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Dwight running "in a less than heterosexual way" and shunning himself...gold. Pure gold.

Loved these two, can't wait for the third!! I like how you got the whole office involved in this, b/c realistically they would have been - none of them keep much to themselves.

Author's Response: Thanks! You're right, they always get in each other's business...

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Wow...I registered just so I could comment on this series. I love this so much. The writing style fits so perfectly with the content. The short sentences match fleeting thoughts. And one of my favorite things is the dual POV's in every chapter and the hello/goodbye cues. You did a really good job matching their feelings and Pam's growth. Not only has she become independent, but she understands Jim better than before. You took two already close characters and made them inseperable. My absolute favorite chapter was the part with the phone call (The Initiation?). I wanted to stop and review that part but couldn't stop reading. You nailed the angst and anxiety and comfort. You've probably heard this before, but I've been in that situation before - loving a very close friend and having to find that familiar routine after a period of separation. During nearly every conversation we had there were hello/goodbye moments that I relieve and regret. I never managed to get to fancy new beesley status, unfortunatley. The point of the digression was to thank you for describing it in a way that I never could and tell you that it was freakishly accurate. The only negative I have is that I would have liked a Jim POV in Chapter 7. I understand why you didn't include one, but I would have enjoyed seeing your take on how Jim felt/thought during Pam's infamous speech. Sorry this is so long and scattered, I haven't yet had time to sit and think about my reaction to this series clearly, this is written in a flurry of pure enjoyment. By far my favorite that I've read here (and that's a lot). Absolutely can't wait until the last chapter is added!!!!! Awesome job!!!! Please keep writing

Author's Response: Wow. You just completely floored me. I cannot believe this story was enough to prompt you to go through the trouble of registering but I\'m extremely glad, and flattered that it was. I\'m still re-reading what you said in disbelief to be honest. I\'m new to The Office and I fell in love with this pairing pretty much instantly. I have so many ideas for fics but whenever I sat down to write I couldn\'t seem to start. When I did, this style came out and luckily it worked out perfectly for the story. More than anything, the story started as a way for me to go through, look back at the episodes and understand the pairing better. I decided to share it on a whim and I\'m so glad people have enjoyed it and found it believable. As for chapter seven, I really wanted a Jim POV too but I decided a while back that it should be all Pam in the way that Casino Night is all Jim. Still, I promise you\'ll find a bit of Jim reflecting on Pam\'s speech in Chapter 8. Again, thank you so much for taking the time and trouble to leave me a comment, and such a long one as well. I can\'t tell you how much it means to know that people are reading and enjoying. Thanks :)

I really liked how you worked Kevin's super stealthy spy moves into this. He was one of my favorite parts of Fun Run.

lol, love the Creed moment...I can totally picture him saying Toyota Tercel,1989

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You know what, it's NEVER too early for retro!!! You did a great job writing this, I can just feel the intensity between them. I especially liked how in the beginning Pam is thinking what's the harm and then later Kevin says It's never just for fun. Even when people say it is. Good stuff.

Author's Response: I'm glad to hear you say that, iheartcreed.  Casino Night forever!  :)

Delightful!! I love the song Austin and I love JAM so...

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This chapter is more depressing than the previous one because she's so happy and we all know that tomorrow won't be wonderful.

Author's Response: Sorry about the depression- you're absolutely right, of course! I always let myself get carried away, and often get disappointed, so I guess I channeled that into Pam's situation, here. I hope it wasn't so depressing that you stop reading- I promise it gets cheerier. Thank you for commenting!

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Rather nice, I especially liked the paragraph that starts "This is the problem with dating your best friend."

Author's Response: Thanks so much

Author's Response: Thanks so much

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I loved that line in your Hello/Goodbye story and this was just so amazing. I was going to paste my favorite parts, but that would pretty much be everything. I love when he describes being a fool in the early days, haven't we all been there before? And "While she was still Beesly, he could still be himself," made my heart ache a little and I don't know why, except it is such a beautiful line. Ooohhhh, and the way you descibed the way Jim talks to Pam and Karen was nothing short of brilliant. I've said it before but you're an amazing writer. You have a very distinct style that is such a pleasure to read. And your ability to express such psychological and emotional depth in such short clips in just...wow. Can't wait for the next one!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely response. I\'m glad you like my writing style because I can\'t seem to write in any other way at the moment! Thanks so much for reading, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and respond with such a detailed review.

Wow, that description of Jim checking her out was great. I love his interest in even her toes, it really shows exactly how much he loves her. I bet he never looked at Karen's, lol.

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Love it, love it, love it!!!! *sigh* Why does Jim have to be so perfect?

Author's Response: Haha, because he\'s Jim! He\'s perfectly imperfect! Thanks for the kind words, iheartcreed!

Pretty darn good for a writing exercise. I like how all of our fears that something bad is going to happen is reflected in their thoughts, but how they are both resolved to not let that happen, without directly saying it to one another.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the thoughtful review.  I really appreciate it.  :)