1 [Report This]Date: August 25, 2018 11:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Really great story. I like that fleshed out where Alex was taking that conversation because he so was. And I got a bit squirmy when she cut the call, but I like where you brought it! Nicely done.
Date: December 26, 2016 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Good! Better if Jim kicked Alex's butt!
Date: November 22, 2010 08:49 am Title: Chapter 1
I like this ending to that lame speech better. Also write another chapter, I want to hear what happened after Pam disconnected.
10 [Report This]Date: December 24, 2008 12:42 am Title: Chapter 1
Second time reading and it was even better :)
Date: November 26, 2008 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Excellent first story! You nailed the characters, their dialogue, and their thoughts. I love the mix of angst, humor, and closeness between Jim/Pam. Congratulations on an excellent first work. I hope you continue to add stories often! :)
Date: November 25, 2008 11:27 am Title: Chapter 1
Awwwww. I love the puppy/nun/small child with special needs references. And darn it, now I have a craving for barbecue chicken pizza...
Well done. Thanks for sharing this.
10 [Report This]Date: November 11, 2008 05:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Yup, native New Yorker here as well. So I know EXACTLY what you mean, lol...
Date: November 10, 2008 03:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think you captured Jim really well for your first Office fic. Nice work.
Author's Response: Thanks, Reed. I actually tend to identify with Jim, not necessarily in terms of experience but in his dry humor and tendency to make offhand comments. Other than being female, I feel like I'm pretty similar to the character, which I guess helps for writing him.
10 [Report This]Date: November 10, 2008 08:17 am Title: Chapter 1
This is your first? Very nice! Love this line:
“Wow, Beesly,” he exclaimed, “what has New York done to you?”
That made me laugh. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks, Kevin! I'm a native New Yorker and we say things that no one else would dare to say, so I like the idea of it rubbing off on Pam a little.
Date: November 09, 2008 10:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is great! I really enjoyed the classic Jim/Pam-ness of it. It just somehow reminds me of a lot of post-eps from S2 or S3, even though, obviously the situation was a little different back then. ;)
Anyway, nice job on your first fic! I'll definitely keep an eye out for more from you.
Author's Response: Thanks Azlin. I've really enjoyed your stories as well.rnrnI'm working my way through this great library, so I haven't gotten to all the post-eps, but I've certainly read a number of them.
Date: November 09, 2008 09:08 am Title: Chapter 1
This was a brilliant first office fic. Wonderfully in character, really great tension in parts, just a wonderful read :)
Author's Response: Thanks, Helen! I enjoy your stories as well. How is it that every woman knows about car crash underwear? It's one of those things...
Date: November 09, 2008 07:27 am Title: Chapter 1
You mention CPR. I giggle. (I teach CPR). So, that already has some awesomeness to it.
Wow. For a first fic, this was great. Well, even if it wasn't a first fic, it would be great. It just ups its greatness because it is a frist fic. I can't imagine how horrible it was for Jim to be hearing that, and in my head, I totally think that Pam would have come back to Scranton. They would have had to connect after hearing that. One way or the other.
Great job!
(Plus, I hope no nuns, puppies, or small children were harmed in the writing of this story)
Author's Response: Well, there was that Belgian nun, but she tried to run me over so she deserved it (hand to God, a Belgian nun almost ran me down last year - but no harm came to her other than a dirty look). rnThanks, Emily (I assume it's actually Emily)! I hope Pam does something bold to assure Jim she chooses him. And I hope Jim makes it clear that he wants to share Pam's dreams with her. I don't like this "art or Jim" dichotomy they seem to be hinting at. I don't think Pam is ready for full-time NYC yet. Maybe in a few years (like when The Office is scheduled to end). I could take a series finale where Mr. and Mrs. Halpert and baby Jam moved to New York (or Philly). Spin-off, baby....rnBut for now, let's let them stay put.
7 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2008 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Congrats on your first story here! I loved it, perfect follow up to the episode. And I agree with Jim, Alex is a douche bag!
Author's Response: Thanks, Karen! Yeah, that WAS pretty douche-y of Alex, wasn't it, to be like 'just give up your life.' Does he have any specific ideas? A class she just HAS to take, an internship offer, perhaps? Even if he wasn't hitting on Pam, he still has some cajones saying that. rn
Date: November 08, 2008 07:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great job, I loved this. I really felt like I was "in the room" with them, and when the bluetooth clicked off I was pretty anxious myself.
The “With special needs.” made me laugh out loud.
Please, keep writing.
Author's Response: Thanks, jazzfan. I was going to have Pam say something more politically incorrect but that felt out of character. rnPoor Jim; he looked so conflicted in that scene. I want Pam to do something to show him how committed she is to him.
Date: November 08, 2008 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Fantastic! I loved that Pam came back to him. Thank you for wrapping up the scene we were left to worry about!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, Karen! I'm glad you liked Pam coming back to Jim. I really wanted to do a scene where she's the one to take the initiative and say 'it's you and me, in this together.'rn
Date: November 08, 2008 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
First of all, thank you for giving me this to make it to next Thursday. I am literally dying! This is a wonderful insight into what happened after. Ugh, I thought all the angst was finally behind us!
Author's Response: Thanks, NoFireworks! Yeah, I don't think angst is ever truly behind us, but hopefully next week they'll have something to ease us up a bit. I really want to see Jim and Pam work together through this challenge. Hang in there.
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2008 11:26 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, I am impressed. I'd have never known this was toue first office fanfic. I hope to see you write some more (hint hint)
I love how Jim wants whatever is best for Pam, and would follow her anywhere she needed to go. You really captured how he wants to be the anti Roy, and we're slowly starting to see that on the show. He doesn't want to be the person to hold her back aw.
The only thing I'd like to have seen is, Pam explain why she disconnected the call and what the douche bag Alex was doing when she said stay where you are.
I loved it though. I can't wait to read more of your (Jim and Pam) stuff :)
Author's Response: Well, thanks Hannah! I'd love to write more. I just hope the inspiration hits. rnrnI feel like Jim is in a tough spot right now. He saw how much Roy held Pam back and he doesn't want to do the same thing, but he also really wants to be with her and is probably a little afraid of being left behind. rnrnYeah, a few things were kind of left in the dark, eh? I was trying to really tell the story from Jim's perspective, which is why a couple of things were left out. In my mind, Pam tells Jim later that night that she was just overwhelmed and needed to be alone with her thoughts. Not that she would leave Jim for NY, but she might have to consider some options, like should she stay a little longer to take another class or do a three month internship, or did she want to ask Jim to move to NY with her. The last time Pam was hit with someone pulling the rug out like that was Casino Night and she didn't really think before she responded. rnIn terms of what douchebag Alex did, I think he was trying to embrace Pam or kiss her. I wanted him to make a bit of a move on her and for her to make it clear that if she decided to stay longer in New York or move there permanently (WITH Jim) that it would be about her art, not about Alex. I didn't reveal that because, again, the story was more about Jim's perspective. But I had Pam's point of view in mind. rnHope that clears everything up. Thanks again for reading and responding!
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2008 05:23 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so sweet. And Jim is right, Alex is a douche! LOL. You've captured them both perfectly here.
Awesome story, and definitely don't hesitate on writing more Office fic!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I think he is a bit of a douche. Even if he wasn't hitting on Pam, it was still darn nervy of him to suggest she just give up her life in Scranton. It's not as though he said "you know Pratt has that extended program" or "wouldn't Jim move here if you asked him," it was just "yeah, I know your fiance is there, but New York is better" basically. I thought that was pretty douche-y, no matter his angle. Thanks for reading!
Date: November 07, 2008 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great Job on your first fic! I really hope that Pam does react this way and that all is well on the show next week! Thanks for writing a happy fic to keep us smiling while we wait for Thursday!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Anna! I have to admit that it was pretty brilliant of the writers to leave us hanging on that note, but I had to think of something to tide me over until next week. I'm looking forward to reading your stories as well.
Date: November 07, 2008 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
And this is what happened. Thank you!
(This was great by the way!)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing, Sara. I hope something like this does happen. I love Pam pursuing her dreams, but Art School Office takes some of the mojo from the show.
9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2008 07:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was riveting, intheivy, a real pleasure to read. My heart was in my throat. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you, Nancy! I tried to convey what Jim might be feeling, so I'm glad you felt his tensions. So happy you enjoyed it.
9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2008 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awww, that was great. Alex the douchebag has a nice ring to it. I don't believe he deserves the 'Alex' part though. I rather think he should just be Douchebag. I'm not even sure if he deserves a capital letter . . .
Anyway, I basically took back any murder threats to Pam, then took back taking them back, and then took back taking back taking them back, like, a billion times. Amazing writing, I love when stories make me do that. Or it might have been a side affect of the sour straws I'm currently eating.
It was probably the writing, though.
Author's Response: Haha, thank you, Ellie! I agree, he probably does deserve to just be "douchebag." Or maybe, "the douchebag." Anyway, I think someone should kick him in his sour straw. rnrn
9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2008 06:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great first fic! I know your fic is slightly AU, but I don't think Alex was making a move on Pam, I think he was being like Jim was in "Boys & Girls" and just being a supportive friend trying to encourage her.
But yeah, Pam needs to come back!
Author's Response: Thanks, Noodles. I hope you're right. I was really trying to kind of capitalize on Jim's fear by having Alex make a move. I agree that the parallel between the earlier Jim/Pam/Roy storyline is really interesting.