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Bless you Dedeen for such a beautiful and poignant story. Thank you for taking the time.

So sorry about your loss.

Another chapter so soon - what a great gift Blanca. Thank you.

The way you tell the story of what I imagine is Jim and Pam's first encounter since the Casino Night kiss and parting is nothing short of stunning and oh so real.

...his face a mixture of confusion and delight

Such a wonderful description of the emotions Jim would feel when seeing the woman he loved turn up at his doorstep in the middle of the night after thinking he had lost her forever. And the word 'delight' is just not used often enough for me - it describes the look on Jim's face when he saw Pam for the first time in The Merger...come to think of it, it describes the look on Pam's face as well.

...it was the closest she'd felt to normal in months

Pam's life from the moment Jim told her he was in love with her and then left her must have been one of the scariest and uncertain periods she'd ever lived through. She ended a relationship she had been planning her future around and woke up to the realization of how much Jim meant to her. I love that you chose the word 'normal' and not something like 'happy'. It's a non-conventional choice for a love story in my opinion but just perfect for Pam at this point.

...he whispered "Hi". "Hi," she offered back

This simple exchange speaks volumes to me and reminds me of what is still my favourite moment between Jim and Pam, the "Hi", "Hey" from Drug Testing. After hours of not speaking to each other, this simple exchange and looks on their faces could not have said 'I love you, i missed you' more if those words had actually been spoken. After months of being apart for them to have almost the same exchange is pure poetry and so true to these characters voices. Whether this was your intent or not Blanca, it was brilliant.

...and then he was kissing her again, smiling against her lips. Laughter turned into soft moans and back into laughter again.

What an awesome and joyful picture you paint with these words. As soon as I read them I saw the proposal in the rain kiss. I have always loved that scene for the joy John and Jenna brought to that moment...the smiles while they kiss and embrace...I want me some of that.

Chapter 3 cannot come soon enough but no pressure :)

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I have been eagerly awaiting this chapter. It did not disappoint.

The intimacy in the way you have written this chapter is stunning. Emotional intimacy is so intense for these two.

In an instant everything became startingly, achingly real...she couldn't pretend that everything they'd said and done to each other didn't matter.

There's something about this passage that just makes me want to cry for the pain and loneliness of their time apart.

I am loving the beauty of their reunion.

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Well, if nothing else, the mental pictures painted in my mind of hot, steamy Jim will keep me coming back for more. I woke up at 3am and couldn't fall asleep so I checked for new fic. Great surprise that made for some sweet dreams.

Can't get this song out of my head though...

The Springsteen and Elmer Fudd versions :)

Author's Response: Thanks, jinx! You have me intrigued with this comment ... Springsteen & Elmer Fudd? Is there a link you can post for that? Glad you enjoyed my Jim. I kinda enjoyed putting that one together. Since I haven't written anything that dark before, it was a neat exercise. Thanks for leaving a note!

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Love it!

Please continue. After watching The Initiation a week or so ago I was hoping for a post phone call fic where Pam takes the lead.

Thank you SilverSun.

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This whole story was really great. It's so enjoyable to read a well written story about the Halperts outside of the confines of Dunder Mifflin/Sabre Scranton.

Author's Response: Thanks very much, jinx, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate your comments.

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I was hoping this would be the reveal chapter and I like the way you wrote it...did not see it coming like that. Really liked it and can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed it!! Thanks for the review, more soon. :)

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Fantastic fun story. Just the right amount of zany Michael and hot Halperts.

Author's Response: Glad the ratio of hot Halperts to zany Michael worked for you - thanks very much jinx!

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Formatting huh? Didn't notice any issues.

Loved how you made the first so spontaneous and playful and yet still intense.

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Glad to be reading a new story so soon after your last one was completed.

You AU ideas are very compelling and I look forward to seeing where you take us with this one.

What is the meaning/significance of the title?

Author's Response: Thanks Jinx! I really hope you like where it does eventually go.
So the title will be addressed in an actual chapter, but in short, for reality tv breaking the fourth wall means cast members and the crew interacting in a way that blurs the lines between cast and crew. Sometimes it's harmless like a producer appearing on camera to settle an issue and other times it's more significant and altering for the filming.

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I feel like this is a perfect chapter for the theme of this story. If The Office were a different type of show this is the type of conversation I would have expected between Jim and Pam when they started dating.

The words and emotion really have me invested and engaged.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's exactly what I wanted to do with this story...explore all of the little moments that we didn't get to see.

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Thanks for recalling that incandescent moment so beautifully.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks, jinx. It was nice to feel like finishing up a fic again. :)