10 [Report This]Date: April 22, 2008 10:17 am Title: to the light
Oh my god. Simply amazing. I don't even know where to start about what I loved about it. You captured the essence of FNB with precision. Excellent story!
7 [Report This]Date: April 13, 2008 07:54 am Title: to the light
this is so charming! i love this! i think it's written with such a light touch, in a really masterful way.
Date: March 02, 2007 08:53 pm Title: to the light
Does anyone else think that for a comedy, this show gets very depressing if you think about the characters?
Date: February 12, 2007 09:29 pm Title: to the light
Okay, I read this earlier at work (hehe) so I couldn't comment, but I had to make sure to come back! I really loved this, it was so painful and so Pam. Its heartbreaking that Karen is there when she does it and the writing is fantastic. I'm so lucky that you offered to beta one of my stories! You have no idea :) GREAT job!
9 [Report This]Date: February 12, 2007 01:50 pm Title: to the light
the accessories that didn't protect and the card that means she won't be eating this evening either.
What a devastating line.
I always love your writing.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I was feeling kind of disgruntled after the wedding epsiode, so I got teensy bit dark.
9 [Report This]Date: February 12, 2007 11:05 am Title: to the light
she drives home barefoot.
What a wonderful visual- she's free and unburdened, no longer carrying the sign of her lonliness and confusion but casting them behind her so she can move forward. This is wonderful. Poor Karen, though!
Author's Response: Seriously, poor Karen! She just doesn't have a prayer. And, thank you for so eloquently expressing what I was lamely trying to accomplish with the shoe metaphor! :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 12, 2007 07:50 am Title: to the light
This is so perfect! I love it!
Author's Response: Wow...perfect? Thanks tons, really glad you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2007 08:47 pm Title: to the light
this was just beautiful. wow. me likes. and pinchy shoes suck..
Author's Response: Thank you, so glad you enjoyed, and pinchy shoes do suck - I own way too many pairs of them. Darn the pointy toes!
Date: February 11, 2007 02:09 pm Title: to the light
wonderful. wonderful wonderful.
I think thats all I can really say
Author's Response: Thank you3 - really happy you enjoyed.
Date: February 11, 2007 12:58 pm Title: to the light
Painfully beautiful. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you, I appreciate it.
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2007 11:51 am Title: to the light
Oh, beautiful! What I love about the way you've written this is that every line is just so completely human. Every little uncomfortable part just bit into me in the best way.
She stumbles through what she needs him to hear - because practicing the speech never works - her arms cross her abdomen and hands grasp her sides. The porch light halos his hair; she's thankful he's backlit, because the shuttered expression hurts and seeing it fully would end her.
I had to quote that whole part because it just gave me shivers. So, so wonderful!
Author's Response: Thank you; I'm so glad you liked it. I really don't know what else to say. (It makes me so uncomfortable to view their stilted interaction, I figure it would certainly destroy her - you know, if she were real. :)
Date: February 11, 2007 10:18 am Title: to the light
What happens is this: You had me there. Great opening. So many other lines that just crystallized Pam's thoughts.
How can she be expected to survive that? It's too...well, too.
...because the shuttered expression hurts and seeing it fully would end her.
Both those were especially fine. And that tiny gesture from him at the end (holding her wrist) and her driving home barefoot...so, so lovely and simple and says SO much.
Author's Response: Thank you Colette! I'm so glad you liked the opening (I know it's not cool to say, but I really liked it too)....and, I found a card that said what Pam's card says and immediately wondered what her reaction would be. (Yep, shopping for my parents and thinking about J&P instead - that's healthy).
Date: February 11, 2007 08:40 am Title: to the light
So nice to have a new piece by you! It has been a while! It's short, but packs quite the punch. Her defenses seem to come out of an "awesome" discussion with Kelly, and yet, it is all useless. I love those two sentences at the end: " She ends with, "I'm yours. All you need to do is let me know if you want to try. The answer will be yes." In her car, the shoes get tossed in the back, and she drives home barefoot." Great story!
Author's Response: Thank you; it's so nice to be missed. I absolutely love that putting the word awesome in quotes leaves no doubt in anyone's mind as to the original source. The last two sentences - I was really down after Phyllis' Wedding and just sick of all the crap (if you'll allow me to be eloquent). I wanted her to lay it on the line and go back to being her.
Date: February 11, 2007 06:06 am Title: to the light
Short, but nice :)
Author's Response: Thank you - short seems to suit me better. :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2007 02:11 am Title: to the light
Wow. Wow. This is amazing. Your language, and meringue defenses, and her guilt bar among the clouds, and giving him time to think about it because she knows from experience that these things require thought, and barefoot. Just... wow. I love it.
Author's Response: OK, I'm blushing - thank you. I am so glad you enjoyed it and that you don't find the language "flowery" - I have a tendency to go that way.
Date: February 11, 2007 01:24 am Title: to the light
I don't think I can say exactly what about this I ended up loving to bits, because everything put together made me me smile. I loved the last bits, though, when everything with him and her, from her being thankful he's backlit, and telling him not to tell her anything when she's done, to 'the answer will be yes' to getting rid of those darned shoes.
And I adored his hand tightening, and his thumb brushing across her wrist, because imagining that, just...wow. They're taking a step closer, and that little gesture just makes the entire thing seem so completely intimate and...I adore it. I really, truly do.
Loved this as much as I love most of your other stories. =P Thanks for posting this!
Author's Response: Thank you for such a supportive review. As for the thumb across the wrist thing, I seem to have a weakness for that particular motion - it's simultaneously innocent and so intimate.