Wow, Kevin and Meredith.  Question:  Does Meredith remember?  Further question:  Is this why "it's complicated" between Kevin and Stacey? What a fun little thing to throw in there.

I enjoyed this, and I like how you subtly had Jim re-asserting the Chinese food.

Get to the next chapter when you can get to the next chapter.  Most of us are patient and understanding. :) 

Nice story!  I like the sequence of before, during, and after Jim.  I really like this line "Suddenly she doesn’t feel so invincible because her mind can’t even convince her own heart that she’s fine."


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Nice.  A little preemptive strike by Karen.


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Wow.  This part "He felt a little nauseated; how could she take so much from him and not accept his affection. He hated these moments, the ones where he realized how much of his own energy he invests in her, when she so easily leaves him at the office to go home to her fiancé." is so heartbreaking and so true.

I really like how you've written the part of her realizing the card was gone, and figuring out what must have happened.  If I'd been writing this, I think I would have found that to be one of those things which are hard to get across, but you did it beautifully. 

This is really interesting, bebitched!  You've filled in not only Roy's possible thoughts on 'the day,' but back history of when Pam and Roy met and when Jim and Roy first met.  I especially like Roy's realization that he and Pam hadn't been right for a long time.

You have a little typo in there somewhere - font instead of front.

Nice job; I'm glad I followed the link from the recommendations thread! :) 

Good chapter - good premise. :)


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I like the parallel with Pam.  It's certainly nicer than what he ended up saying ("you're all jerks who didn't come see my band last night").  And in the case of Kevin, we even saw him inviting people and he told everyone how important it was!!  What were they all thinking?

For the record, I totally would have gone to Kevin's show and applauded for Scrantonicity II. 

Fun idea.  Fancy new Kevin. ;) 

This is wonderful.  Thanks so much for detailing everyone's Christmas for us.  I sort of feel like I've had a little Office Christmas episode.  I'm going to favorite it; this will take the place of Christmas 2007 if need be!

I love how you managed to get Kevin down perfectly in about two lines, and then he appeared in Oscar's section too.  It was neat that Oscar really wanted to get Kevin something.  The little bits of their friendship we get to see on the show are fun.

Nice job.

Wow!  Isn't that nice!  That's some punch.  If only it were spiked a bit more often, maybe they would have figured things out a long time before.   :) 

I love the last two lines especially.

I love this...  He looked suddenly wary. “Don’t steal my idea, though. I’m calling the third day.”  Very Kevin.

Where did Jim's coat go?  YIKES! 

Nice!  I love the surprise wedding; I had no idea that was coming.  The premature birth thing was cute. ;)  I believe her, don't you? I'm glad I finally caught up with this. :)


Author's Response: Oh, yes, Angela, we believe you. Hee. Thank you for reading and all your comments- I'm glad you enjoyed it! Happy New Year!

I like it. :)  But sure, you want specifics, you want me to work.  Okay, then.

I like that you had Jim still trying to find his way back; that makes sense to me.  That, combined with September's big talk about the past is something I think had to have occurred.  In the show, we saw them kidding around about 'the magic being gone' and 'we should have started dating a long time ago' and Pam teasing Jim about loving Karen.  All those things seemed pretty bizarre to me, and they really only work if something happened like what you have here.  (Although Pam teasing Jim about Karen was still sort of 'out there' in terms of sort of disrespecting that relationship/Karen.  Sure, that relationship was a sham, but still...)

I thought the 'baby' thing was pretty funny, particularly that he'd still call her that, but only on those days.  The fact that they needed something to mock was excellent.

The alternating confessions may have gone on a little long; I don't know what I'd cut, though, except maybe the repeating ones at the end.  They may be your favorites, but since they're more obvious, they could go if you were trimming.

In the phrase, "getting use to," it's actually "getting used to" -- that's a common error.

This is a great line: "He had worn down her cynicism, though."  

I really like how she thinks about 'their' living room; it's so realistic that her brain would be one step ahead.

So, there are a few specifics.  I look forward to November and onward.  You'll pretty much get to make it up from there, it seems.  Hey, you could do a Christmas wedding -- who could stop you? :) 

See?  Now this is more like it!  This is how it should have gone.  It's very good -- first one?  Nice job.  I loved that Jim took another peek back at Pam to see her staring, and that Karen finally realized she was fighting a losing fight.

And if Pam had only done something like this, instead of waiting until Beach Day.  Yikes.

Good job; write more. :)