Reviewer: Casinos and Coal Walks Signed 10
Date: May 01, 2010
Title: Chapter 10: The Icing On The Cake
I've been AWOL the past 4 months, so I'll have to go back and read chapter nine, but this was adorable as usual. A bathtime scene and Jim playing patty cake? Almost too much cuteness to be believed. Plus you had some great just-getting-to-know-Pam moments, like The Princess Bride and the Neosporian line, (which you just know Jim will tease her about forever) :)
On that note I noticed Pam's being a little artsy with making the cake and then shaping it.(BTW-how can anyone not think that homemade is better?) Since you've kept the characters pretty close to the show, I was wondering if we were going to find out that Pam has an artistic side. Since she's a slightly more confident Pam, would she have taken classes and gotten better? Would she be doing mostly black and white sketches since we know she's awesome at those (deleted scene-Business trip ep) And is there any chance of her having, I don't know done a sketch or two, of Ellie? Maybe as a birthday present?
I'm so sorry, I'm just rambling on writing your story for you, oh but if you ever decide to put Ellie through a "curiously destructive" phase, I work with an 18 month old who is in one of those and I'd be only too happy to pass on his escapades. He owes me :) Maybe daddy Jim is getting frustrated and Pam comes to the rescue ?
I love how naturally you incorporate the sign language, I don't know if I've mentioned it before, but it's so great that you provide the links.
Can't wait to see what happens at the party!
Author's Response: Okay, your review made me want to cry and then squish you to death, thank you so much. I'm sorry my next part is taking forever, but I'm writing it now :D
I would LOVE to hear about the little terror you work with, Ellie is definitely going to be getting more mobile in the next few chapters!
I'm really glad you noticed how much more confident Pam is in my story. And I'm definitely going to have her artistic side come up - I was actually thinking of Pam doing something for Jim for Christmas.
Do you have AIM or MSN? Would love to discuss things with you :D