1 [Report This]Date: February 12, 2024 12:01 am Title: Chapter 3
Fantastic plot twist in this chapter! The decision to turn Jim's confession from Casino Night on its head and have Pam make a 'confession', so to speak, was inspired! Great story!
Author's Response: Aw, I'm glad you enjoyed it! I remember it being a lot of fun working out exactly how to adapt the confession to make it work. Thank you for reminding me of this blast from the past!
1 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2023 10:14 am Title: Chapter 3
I enjoyed this alternative take on my scond favourite episode ever, The Secret. Given the loudness of Michael's voice, I wouldn't be surprised if Pam had indeed heard his confession. I noticed a few changes, such as Jim still being at his desk when Michael spilled the beans (he was in the restroom), and none of Michael accidentally revealing that Jim had confessed his feelings very recently. Were these conscious changes? I did think that the inversion of Jim's Casino Night speech was masterful. Great ending!
Author's Response: Oh, my goodness. I don't remember if that was intentional or just mis-remembering the episode. I was so pleased to be able to do this work for a good cause! I do recall that I was concerned that the ending would be corny, so "masterful" makes me feel wonderful-- thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: April 27, 2021 09:47 am Title: Chapter 3
I love how you have them each other's lines! Perfect
Author's Response: Thank you! It was tricky but I really enjoyed making it work. Thank you for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2020 12:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
Awwww, man. I am such a sucker for them echoing the Casino Night dialogue in better ways, and giving them each other's lines is a neat twist!
I'm glad you're enjoying revisiting these old haunts, and if it inspires you to write more I'm going to consider my New Year's resolution to put more good in the world complete!
Author's Response:
Off the top of my head, I can think of at least two other fics where I steal dialog from Casino Night and use it in other contexts. I think so much of the emotional power of the first part of the series comes to a head in this episode, and it is so beautifully written.
I am having so much fun! Such a blast from the past. We'll see if I carve out some time to write more; I have an idea but it would take digging into the archives of the show a bit.
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2020 12:01 pm Title: Chapter 2
I like the way this one plays out! Given what we know about Pam's sloooooooow process of emotional processing, giving her a chance to mull things over long before anyone puts her on the spot feels like exactly what she needs to give this particular part of their story a happier ending.
Author's Response: I've always thought that! Pam got ambushed by Jim and reacted accordingly. She needed to come to her own conclusion, in her own way. What a long day that would have been for both of them, though. Ha.
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2020 11:58 am Title: Chapter 1
The opening of this has always just struck me as really well-written.
Author's Response: Thank you. This is one of my personal favorites. I loooved that I got to write fic for a good cause, and I loved working with VB on the project, and the topic was fun, and I thought it turned out well. So I'm glad you thought it got off to a good start!
1 [Report This]Date: May 23, 2020 08:36 am Title: Chapter 3
This was sweet. I really loved how you worked in the dialogue from Casino Night and flipped around who said it. When that part first started, I thought it wasn't going to work, but it honestly totally did! The different emotional content provided by Jim's expressions made it all make sense.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm sort of stunned that you found this older fic, but I'm delighted! It was a fun one to write, and was written for a good cause. I am glad you enjoyed it. Getting this comment made my day!
Date: September 28, 2017 10:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awwww, just PERFECT! Thank you for the smile that is plastered on my face. This is a gift that just keeps on giving!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's such a thrill that people are still finding this and enjoying it. :)
Date: February 27, 2010 05:33 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm gonna keep this short (really I am!) and just say thank VB for such an amazing bid and prompt and thank you for doing such an amazing job with it!
Author's Response: Wow, I'm impressed with your brevity! :) And yes, all the thanks go to VB. And to you, for your kindness in reading and reviewing.
10 [Report This]Date: February 23, 2010 10:09 am Title: Chapter 3
VERY, VERY NICE! Wow. I LOVED that! And that role reversal was a sweet move. EXCELLENT.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! It was a challenge but I really enjoyed turning this around. THANKS!
Date: February 16, 2010 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh this was lovely. Very very cute and well done. Loved the turn around on the Casino Night dialogue. *claps loudly*
Author's Response:
Oh, thank you! Once I had the idea to get them to the point where Pam was saying those words to Jim, the rest sort of fell into place. I'm really glad you liked it. Thanks, again!
10 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2010 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wonderful, wonderful! Jim's "Casino Night" speech is no less heartbreaking coming from Pam. Great twist, by the way! For the gazillionth time, I wonder how much heartache and pain would've been spare if both of them had been more honest with each other. Not that I'm complaining about how it turned out, mind you. More like curiosity. Which makes me glad to read stories such as this.
Thanks for writing this.
Author's Response: Thank you, again! I'm with you- I think their story has been exceptionally well done on the show, but it is still fun to imagine how it could have gone differently. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
10 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2010 07:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the premise of this because it's such a gold mine. One of the many "What Ifs" in Jim and Pam's journey toward each other.
Also, thank you so much, nqllisi, for your generosity. Also thanks to VB's generosity and kindness in bidding and winning. And thanks to both of you for sharing this story.
Author's Response: Thank you! It was truly a privilege to be able to contribute by doing something I love anyway. And as for the premise- well, VB gets all the credit for that. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Date: February 16, 2010 11:52 am Title: Chapter 3
Wow -- that is just brilliant, lis. It would make the series a LOT shorter ;o) but wow. Nicely done and worth every penny of VB's money.
Author's Response: Ha! I hope she agrees! In hindsight, I'm actually glad we had to take the long road to get to happily-married-with-babies, but I think had Pam been given time and motivation to figure things out on her own, we might have been spared a lot of heartache. And a lot of really good fic, too, which is another reason it is better how we got it! Thanks, as usual, for your kind comment!
Date: February 16, 2010 09:35 am Title: Chapter 3
Her brain, which had been whispering messages from her heart all day, abandoned her.
Another perfect line, that. Oh wow, even knowing your intentions to invert the Casino Night speech it was just...so powerful. I loved it. I loved the play on "he loves me, he loves me not" throughout Pam's thoughts. I loved the vividness of Jim's emotions playing across his face. I loved Pam's slow realization that it would be worse if Jim didn't love her than if he did. So fun to revisit this AU when "our" JAM are happily expecting.
Author's Response: You spoil me with your nice comments. You remember how I was so worried that using the CN script would be too cheesy? I'm really glad you told me to go ahead; I think it really did work out nicely. Thank you for pointing out the parts you like the best. That's really cool, and confirms what I already knew- that we think way too much alike! Ha. Thanks, again!
Date: February 16, 2010 09:27 am Title: Chapter 2
Pam wondered wildly when her brain had developed a mind of its own.
I love this line! It's so...Douglas Adams. This was a great peek into Pam's psyche. I feel like so many of the fics from this time were from Jim's POV; it's really nice to see Pam going through the turmoil. It's also completely believable. I can absolutely buy that the series could have played out like this instead.
Author's Response:
Yay, I liked that line, too. It almost went away with revisions, but I worked until I found a way to make it work.
Date: February 16, 2010 09:20 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh right! This story! I totally remember this opening. I still love it. I can absolutely picture the whole thing, Pam freezing, the glee on Kelly's face, Toby anticipating paperwork, Michael's horror in a rare moment of self-awareness. HEE!
Author's Response: Yep. It seems like a long time ago that I started this story, but it really wasn't! I was encouraged to keep going by your initial reaction- so thank you, as usual!!
10 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 11:12 pm Title: Chapter 3
Okay hi, that was awesome. The throwback to the conversation on Casino Night but in reverse? genius!!!!!
Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much. The Casino Night scene is so powerful, I keep going back to it. I'm glad I had something so good to steal from! Thank you for reading and for all your comments, HH!
10 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 11:08 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is perfecto :)
Author's Response:
Why, thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: February 15, 2010 11:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooooooooooooooh I like it!!! I wish I knew about this auction, urgh :) If you ever feel the need to do anymore, you should look in to te support stacy auctions, I'd bid for you :D
Author's Response: They've raised around $100,000 so far! It's really amazing how effective a simple idea can be (which, oddly, is also my fic philosophy!). Thanks!
Date: February 15, 2010 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 3
jaja omg, i've seen people using this convetation, but never in this way.. i luv it. REALLY WELL adapted, by the way. congrats!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! When I had the idea to use that coversation, I had to ask my friend and beta if it was too cheesy. I'm so glad you thought it worked out! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, thanks!
Date: February 15, 2010 10:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
ahh!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Yep, just a tiny cliffhanger for the first chapter. Hope you enjoy the rest!
Date: February 15, 2010 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Fun! I like how she realized Jim watched her when she wasn't paying attention and Roy never did. Also, that she knew what he was doing by the sounds he made. Good touches!
Author's Response: Thank you! I think when you are interested in someone you become hyper-aware of them. I'm glad you thought that came across well. Thanks!
Date: February 15, 2010 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 3
Okay, yeah, continue here. Go go go!
Author's Response: Ha! Seriously, this is the longest fic I've written in years. I think I'd better quit while I'm ahead. Thank you for liking it enough to want more, though! I really appreciate that!
Date: February 15, 2010 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 3
The revisions you made to the close were GREAT! Far better than what I'd proposed. And, like I said, this is the best twisting of the CN interchange that I think I've seen.
I really liked this addition to the chapter, too:
When was the last time she’d caught Roy looking at her when she wasn’t paying attention? How had she felt about it? She caught Jim all the time. It always made her blush.
All in all, a great job! Thanks so much for auctioning off your wares. This was a fun adventure!
Author's Response:
It was fun! I hope it lived up to your expectations- it has been great working with/for you!
It's funny that you say the changes were better than your proposal, because I literally cut & pasted your suggestion into my text and then just tweaked around the edges. You were exactly right about the ending, it was far too abrupt. This is better.
Thank you for everything, including the kind comments!