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Reviewer: Caro84 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 10:36 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

I laughed so hard I spit out some water that I was drinking when I read Michael say "in the butt". Absolutely love this!

Author's Response: Thanks.  Always nice to get the water spit.  Glad you're enjoying it.

Reviewer: JRAddict Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 10:33 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

Haha this is such a cute idea...you have all the couples down so well.

 

Can't wait to see who wins :o) 



Author's Response: Thanks.  It's been fun to write.

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 09:54 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

*Snicker*  I was wondering if you were going to sneak in "in the butt."  And since I'm evidently twelve, it gave me quite a giggle.

This is a great concept, and really well done and funny! 



Author's Response: Thanks...and you're never too old to find "in the butt" funny.

Reviewer: xtaline Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 09:44 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

Hahaha.  OF COURSE Michael would be the one to get confused on that question!  So funny.

Both chapters have been hilarious so far. 



Author's Response: Thanks...it was almost too obvious, but I had to use it.

Reviewer: StarShine Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 09:01 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

the suit of armor. DEFINITELY the suit of armor.


Author's Response: Thanks.  I have to admit I was pleased with myself when I thought of that one.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 08:21 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

In the ear, right? That's the legen-(wait for it)-dary blooper?

I'll go through and tell you my favorite lines.   Well, Packer's always gold.  I realized I was going to quote every Angela line, so you've really got her down also, and her prim/proper unintentional hilarity. "Kelly, we need an answer". "(Bob) You don’t sound too confident.(Ryan) Yeah, I’m not really."  Every reference to My Humps.  The entire suit of armor thing is so funny. "(Jim) (To Pam) I will never get rid of them. I want to be buried in them.(Pam) (Solemnly) Okay, that’s fine. As long as we can do it right away." "(Ryan) (Pissed and embarrassed) I can’t believe you…I never even wear them." "(Darryl) (From audience) ‘Attaboy, Mike!" (I had actually missed that first time through - hilarious.

I saw one typo: all girl bad.  (Taken out of context like that, maybe that's just a statement.  All girl - bad.  Mixed gender - good.)

One more - spahgetti Spaghetti

This is lots of fun, and a really good idea to start from!  I find myself wondering how Phyllis and Bob Vance, Vance Refrigeration would be doing.



Author's Response: I'm wondering how my spell check didn't catch spaghetti.  Thanks as always for you great reveiws.  The suit of armor  and the Darryl cameo were my personal favorites.  I think Phyllis and Bob might run the table.  

Reviewer: Swedge Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 08:09 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

That was fun again. :)

One small typo: Dwight said "bad" when you probably meant "band" halfway down. No matter how many times we proofread, stuff always sneaks through. I've been there.

You can change the title to Game easily, just edit it. 



Author's Response: Thanks for the typo catch.  I'm just gonna keep the title as is, no point in correcting it now, really.

Reviewer: naomi_dylan Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 01:20 am Title: Part I: Five point questions

Haha-- very entertaining!  I laughed out loud several times.  Particularly loved "Jim, I’m not sure you have a grasp on units of time..."

Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: flamingosinparadise Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2007 07:25 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

Oh my goodness...this story made me laugh more than any other story has in a really long time.  My favorite parts:

1) Jim's "the roof counts"

2) Jim debating over hours or years

3) The BVVR commercial

4) Kelly finding out that Ryan falls asleep while she talks

5) Kelly getting mad at Ryan for making everyone think she's a whore

Ok, I am stopping myself there because I would keep going on and on forever otherwise.  Can't wait to read more!!



Author's Response: Thanks!  I'm espcially glad you liked the commerical.   No one else mentioned it but I laughed when I imagined it in my head. 

Reviewer: office_romance Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2007 03:36 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

This is hilarious!!! I love it!!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Rowena666 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2007 09:21 am Title: Part I: Five point questions

Awesome, from start to finish. Love how Dwight knows that Angela won't respond, the way Ryan is alternately bored and jaded by his marriage with Kelly, the make-up making out, Jim not knowing when their first date technically was...all of it. Can't wait to read more!

" Maybe there’s something in the office water cooler, or maybe they just don’t get out much."

Hehe. So true.



Author's Response: Thanks so much.  Surely we'll get a wedding out of one or two of these couples in the next few seasons.

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2007 08:16 am Title: Part I: Five point questions

Hilarious! And of course the roof counts!

Author's Response: Thanks!  And yes it does.  There was swaying, after all.

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 11:07 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

When he sleeps, he snores like the demon dogs of hell.

HA!  I did watch this show when I was a kid, and you did a terrific job with it.  Sooo funny!!!



Author's Response: Thanks!  It was indeed a classic.

Reviewer: jamband Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 08:48 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

(Bob) You fall asleep while she’s talking?

(Ryan) Not as much as I’d like to, Bob.

 

I can hear the self-deprecation in Ryan's voice. 



Author's Response: His deadpan delivery is my favorite part of his character.

Reviewer: Ozana Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 07:58 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

This is hilarious!!!!  I love it!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: VERYgoodbread Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 05:48 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

Hilarious!  I soo want to see this.

Author's Response: Thanks.  Me too; for one thing it would mean Jim and Pam would be married. 

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 05:25 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

Why does it have to be a catfight free zone?  It's nice to see Tom and George finding true love.

Author's Response: Well, they have a tight taping schedule, no time for catfights.  Thanks for the review.   

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 02:52 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

Technical note: I think you have a formatting glitch when Bob is explaining the concept of "whoopee" to Dwight.

I love Michael mangling the cow/milk metaphor. *snicker*

Ryan's "not as much as I'd like to, Bob" was hilarious.

I love Pam's "Too many years" and Jim's "The roof counts.". Damn right the roof counts. :D

"he’s too noisy during whoopee" Whoa PAM! Way to make Jim blush! I love this. So very "Newlyweds".

This is fun. Can't wait for Round Two! 



Author's Response: Thanks NEJ!  Round II is being taped at the studio right now. 

Reviewer: Keds Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 02:35 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

This is absolutely hilarious.  I was cracking up the whole time I was reading it.  Dare I admit I'm old enough to remember the original show.  I can't wait for the next chapter.  Very funny stuff!

Author's Response: Thanks!  Round II is being written.

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 02:22 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

This is quite entertaining!  Good job.

Author's Response: Thanks, glad you like.

Reviewer: Officeholic Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 12:07 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

Oh i loved this! This story brings back memories of mine when I used to watch it secretly when my parents were not at home!

 

Whoopee! 



Author's Response: I think when I first watched it I thought whoopee meant kissing.  Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: kth201 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 11:09 am Title: Part I: Five point questions

Oh gosh! This was too funny! I'm actually surprised by how well Jan and Michael are doing! Can't wait to read the next installment. 

Author's Response: I have some plans for Jan and Michael.  Jan is going to regret ever having set foot in that studio.  Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Becky215 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 10:11 am Title: Part I: Five point questions

I love that George Michael and Tom Cruise are engaged in your story; nice couples interactions here, too. Keep it up! --CH

Author's Response: Thanks.  And hopefully Katie Holmes has recovered fro her ordeal by then.

Reviewer: uncgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 08:58 am Title: Part I: Five point questions

This is hilarious and even better than the version I read before.  Really great job!  I'm so happy you decided to write this idea out after all, it turned out terrific!  And you got a ribbon!

Author's Response:

Well, it's much better thanks to you and in fact I'm not sure it even gets written without your encouragement.  So a piece of the ribbon is yours.

Reviewer: Swedge Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 01, 2007 08:34 am Title: Part I: Five point questions

Good job, that was fun.


Author's Response: Thanks!

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