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first, kudos for an amazing DMB song as the title chapters.

and second, i read this story and finished it and was thrilled with how wonderful it was. the dream girl letters-- blah, made me feel all giddy, what girl wouldn't want to read something like that?

an older story, but i still have insane love for it!

Author's Response: Okay, I know you reviewed this awhile ago, but I was in the midst of holiday stuff so I sort of...um...forgot. Anyway, I just wanted to say thanks for your comment. And lest you feel like it made absolutely no difference, it did actually encourage me to write part of the epilogue, which I'm still only about half done with but whatever. The point is, I really appreciate your taking the time to review this story. I had so much fun writing it, and it's really fun to hear that some people are still enjoying reading it!

I really wasn't sure if I'd like this at first, but I kept reading and eventually-- this ended up being one of my favorite stories on here, ever.

Very nicely done, funny, poignant, even a little bit heartbreaking at just the right times. Now with S4 Ryan, it's a little hard to imagine him being so nice, lol but I still like to revisit this one once in while because you did such a good job.

i'm just grinning after reading this. really terrific-- the ending? blahhh i'm still smiling. great writing.

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I just read this from start to where you are now, and I am extremely impressed with the entire thing, cliffhangers and all! At times I'm smiling, others not so much, but you've handled it all beautifully with a very interesting concept and amazing dialogue. Great work !! :)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much!  Way to power through 17 chapters :)  Glad you're hanging in there and still enjoying it, thanks for reading!

“...and then I could record myself singing a romantic ballad. How does that sound?”

haha this was a really great chapter. Andy is one of my favorite characters-- glad you wove him in.

Keep going-- I'm anxious to hear the rest! Great job so far :)

okay, I'm going to sound like a total dork and agree with another reviewer-- I've seen this on here and just immediately assumed Allentown, PA. haha, but I am so glad I actually clicked and read it.

This is amazing. The last chapter was ridiculously great. Like this..

I jogged around to open the car door for her and she held her arms up for me to pull her out. I bent down so she could put her arms around my neck, and when I got her to her feet, I think she actually said, “Oof.”

I don't know, just something so simple yet poignant about this. It's weird the lines that jump out at me in this story (it always is lol) but there's such an easy grace with your writing. I love this story!

Author's Response: You know what?  Not dorky at all!  I really loved that little image you mentioned of her holding her arms up for him to help her, so thank you so much for mentioning that, katoepotatoe (cute name!).  Thank you so much for the compliment!  I wish somehow we could see a pic of each writer as they finish a story and get ready to post it.  This right here?  Is the antithesis of grace.  Thank you so much and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!

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i love this. really nicely written, i love that last line :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.

Pam tells Vanessa all the cool places to go in Scranton. All five of them.

^^ haha, this sounds exactly like my own town.

This was really interesting, refreshing-- great job :)

this was really nice. I loved the end lines, just wonderful :)

i loved this. Almost the entire dialogue seems like it would fit right in with the show-- Jim and Pam were captured just right. The ending put a huge smile on my face. Nicely done! :)

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I really liked this. The whole Second Life thing got me thinking of where they would take it on the show-- but unfortunately we never got to see :P This was a nice take on the whole situation, and I really loved how you portrayed Jim-- esp. with the guitar and all :)

Well done !

Author's Response: thanks so much! I really am anal about trying to nail the characters as best as I possibly can and it means a lot to me that that came across! :)

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These are so well done. Your characterization of Pam is so real-- the emotions of all the different scenarios are spot-on. I'm sure that you have only good things ahead for the remaining night, but I also thoroughly enjoyed the chapters where things were still uncertain

Great job, and I'm looking forward to the conclusion :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I always love delving into Pam's emotions- I think between the writing and the acting, she's one of the most fascinating women on TV. She's just so real and insecure and not the sassy bed-hopping career woman, but also not the neurotic but brilliant mess you see so often. Thank you for commenting- hope you enjoy the end!