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I feel like this would definitely be Jim's voice if he wrote livejournal entries. Loved how you catalogued the progression of their relationship.

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EEEEEEE!! So so so cute & lovely. I think you capture them both perfectly here and I really feel like this would be their dynamic--particularly at the beginning of their relationship before Pam builds up some self esteem.

Author's Response: So so so glad you thought so!  Thanks yippee!

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aww so lovely. you created so many nice moments here--particularly loved their first introduction and this line: "She doesn't know how long she's felt like this, maybe only since this morning when her toaster oven broke, but she knows he's watched her like that for a long time."

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you liked that line.

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this felt so true to the show and their dynamic that i could practically see this play out in my head. love the details too--like the photo of them together and the fact that the bed was "an inanimate object version of jim."

such a wonderful moment.

10

this was fantastic--loved the preface at the beginning to differentiate roy & jim in pam's mind. and i could really hear them saying the dialogue in my head--it felt so, so right and you could really feel the pain in that moment where jim finds out about roy.

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wow. every little piece of this just killed me. so so so in line with the feeling of the deleted scene--it felt incredibly real, which just made it hurt more. you used the POV so well because it made the reader feel everything that jim was feeling...the hope & excitement of the beginning and the extreme disappointment & pain of the end.

10

love love love this. i know i'm getting redundant in the reviews i leave you--but everything you write is so good and fits these characters so well, that all i can say is that it's always a pleasure to read :)

Author's Response: If every review you leave me from this point forward is a carbon copy of this one I'd be the happiest camper. :)  Thanks so much!!

Author's Response: If every review you leave me from this point forward is a carbon copy of this one I'd be the happiest camper. :)  Thanks so much!!

10

Wow. Wowity wow wow.

Cannot believe you made this work the way you did. It was beautiful, sad, sweet, and (dare I say) a bit hot?

Loved how you captured Jim's reluctance to leave what he knows, loved how the conversation sounded so much like Jim/Dwight but with slight undercurrents of a bit more feeling.

This was really lovely--congratulations :)

Author's Response:

Awesome, thanks, yippee!

Can I borrow "wowity wow wow"?! That cracked me up.

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oh so good in that painful, painful way. i haven't seen aanyone use this scenario before--one where pam returns the kiss, recognizes the attraction, then tells jim to go away for the sake of her marriage.

love the way you wrote them, in turns sweet, bitter, hurt, sarcastic--it felt so true to life.

Author's Response: I am giddy that you appreciate my story and that you feel it is true to them.  Thanks!

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Amazing, as always. This was so evocative and full of real feeling. I think you perfectly captured what Pam must be feeling--she does love Roy, he's just not quite right any more. Love the way you built this up to show her realizatioin, particularly the part where she imagines Jim with her at the lake. Gorgeous.

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all so real (and so hot!)--like the way you portrayed her inner thought process and her denial--it seemed very pam-like.

Author's Response: Ah, thank you, thank you

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Yowza. Their beginning banter about Phyllis was spot-on and the ending was so incredibly sad--I could totally see Jim feeling guilty & ashamed after that. And everything in between....sure a bit OOC for Pam, but so hot that it didn't bother me much :)

And I have to agree...I wouldn't mind reading a Pam POV for this one...

Author's Response: Thank you. I think I am now obsessed with shamed filled Jim. Stay tuned for Pam's POV...