When gods want to punish us, they grant us our wishes.
10 Whoa. This is awesome. (And I'm not a fifteen year old boy, I swear; I just sound like one sometimes.) Seriously, though - really, really intriguing. Next chapter?
Author's Response: Thanks:) The next chapter coming soon to the theaters near you:)
The more things change - the more they stay the same.
(I went crazy and rated it M -and then changed it back to a T 'cause - you know - it's still me doing the writing.)
10 All right, I gushed at TWoP, and I'll do it again here: Wow. This is just gorgeous, xoxoxo! It's so realistic, first of all, in its simplicity; it's easy to go way over the top when you're writing the moment when these two finally get together (trust me - I've tried with much melodrama). But this is just succinct and perfect and beyond romantic. You should definitely venture into 'M' material more often, because you do it in such a....classy isn't the right word, but it'll have to do because my brain's still reeling a little from the squee. :o)
Seriously - love this. Just love it. Keep 'em coming! With stuff like this, I think I can wait for as long as need be for Jim to hurry up and get back to Scranton!
10 Gave me the biggest chill, made me stop chewing my sesame chicken on the spot. This is excellent - so true to their voices, so understated and realistic. God. Could you please storm the NBC lot where they're filming and force them to make this happen on the show?
Seriously - sheer brilliance, this. Love it! Will there be more....?
You are too kind:) Glad you are enjoying it. Hope to get Part 2 up this evening.
10 Sigh. Just beautiful (I have the chills to prove it) and so realistic. You've got their voices down - and the poignancy of what this meeting would be like (feeling awkward for a second - handshake or hug?). Wow. I'm really sorry this is over.
Perhaps you could continue it....write another.....?
Thank you so much. I really appreciate it:) This was the most dialogue I've done and I was really nervous about it. I'll definitely see what tonight's episode brings for inspiration:)
10 First of all, this is your first fan fic? Because this is just excellent! What a great, great concept - them having met on the night of the infamous hockey game! And I could so see this happening - Jim being all gangly and awkward and such. :o) Loved it, too, that you worked in the "They know what they did" line!
I hope you dive into the obsession right alongside the rest of us, because this was such a terrific story! Write and post more!
Oh, gosh. Thanks so much. This is not my first fan fic ever (I have a one-shot and a partially abandoned WIP for Veronica Mars over on LJ) but I haven't written much, and this was my first Office fic, so I am so glad that it turned out okay:)
The obsession has definitely taken hold - Unfortunatley, I write very slowly, but I definitely want to to more.
Thanks again!:)
7 10 EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! oh my god! Okay, first of all, how honored am I that you wrote this?? WOW.
Second of all, I'm torn between major squee and serious guilt at how excited I am about your final line! (I take it back! I take it back! Jim and Pam must be together!) ....But ah, what a lovely diversion....
Couldn't believe how many great lines I wanted to mention, but I forced myself to narrow it to this one:
"Something, anything that would remind her of what it was like. Just to feel him again, even if it wasn't him."
That is the perfect way to frame a kiss between these two - because you could totally excuse her for this. Now, could you figure out a way to make it okay for Jon to kiss her back? To go with it? Eee!
Also - I was laughing out loud at your Drunk!Pam - you wrote her voice so perfectly.
LOVED THIS. Take Jonathan anytime, sister! (TWSS - or HS!)
Haha! I'm so glad you liked it! After all, it was inpsired by your work ...
In my mind, if Jim really did get "serious" with Karen, I could totally see the last scenario happening -- and I imagined (no, I am totally NOT admitting that this scene went on in my head) that Jon might actually kiss her back because I totally think he's attracted to her but he's always done nothing because of his brother and the fact that he was so loyal to him. But, you know... Jim's dating Karen ... Jim's not around ... Pam's drunk ... let's say Jon's maybe had a few .... welllll ... there might be some requited sexual tension going on there, let's just say.
Wow, I just had to fan myself thinking about it. Whew.
10 This? Well, it's awesome. You? Also awesome. Me? Now smiling like a jackass eating briars. :o)
THANK YOU!
Just a collection of confections from a parallel universe where all the Herr’s potato chips in Montreal can’t keep Pam and Jim apart. I hope it’s as therapeutic to read, as it was to write. A bit saucy.10 Ah me. This merits a moment of silence and a sigh before I can even begin to review it.
Okay.
So here's the thing about your fics: I know they'll always be delicous - just the perfect meld of steam and absolutely on the mark characterizations.
This?
‘Wow...hello to you too,’ he said huskily, pulling back from her mouth and gazing adoringly at her the way he did when he found something she’d done truly amazing.
I could just see that. And I love that you draw attention here to the contrast between the facade she presents to the world and the heat that's there for Jim and only Jim. Because I like to believe that that is the way these two would really be.
I also think you're absolutely right to note this as a sexual awakening for Pam in the sense that Jim notices everything and that for her, that's something new altogether. ....Which of course would make her that much more hungry for him.
Hokay....need not drink wine on a Saturday afternoon. :o)
Seriously, though, my only complaint about you is that you don't post a story every week.
Actually, I was telling my husband last night that sometimes I feel guilty, because I write and post in such a hurry, and it's all in an effort to both live vicariously through Pam (read: make her do and say the things with/to Jm that I would, given the chance), as well as to try to explore the moments on the show. As I told my husband, there are so many incredible writers on this board - your name and nomadshan's came to mind immediately, though there are others - and I feel like the Danielle Steele to you guys's....Kate Chopin. Or Colette. :o)
All this to say: You are absolutely awesome, both as a writer and as a thoughtful reviewer. So thank you.
In the words of JH, Wow. Seriously. As usual, you've picked out some of the precise elements that really drove this piece. Damn, you're good.
And a damn good writer too - which makes your comments here especially meaningful. In case my effusive reviews haven't been too obvious - I adore your stories...like drop everything, got to read a new chapter, to hell with my 'real work,' what husband and kids? kind of adore. And believe me, I also admire how prolific you are. That's a talent unto itself. So, thank you, merci, gracias, grazie...okay, out of languages (but couldn't let potato chip girl have all the glory!) And stay tuned for more vignettes soon.
BTW, to be mentioned even in the same universe as the real Colette, or Kate C. is shocking. And v. much appreciated.
10 Mkay, first of all, let us pause at this:
‘You seriously don’t think that me sitting there totally exposed, with you studying every inch, might be a slightly erotic situation?’
*cough*
So unrealistic, Colette, really. As if....
So I can't even sustain the joke. Brilliance once again. I swear, you just own their voices, their easy rapport....how wonderful it would be if they finally let go and were together. (I'm angry at Greg Daniels tonight.) :o)
Seriously - brilliant, as usual. You should totally post all your snippets.
And by the way - only you could write an author's note that's so breathtaking it could stand alone as a brief fic.
Seriously.
Awesome!
Well, glad you were entertained. I kind of thought you might get a kick out of this one. And I know what you mean - who'd want to see Jim naked? Outrageous, I tell you. A zillion thanks for your way too generous comments!
Trying to be patient with G. Daniels...but meanwhile, I need to keep myself amused...hence these little ditties. More on the way.
10 Ahhhh! I love it that you kept the phrase "hot as a very hot thing" because for some reason that I can't articulate, it is just so perfectly them.
And I love Jim reaping the fruits of Kelly's influence on Pam - he so deserves all the lingerie and flavored lip gloss he can handle, doesn't he? :o)
I can't wait for the next installation of this - and I'm so glad you're posting on TWoP now! It's a great forum.
You know, that's a line I've had a in my head for years - I actually came up with it to describe my college boyfriend a million years ago - who was rather Jim-ish, I might add (TMI, I know.) But somehow, it seemed to perfectly suit Mr. Halpert...because really, are there any words to do him justice? And I could just hear Pam saying it. Glad it spoke to you too!
Tryng to get P. 4 going - it's turning out a bit heavier (I'm beyond rehabilitation) and somehow I've ended up addressing Karen, Queen of Chips...so wish me luck.
Nice to be at TWoP...have lurked now and then for a while. Wary of the addictive potential, but great to 'see' my MTT colleagues over there! Like a cyber coffee klatsch.
10 Okay, love the metaphor of second drink here - in both places, actually. Just lovely - as is this entire fic. It's such a wonderful glimpse into what their life could be like if they were together - escaping to their own little world at the end of the day, unable to get enough of each other.
And as usual, your gift for making it all so real and tangible with the subtlest details is amazing. This?
Pam just nodded. She closed her eyes and nuzzled her face into his neck, kissing him gently where she could feel his pulse below his ear. It felt so good to just hold him, quietly, for a while. The dim light made Jim’s skin look pale and slightly glowing, almost like a black and white movie. It had a soothing, otherworldly quality. Her mind began to wander once again.
....I could absolutely see that. Just perfect.
Now, if only Pam would realize what their life could be like. I'm glad it came through for you...you hit on exactly what I wanted to do with these disconnected pieces...just little glimpses of what could be. (Damn writers for thinking it would be boring if they just got them together!) Besides, of course, purging my mind of all its saucy little snippets. Thanks so much for your ever supportive and incisive comments!
Sorry for another review, but I forgot to comment on the Karen thing - I think you've articulated it perfectly here, his thing with Karen. Absolutely. I think if you'd posted this a week ago, we'd have all felt much more relieved immediately. Because I think you're right on; he's trying so hard to make her fit the mold of Pam, and she's just not going to. I think that right now, she's charmed enough to look like she's up for the challenge, but I think the more time that goes on, the more we're going to see evidence of exactly what you've said here - that he'll keep trying, and it'll just get more and more obvious that she just isn't Pam.
Again, great job here --
10 Okay. Give me a minute here.
Okay. It is hereafter proclaimed that you can no longer even hesitate for a milisecond before you post a story - because if this is what you turn out when you're in a hurry? JESUS WOMAN.
Sex on the kitchen counter? Dishes be damned?
Ho yeah!!!!!!!!!!!
Brilliant work, as always! And thank you, by the way. :o)
Will try to be more productive...somehow I think this may be inversely proportionate to my paying job, however. Aw, screw that.
Glad you were feeling the pudding....really, with Jim would there be a bad location? Kitchen counter, hood of car, random restroom...it's all good (okay, maybe not that last one, cause that's just grody.) And thank you for expressing your Ho yeah! Bracing myself for tomorrow night.....
10 Gulp.
This was nothing short of awesome. It's so difficult to keep them in character in a moment like this one (because we never see this on the show - or haven't yet, anyway....), and you just captured them so perfectly here.
Sigh. Just wonderful, absolutely perfect.
I bought a new suit and cancelled a plane ticket.10 I have to tell you, this is one of the absolute most beautiful pieces I've read in a long, long time. I don't have time to be reading all the new fic, but I saw that this was short and thought I'd check it out....wow. Sitting here with tears in my eyes. You captured his voice so perfectly - caught that seemingly intangible thing that just IS Jim. It comes to me to say that you've captured here what makes him such a compelling character: He's so open, so selfless and really brave, because it takes bravery to remain that open in the face of everything he dealt with last season.
And thank god he never had to face this, because I really believe it would've played out exactly as you've written it here.
Just beautiful, really.
10 No! No! no! You can't stop here - agghhhh! Wow, this is terrific Moxie. And please, dear god please, finish it!!!
10 Big sigh. Holy cow this was excellent, Moxie - you do such a great job of building the tension slowly.
Wow. Excellent!
Pure unadulterated semi-smutty Supply Closet Fic. It really serves no other purpose.
10 Okay, it is official: You should write smut more often, because my god, this is incredible! The pacing, their voices - everything. This is just so wonderfully in character and so incredibly hot. WOW. Seriously - hats off to you!
Author's Response:
Hee! Thanks girl7. I can't seem to accomplish the straight on smut - I've got to find some humor in it. I'm so glad to know it worked.
I'll see what I can do. :)
10 All right, no more holding out on us - do you hear me? This is so great! It's such a sweet little fic - kind of lulls you into smiling at the sort of everyday sweet things Jim would do for Pam, and then all of a sudden takes your breath away with that grand gesture at the end - very nice!
So, have you started your next one yet?
10 Par5, I know you did this as a one off, but I have to tell you - I'm impressed! I love the first two in particular. (And I'm glad I didn't start drinking early and write a haiku about the forearms, because believe me, it'd have been a disaster!)
Seriously - this is awesome.
Deep feelings, small words. Sometimes less is more it seems. And we all want more.
Disclaimer: All publicly recognizable characters, settings, etc. are the property of their respective owners. The original characters and plot are the property of the author. The author is in no way associated with the owners, creators, or producers of any media franchise. No copyright infringement is intended.10 This is so charming - I love it. I particularly love the second stanza - it just occurred to me as I read that that it'll be an added bit of awkwardness, I would imagine, for Pam to know (on some level) that he left because of her and that he's not back by choice. Hmmm.
Great job here -
Pam's been counting the days.10 It astonishes me that you must've written this fairly quickly, because it's really....melodic is the word that comes to mind. I can't think of a better fic to mark the 500th post. Awesome.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. It was pretty quick, I guess, but it is so short that I was able to spend some time polishing it up. As always, I appreciate your comment. Thanks!
10 Okay, so here's the thing about you: Your fics are like "The Office" of fan fiction in the sense that every time you post one (which is so not often enough), I just know it's going to be brilliant and that I'll love it - much like the show. I can always count on it to just knock my socks off.
Loved this - subtle, simple, but tied together beautifully at the end. I hope to god what happens on the show tonight is somehow close to this...
Every evening, he hangs back just a bit longer than the others, and waits.10 I stumbled across this absolutely gorgeous oneshot, and I'm just...stunned. First of all, my favorite image of Jim and Pam - favorite moment second to Casino Night - is at the end of "The Secret" when the doors close on them, and we see him stare at her, then she looks up at him, each just missing the other's gaze.
You capture the essence of that moment here, and then some. This was sweet and poignant and erotic and just spot on. Loved it.
A matched set of Thanksgiving drabbles.
10 God, why did I not read this earlier? This is, as always, just beautiful - heartbreaking, nuanced...poetry. I always say that about your stuff, but it's the best way I can think of to describe it. And the following line actually brought tears to my eyes, because it just articulates that ache we all feel for Jim so, so well:
He’s told his mother the abridged version; one look and she knew the rest. Such a beautiful boy. Capable of love with rare depth. She wonders how anyone could turn down that gift.