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Your description of that moment in the elevator is incredibly evocative - there's such a vivid sense of Jim's yearning there. She’ll say goodbye, chance another glance up at him, let her face show her emotions candidly for a split second, and he knows. Perfect non-ending.

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This was so well done - it had a great flow to it, was really well written and captures the characters subtly and clearly. I especially liked your portrait of Karen - how she's emotionally attached to Jim, but has the dignity to walk away. And how Jim sort of lets her be a life raft, while he can. And then he can't. And wonderful ending. The real Pam. He's seen her all along, hasn't he?

Author's Response:

Thank you!

I'm so glad you liked Karen's chapter. It was the one I actually wrote first, with the intention of it being a stand-alone piece. However, it didn't quite feel finished and the other chapters just sort of materialized around it, but that one remains my favourite, too.

He's seen her all along, hasn't he?
 

Yeah, he sure has. That's where I got the idea that Jim could be happy without Pam, as long as she was happy.

Thanks again for the review!

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Why, you devil. The discussion over at TWoP today was like JAM triage...and this is the ER and you're the miracle doc, dispensing the cure. Or something. In any case, thanks for this wonderful fairy tale. 'it's Halpert.' Sigh. Helps me brace myself for tonight (have talked myself into expecting the worst.)

Author's Response: Have you been watching too much ER?! Heh. I'm selfishly trying to make myself feel better and if I can drag you along with me, so much the better! Now, I have to go read nqllisi's cure as well. Chin up! it'll be okay!

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Okay. He's attracted to Karen, likes her, in another circumstance maybe, but...in the end, it's still about Pam. Damn right.

Thanks for doing this - the way you frame it here gives me hope...now, if only the show writers didn't seem hell bent on prolonging the torture. Is it good comic TV when it becomes almost too painful to watch? Not so sure. Thank god there are stories like this to soothe the boo-boos! And lovely writing too - as usual!

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Jim and Pam together, Kelly's commentary, great dialogue...just what I needed! This was really fun and a great break from the 'reality' of the show.

Jim as Jill's accomplice in crime - he would so be co-conspirator dad and she'd have him pegged before she could tie her shoes. This: She's a genius who lives by a code: Be polite...Don't be a fool made me laugh out loud, as did several other lines (she's using her words at least - ha!)

Such a treat - but, then again, you probably have me pegged and already knew that ;-) 

PS I know lots of adults who still have boundary issues with other peoples woah-woahs, so I think Jill will be just fine.

This was one of my favorite chapters - and that's saying a lot. It's uncanny how you captured each character - and that last bit was perfect. So funny and spot on, and in so few words.

Early in this series, I remember thinking: we'll never see scenes of them married, preg, with a baby, etc....so thank god for Lovefool! Little do those writers on the show know what a tough act they have to follow ;-)

You already know (more than you ever probably wanted to know ;-) how I feel about this. (Love what you did with the ending, btw.) All too often fics depict Jim the Obscure and Pam Karenina, so I love how you balanced real-life angst (the kind a character like Pam would experience, not the hyper-self-consciously 'edgy' sort) with the humor and love and hopefulness that are essential elements of the show. Well done!

This made me a little ferklempt - seeing yourself in your kids is a scary and awesome thing, and you really captured that here, as well as how mind blowing it is when you begin seeing all the ways they're not you. And I LOVED Jim's journal entry - perfect. This was a delish little amuse bouche for tonight's episode...not that they're about to reproduce, but at least we know it's somewhere on the horizon now. For realsies ;-)

Oh, no...can we expect Sofia Coppola to appear in Part III? The bit of tension in the middle of this part only makes it more delectable - love how simply Jim makes it all better at the end (him thinking how beautiful she is in the morning? Awww.) And soothing teething Jill? And teaching her to type? Makes me want to leap ahead a couple of seasons so they can reproduce, stat! Also - the Dwight warm blanket thing was surprisingly touching (like the show) and you nailed the Michael-ness of Michael. So satisfying....

You know I LOVE this series...but this chapter? Borders on brilliant (and that is not a term I throw around lightly.) It captures the essence of what was so great about S2, and seamlessly integrates the whole, fantastically detailed marriage/baby world you've created. Jim, Pam, Dwight - they all come through as if I were actually watching an episode. A great one. This made me more excited for S4 (when hopefully, we'll get more of the Jim/Pam pranking stuff, if sans Jill) more than any NBC promo ever could. Don't ever end this series. Seriously. 

Author's Response: Aw, Colette you are the best. Thank you so much for such for saying this. You know, I just have to believe that the writers will come through for us, in giving up the notion that Jim and Pam can't be funny as a couple. Every time I sit down to write a chapter of this story, I'm out to prove otherwise....even though the people who think it can't happen aren't reading it. lol. Anyway, thanks for the thoughtful review. Believe me, it's readers like you who make me never want to end this thing....we'll see how long it lasts before it becomes the crap fluff it should have been. lol

This is SUCH a great series...I was so happy to see it updated. It manages to be incredibly sweet without being soupy and the dialogue is them to a T. And you do realize you've created a bit of a cliffhanger? She'll be back later, the 6-week, ahem, waiting period is over, Jim is especially irresistable...just saying. Seriously, wherever you go next, I'll be here to read it.


Author's Response: haha...you and firework are on the same page here!!! Jim thanks you for that, I'm sure. :-) We'll see...not sure I'm up to it, but you all are FREE to imagine it in your minds! I encourage that. lol