happened to be looking at the 'most recent' page, and saw the interesting summary again, and thought "well, I'll just take a peek." Yowza. ;)
You've done a really good job capturing everyone. I also really like stories that show a different way things could have gone, if only there had been a change. I think it would have been very interesting if the actual show had gone this way, with Jim sticking with the relationship with Katy. It's typical for people to hang on for a while, even if it's not the right relationship, and I think that would have been more likely with Jim and Katy than the way it went on the show.
Anyway (I ramble) -- really good job. I enjoyed it quite a bit.
Good job, Strider! You captured it!
Author's Response: Thanks, I appreciate that! Thanks for reviewing!\r\n\r\n--Strider
Alex Wert! I happen to think they should bring those bathing suits back. I'd rock that look. ;)
I'm not sure I needed Andy's right buttock scratching. This story is certainly interesting so far.
Angela's mother's advice: The only dating advice my mother ever gave me was that if a boy tries to touch my bathing suit areas, go limp. Probably not the best way to get him to stop touching, but...I guess at least Angela's mom was trying.
I have no idea where you're going from here. I also have no idea (in your story or on the show) why Andy is even bothering going after Angela. There have to be looser chicks around. Like nuns, for instance.
I'm going to try to be better about reading stories sooner. We'll see how that goes. :) Also, I'm glad you still exist.
TLK, you'd rock any look.
You might not have needed Andy's right buttock scratching, but I certainly did. And Angela's mother's advice may not have been about getting the boy to stop touching, but possibly her thoughts on what 'relations' was supposed to be like. Missionaries don't know a lot of positions. (This advice is not original. In Andy's words: "I stole it" from a show no one outside of Canada will ever see.)
Andy is bothering to go after Angela because she has a tight ass. He's also possibly masochistic.
I'm glad I still exist too.
My favorite lines...
Then he went to see if he was peeing blood.
It was scary, but not unhot.
Shave and a hair cut, two bits. Andy.
Question: When Angela said she almost peed, did you mean to have Andy say "Also possibly unhot"? Because I think it's definitely unhot, but maybe Andy thinks it's possibly hot. The wording just confused me a bit.
Ear sex. Sounds unsatisfying to all involved. Nose sex sounds worse. Up until that part, I liked this chapter better than the first.
And you thought my Easter at Schrute Farms thing was weird. :) What will be next? (Well, I guess that nose sex.)
I'll be reading.
Oh come on! Of course ear sex is unsatisfying - that was the whole point of the Family Guy episode I stole it from. Well, actually the point was exposing the senselessness of abstinence only sex education. But either way it sounded like something an uptight chick like Angela would do instead of actual sex. And the nose sex was an in-joke that wasn't meant to be actually funny or sensible on its own. Also, watch for an Angela talking head about that in the next chapter.
To answer your question, Dwight, Andy thinks it's possibly hot, hence 'not unhot' which is something that a creepy guy like Andy would say. There's a whole genre of porn involving defecating, and while to sane people like us it is entirely disturbing, I guess some guys are turned on by it. Shudder.
Your Easter at Schrute Farms thing was weird. It was also awesome and a very tightly written story at that.
Angela is incensed into albinism. Hah.
This continues to be odd and silly. It's a good thing I like odd and silly. I love Angela's idea of role-playing.
I hope your hockey team starts winning and your friend stops drinking. I also hope that your friend with a drinking problem isn't like Ryan's friend with a drug problem.
Actually, my team was eliminated in 4 straight in the first round. So this is my backup team, which is now down 3-1.
My drinking problem is that I can't afford alcohol. But actually it is my friend and not Ryan's friend that has the problem, but she's getting better. It was mostly symptomatic of other problems of hers and now that she's solving those she's been a lot more stable. Thanks.
Nicely written, Mr. Bill. I don't think I'm quite as enamored of Pam Beesly's butt as you and Jim (not the gender I go for, really ;) -- I'm female, and like Pam, I'm not gay), but you did a nice job capturing Jim's thoughts.
Author's Response: Oops...I made a mistake. If my initial response to you (that I mistakenly entered as a new "review") has now been deleted I just wanted to say thanks for your review and I'm glad you liked it. I had a bit of a concern as to how people might react to the title, but I figured I'd go for it anyway. Thanks again!
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