I thought I was just here to read, but I guess I ended up writing a little. My bad. :)
I'm switching to Yes on beta-reader, because I should have more time now that I've finished my own recent story and I'll probably take a break from writing. I don't know how many requests will come from that, so I reserve the right to change back to No if I get overwhelmed. :) But I am an unrepentant grammar Nazi, and have edited a LOT in the past, so I'm totally up for a little beta.
More Jim and Pam and their adventures in raising baby Jill!
Aww. I love Dwight in this! He's so...well, so Dwight.
By the way, I've been reading this story and shamelessly not leaving reviews, because I was going to just wait until the end, but I have to say you've written Jim and Pam as such a normal, believable--yet completely sweet and funny and romantic--couple in this story, that I'm absolutely hooked. Great job. Really wonderful.
Okay, UNBELIEVABLY sweet. So totally Jim. I love when he swears because it's "artistically necessary." Ha!
So, SO sweet. This is fabulous.
Eeeeep! Scary! If you hadn't referenced this in the previous chapter, I would've been scared outta my mind reading it. But I knew it would turn out okay. And Protective!Jim is always a crowd pleaser. :)
Love this story.
So many great little moments in this chapter! It's fabulous how you referenced other chapters in the entries. And it sounds so very Jim. Great voice in the entries.
This was so Jim: "Yesterday I tried to entertain Jill with my watch." Hee.
Love the redacted breastfeeding entry, the pregnancy scare entry, all the entries referring to sex--because, yay, sex!
Great chapter. This story is da bomb.
Pam tries to kill time when Sudoku just isn't cutting it for her.
Okay, that is definitely the sweetest little fic in the world. I want to register for china with it.
pam lets the moments go. and she doesn't call.
set sometime during the summer between casino night and gay witch hunt.
Wow--this is really bittersweet. The lack of capitalization throws me a bit, but your phrasing is just beautiful. Very well done.
Aw! It's perfect. I love the comedic moments interspersed with the sweetness of the fact that they're having babies together. Dwight freaking out that his extra strength may have come from a girl fetus, Michael's (I assume it was Michael anyway) comment about a woman's breasts holding 2 gallons of milk (bwah ha ha!), Kelly planning a C-section on a famous person's birthday (whose birthday is it?)...so many wonderful details. I just loved it.
Author's Response: Thanks, invis! Re: the details: it's fun to find something that resonates with readers. :) (Michael's lines are actually Kevin's - but they must read both ways, eh?)
9 Really interesting idea. I almost never read AU fics, and I've never read one anything like this. It's intriguing, and I know it's got a ways to go yet, but I'm still going to read it even though it's a WIP. So, man--you got me on three things I don't usually read! Good job! :)
10 Oh, man, I can only imagine how crazy it must be writing Dwight into this story. Does he have that hollowed-out Physician's Desk Reference? :)
Hope you continue soon. The writing is excellent and the story is really interesting. Consider my interest piqued.
Speculation for S3 and a whole lotta wishful thinking. Pam's trying to be gracious about Jim's relationship with Karen - but she's had enough - and tells (shows) him so.
OMG, I almost cried when Pam said all that to Jim! And I don't cry. I'm a robot, really. So, like, excellent job there!
Author's Response: I know you reviewed this 100 years ago - but I wanted to thank you for taking the time to review. I am going back to see if I missed any reviews and I just realized I didn't take the time to say thank you back then. So thank you!!
I love that she couldn't just leave him there in the parking lot, with his car in a snow drift. It's so authentic an action for Pam. Great characterization in this. I love it!
Ha! Oh, Mark would know better than to interrupt THAT. Even if he were in the bathroom or something. He can just darn well stay in there until they're finished. :)
Jim and Pam discuss cohabitation on a Sunday morning. Written after Back from Vacation as an antidote to Pam's crying scene. Just couldn't leave it alone, now could I?
Disclaimer: Own nothing related to The Office. Sad, but true. No copyright infringement is intended.
SQUEE! Those last two sentences are amazing. And I never use the word "amazing," because I think it's way too overused, so you know ya done good. :)
Great story. I loved it.
SQUEE!!!!!!!!!! So happy right now! That was great. You are my hero.
Author's Response: Oh, wow, thank you! I still think this could be the way it goes down (or something like it). Karen can't put up with this forever, can she? :)
Wonderful. And I got a little laugh out of your ending line, because judging from the rest of the piece, you wouldn't think "big sombreros" would go with it, but it really fits right in. I don't know how you did that, but great job. :)
Written in response to the Evening Coming (aka the Scarf) challenge. Not usually one for prompts, but this one got me thinking.
Oh. My. God. Well, I'm sorry, but I have to marry this story. That's really the only solution. Holy...yeah. Awesome. So, so fabulous. I'm bereft now that it's over. This is so what should happen for reals.
This line killed me: She wants to scream that he just has to say the word, but he might have a whole new vocabulary now.
And this? Perfection:
‘Invite me over,’ he whispers.
‘I’m in love with you,’ she replies.
Typical slow days at the office with the Ladies of Dunder Mifflin.
God, I love Dwight. You've given him such Dwight-worthy lines. This is fabulous:
"If there is one attack that men can not defend against it is lacrimation of the eyes. 79% of the female species can cry at will. They are a worthy foe.”
Bah ha ha ha ha! I love Jim being all "structure guy" in the meeting. And Dwight is so...so Dwight! This story never fails to make me laugh.
Author's Response: I love when Jim's in charge! He would be such a good manager. What's really great is that everyone plays along because they know he's just toying with Dwight. Love it.
LOL @ Ryan: Ryan interrupted, “No. I’ve never called him. Ever.”
Author's Response: Sadly, he has. He just forgot. He sorta called him in 'The Fire' so he does have Michael's cell number in his phone's memory...if he just took the time to look.
Bah ha ha ha: They were still a little upset about Dwight’s trying to unbutton their pants to test if a Dundie would fit.
Author's Response: I'm hoping their pants were roomy enough for the Dundie....Ryan does look like he wears tighter trousers than anyone else in the office. Not that I've been checking him out or anything. ;)
Haaaaaa ha ha ha ha ha! That was great.
LOL @ Kelly: "Karen? Girlfriend, can I give you a clue? No guy likes a girl who talks on and on about how she feels!!!"
LOL @ Jim and Dwight! Dwight!!!!!
“I am not squeamish. Nothing upsets me. Nothing. And there is no beach rubble here.”
That's priceless.
OMG, Dwight! I love Dwight, and I love you for getting him right. I mean, platonically, of course. But still. Love.
10 Oh. Beautiful. I absolutely fell for this story.