Date: March 11, 2007 05:28 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Very different, very well written. Puts a totally different spin on JAM, huh? Jim will take the sex, but won't allow himself to be hurt again.
And all Pam's thoughts during the drive home? Well, as someone in the "Treehouse" once said, "Ladies, there's a reason God put JK on this earth!" So Pam can fantasize about Jim....
Off to reread!
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 04:15 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Jim nibbling on her from the front seat of the car all the way to her couch is one of the HOTTEST frickin' things I've ever read on MTT.
His last line to Karen right before he walks out is the most painful.
Well done, as always.
Date: March 11, 2007 03:23 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Oh, HELL no.
Hot, hot, hot.....but it makes me want to beat Jim senseless. Although, I don't know if that is possible, seeing as he CLEARLY HAS NO SENSE already. Arrrrgh!
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 03:10 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Now I truly know what angst means. This was beautifully sexy and erotic and then so heartbreakingly sad - I felt like I hit a wall at 200 mph. I am so glad Pam never got to say what she wanted. Very well done.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 02:46 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Ok, Jim is officially an ass. No matter how much Pam made him suffer, she does not deserve the end of this fic. Very hot, though, and well-written.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 02:32 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Just to clarify, I could never hate you, unfold, that was me being sarcastic. (Didn't JK himself say you can't be sarcastic with writing because it just doesn't translate?) You did rip my heart out and all, and make me hate Jim, and feel all sorts of pain, but that's why I love you. Because you can make me actually BELIEVE it's real.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 02:18 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Wow....just wow. That was very good, but Jim's an asshole for just doing that w/ her && then leaving. I think it's quite amusing, how Karen thinks he was at the office. As Kevin would put it -- Nicceee.
Date: March 11, 2007 02:14 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
i HATE Jim. This is such an insightful little story because I can actually see him doing this. Everyone thinks Pam is the weak one but man I really think Jim is the real pussy here. Too scared to try again, so immature that he'd try to hurt someone with sex, cheating on his girlfriend. I really think he has a lot of growing up to do before he's worthy of pam (imho). But after that little rant I'd like to congratulate you on a amazing story, I hope you'll consider continuing this maybe even just as vignettes on what a bastard Jim is/can be- somehow it's oddly satisfying.
Date: March 11, 2007 02:04 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Gosh, I hope this doesn't happen, but it's a unique and dramatic ending. I admire you for posting this knowing it might be controversial. The reader really soars with the eroticism and then slams into the wall of the ending. To be able to convey angst is one thing, to be able to convey angst this well is something else.
Date: March 11, 2007 01:59 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
“No, I mean, after this, I’m still going to be with-”
That? Made my heart hurt a bit. ... and I don't believe that you've never written smut before. No way. It's too good.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 01:46 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
That was better than smut- that was raw, gorgeous, painful. I honestly don't have the right words. Gah.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 01:31 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Jamster ... seriously? if you hate so much to leave a negative review, then ... maybe don't leave one. life isn't all sunshine and daisies. that's what makes this fic so REAL. unfold managed to paint a picture of the pain these two have been and continue to go through. it's not easy to do. and when you consider just what jim's gone through in regards to pam, i wouldn't put it past him to try to hurt her the way she hurt him. again, that's reality.
and erin, jeez. i hope this doesn't put you off writing this kind of thing again. this story was so insanely poignant and gripping and painful and amazing and honestly, i don't think it would have been as good without the ending it had. don't ever change!
Morning Angel, here. Jamster is allowed to leave whatever review as long as it is not insulting the author, which it was not. You have your right to your opinion and so does Jamster, and the purpose of leaving reviews is to comment to the author, not to other reviewers. Thanks.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 01:19 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Oh, I'm crying now! I can't believe Jim could just leave her after that!
Date: March 11, 2007 01:17 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
I liked that you flipped the roles in this story and put Jim in the Pam situation. Very heartbreaking, but so intriguing, I am curious to read more.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 01:07 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Oh my god. I've been sitting here staring off into space, utterly shocked and moved and just...stunned for close to five minutes now, thinking I'll come back to myself enough to leave a coherent review.
But apparently not.
This is simply brilliant: so very real and bold in its eroticism, so incredibly heartbreaking and just devastating in its realism. Such an original take on Jim and Pam - heartbreaking, yes, but I love it that you travel the unbeaten path here (so to speak). Because these characters are simply too rich and too brilliant not to.
I'm still sitting here stunned, no joke. Stunned and haunted in the best kind of way.
You are so, so talented, unfold - your work never ceases to leave me feeling the way that I do right now. Brilliant.
Date: March 11, 2007 12:56 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
love it. seriously, wow. and thanks for taking a risk with that ending, IMO it definitely paid off.
Date: March 11, 2007 12:53 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Very, very good, and tastefully written, too. I think the details were amazing and realistic here, but you have to give us more from that ending! Please follow up, even though you said it's finished, and give us the happy ending we need! Surely he can't walk away from her after all of THAT! Haha--fabulous story. Nice job!
Date: March 11, 2007 12:50 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
I hate to say it, but I do not like this story.
True, you did warn us with the Angst label, but Season 3 is very angst-filled, and it does not get this bad at all.
Maybe if their had been a better warning. I'm glad I ended up just skipping to the end.
I wish I hadn't read it as I hate leaving a negative review. If I had known in advance more about it, I would have just skipped it altogether. The writing style and the dialogue was great, but the ending was terrible.
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 12:49 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Note to self: if unfold posts a story with the world "ballon" in the title, prepare self for serious angst.
On to the review, i think i hate you. ^_^ here i am, trying to stay away from smut, but no, i gotta read this because duh, you're the author, and it's just sooooooo good. and then you KILL me with that ending. rip my heart out and stomp all over it, and then put the remains in a blender. GAH!!
so yeah, i hate you. but only because i love you so much. ^_^
Date: March 11, 2007 12:41 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
This is just amazing. I just commented on lj, but felt the need to comment here too.
This hurts and feels amazing all at the same time. Poor Pam, poor Jim, and oh Karen...and the last sentence - I could here the buckle and zipper and the dooe and the silence. Dear heavens, please give us a follow-up (I'll do anything in my power to help with that - you name it.)
Date: March 11, 2007 12:22 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Are you trying to kill me, unfold? So much angst & smut in one story. Gah.
And who wouldn't want to jump Jim after watching him drive? (TWSS)
Date: March 11, 2007 12:21 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Um...guh.
That was HOT, but owwww, my heart hurts.
Date: March 11, 2007 12:12 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Oh my. That one hurt - so good, and then so bad. When he tells her he's still with Karen and then he proves really means it? Agony. I'm actually pissed off at him right now, and he doesn't even exist.
Date: March 11, 2007 12:05 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
Holy mother of god. That was horrible and wonderful. I am in shock.
Date: March 11, 2007 12:04 pm Title: born on a desert floor, you've the deepest thirst
OUCH!!
I mean, amazing amazing amazing!! Especially because this is your first time writing smut, which is very hard to believe! I absolutely love Pam's thoughts during the car ride, and I could visualize every bit of it. And then oh my GOD in her apartment!
But OUCH! The ending. I love it, but ouch.