8 [Report This]Date: December 10, 2006 05:13 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm glad you brought up Jim's reluctance to bring Karen into the joke on The Convict. It was such a 'you're not part of it' move that I actually felt bad for her. That that reluctance would be the catalyst to end the short-lived relationship makes perfect sense to me.
Author's Response:
Exactly. I thought that was a very telling moment - about where Jim's head truly is re: Pam, Karen, etc. The writing is on the wall...I may go nuts before these three finally read it though! Thanks for concurring, Luna Mystik!
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ah, that is lovely and so poetic! I love all the science metaphors/similes. All I could think was, "Figure it out, Einstein!" And then, he did. ;)
Author's Response: I guess I've just been on a science bender. And he will figure it out...won't he? Seriously, it wouldn't take Einstein - the writing is on the wall! Ah well, thanks, Morning Angel!
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 01:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
The Jam lover AND the math geek in me are squeeing.
Author's Response: Glad to induce bi-level squeeing! Funny - I am such an artsy/lit girl (you know, like Pam, in the black turtleneck?), yet this is the second story I've posted here recently full of physics/math references...one more inexplicable effect this show has on me! Thanks, Jonah!
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 10:48 am Title: Chapter 1
I've often thought that if she didn't know what to say to him, just walking over to him and giving him a big hug while he sat at his desk would be enough to get the ball rolling. I definitely like your style, colette!
Author's Response: Would definitely jump start things. Then they can talk and other stuff (ahem) later. Thanks, moxie!
6 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 09:29 am Title: Chapter 1
Good line: The last trace of their equation. The computation was simple; but it only allowed for two variables. I love a good metaphor.
I also love: misinterpretation reared its head and began to sink its teeth into her heart.
A beautiful little scene. :) Thank you.
Author's Response: Why, thanks nej. That scene of Jim recoiling at the thought of Karen being in on his Pam prank spoke volumes to me. Glad the math metaphor that ensued made sense to you! (And believe me, I'm the least math-oriented girl in town.) And yes, misinterpretation seems to be their monster-under-the-bed. Anyway, glad you liked this little moment. Thanks, as always!
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 05:57 am Title: Chapter 1
Okay, are you sure you're not a physicist?! Everything depends on everything... Newton's Third Law? Einstein? Relativity? I guess it would be nice to reduce their relationship to hard science. Remove the misinterpretations and the result would be Pam + Jim = Happiness. Nice. If only humans operated that way! I like too the connotations of Jim saying "I am Einstein" implying that he's finally gotten smart about his feelings for Pam.
And is it coincidence that both of us have Karen delivering a resignation letter to Michael this week? Great minds and wishful thinking! Thanks, Colette, for making my morning.
Author's Response: Yeah, he finally gets it...and his theory still works, like an inescapable force of nature, but only with two (specific) variables. And she's still his center, all other things are relative to that, and....oh, you get the point! And Newton...one of my favorites concepts, and it seemed to fit. And I think I've now truly covered everything I know re: physics. Time to move on to another subject where I have just enough knowledge to be dangerous. Anyway, glad you liked this (thought of you when I wrote the quasi-science stuff!) And great minds, indeed!
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 04:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Sigh. What a lovely way to start my morning. I love the way the narrative style reflects the progression of Jim's thoughts - sort of quick beats, but direct and a little biting (in a good way, of course). Loved the line "Acting like his friend had become an ever trickier business" - so, so true, especially this season. I also love the callback with "I have no future here." I can imagine Karen saying that and Jim just looking absolutely wrecked.
Fantastic as always - but, um, it would be just...downright rude of you not to continue this. ;o)
Author's Response: Yeah, kind of wanted to go right to the point in this one. Something about the moment when he keeps Karen out of his prank just made me think. Glad you picked up on the stylistic stuff...then again, you never miss much! This started as one, in a series of simple (yet not) moments...still not sure about the rest. Will try not to be rude, but if I am, promise to make it up to you. I am, after all, a prisoner of good manners (thanks, Mom!) Thanks for your ever-spot-on comments!
10 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 09:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh Colette if only....::sigh:: Please keep this story going! I loved it. Especially Pam making a move down there at the end!
Author's Response: Thanks, LoveFool! Not sure if I'll keep this story going yet, but I promise to keep Pam moving even if I do something else!
10 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
tensely running his fingers through his already tortured hair.
I love this entire piece- I love the tone, the style, the word choice, the plot (bye, Karen!)- but this one little detail just soared from the page. Perfect, perfect. You're amazing.
Author's Response:
He is such an expressive guy - even his hair can look emotional. So glad you enjoyed this - thanks, as always!
10 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 07:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
His face was buried in her hair, his hands holding her so close that she almost lost her balance. But he was big and solid and steadying. He was Jim again: an inevitable fact of her life. She leaned back just enough to search his face. He was smiling. She stood on her tiptoes and kissed him. Hard and long and deep. His question, the question, was finally answered.
This part is so beautiful. I love that you acknowledged Jim as an inevitable part of Pam's life. It's so true. I really hope you do more, I'd love to see what happens next!
Author's Response:
He is, isn't he? Glad you agree. Now, if only they'd get on with it already! Thanks so much for this!
10 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 06:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
ah, poor Jim. Does he realize just how easy it's going to be for him when he gets rid of Karen??? ;-)
Author's Response: Do these two know how to make life complicated or what? If only we could give them a piece of our minds, moxie. Thanks for reviewing!
8 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh the quietness, I do enjoy it :) So many of Jim and Pam's moments are built on the things they don't say to one another, so I could see them finally getting together the same way. This was lovely, Colette!
[quiet voice] One thing I noticed, I think the line should read 'Who's the target?' [/quiet voice]
I hope you continue this, although it does stand on its own as well :)
Author's Response: Oops! You're right - thanks so much for catching that...will correct immediately! Anyway, absolutely, they can communicate so well, so simply. Glad if I could capture a tiny bit of that! Thanks again!
8 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 05:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really really liked this! I think when it comes down to it I'm in the camp that thinks, knowing them, I see a resolution where they don't have to say it all, even if I want them too! They are so about the quiet moments and I love this subtle understanding that says enough.
Author's Response: They've had so many conversations about 'it' in my head, and a couple of my stories, but I guess I'm a sort of 'less is more' phase these days! I'm glad that you liked this and thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 05:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ah, very satisfying, my friend.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, ElizabethLynn!
Date: December 06, 2006 05:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm torn. I want them to say everything....but in the end - I think nothing will do. Yeah. I'm a walking contradiction.
Regardless of how they get there - I want them to get there. And I'll take your version...anytime. :)
Author's Response: You know, I've written it both ways...with and without talking. I wanted this one to be about a quiet moment of recognition...but believe me, later that night, there's going to be some talking going on (amongst other activities!) I also just found the 'prank' sequence in that episode to be so revealing of the Jim/Pam connection - and how doomed Karen is. So much subtext there. Anyway...glad you'll take this version - I'll take any at this point! And thanks for reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 05:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really Sweet. I love it, and I hope you continue.
Author's Response: Thanks, PuffingNoise! I'm happy you liked it.
Date: December 06, 2006 05:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Everything depends on everything. This chapter is just brilliantly simple on it's own -- but don't let me talk you out of writing more if you are so moved. And I like how you wrote Pam taking a bit of initiative, but still having doubts. It's a nice balance between what we want to see and the Pam we have been seeing for a while.
Author's Response: And, it may well stand on its own - started as a collection of loosely linked 'moments' but at this rate...Anyway, I'm glad you liked it as is. And yeah, if only Pam would crank it up, just a notch. Thanks much, lisahoo!
8 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 05:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love the math/physics references! [/nerd]
Yay, Colette. :)
Author's Response: Thanks, shan! Pretty soon I'm going to have you all convinced that I know anything about math and physics! (A very dubious proposition, trust me.)
Date: December 06, 2006 04:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so, so excellent. It's just quiet and to the point and really conveys the tiredness you feel when you watch them struggling. Too many great lines to quote, but I loved this, because I could really feel myself sigh along with him:
‘Do you have a future here?’ She heard herself ask. ‘You tell me,’ he countered, looking back at her wearily.
He's had a really rough night and is so tired of trying to work everything out. I would love to see an outcome like this, actually, as opposed the the Big Fight lots of people seem to be hoping for.
And this is great : Just stood up, walked around the desk and reached for him. Finally, reached for him. because yes! It's all she needs to do, I think. I hope.
Okay, enough rambling. Beautiful job, as always!
Author's Response: I'm in the quiet resolution camp too...not the 'big fight' one. (Tho, at this point, I'd take ANY resolution, frankly!) Glad you liked this...it was definitely just meant as a simple, quiet moment, so I'm glad that came through for you. Thanks as always for your insightful and lovely reviews!
8 [Report This]Date: December 06, 2006 04:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was sweet.
Author's Response: Thanks, gotkona!