Reviewer: lapdogdesign Signed
Date: April 17, 2007
Title: Chapter 1: Friday
This was a really great story. I loved how they both reflected on their past relationships - pregnancy scares are a real litmus test for where things stand (and where you heart *really* is.) I thought Jim handled the situation perfectly. I loved the girl-talk translator comment...I can *so* see them talking to each other that way.
And the relief tinged with regret...god that is *so* true. I'm married with 2 kids, *absolutely* don't want any more, but whenever I get a negative pregnancy test, I'm always a little sad. Why is that?
I thought you might end the fic at this line "The song ends." It was perfect for an open ended ending...but I'm glad you didn't. I prefer closure, myself.
Great job! I'm checking to see if I've missed anything else you've written here.
Author's Response: Thank you!
You know, it's funny you mention that, because in my head the story did always end at that point when the song ends. And then I was walking around my house the day I was writing it, and all the sudden, I could just see the two of them sitting on the edge of the bathtub side by side, and I realized I really wanted to write that scene, too, because I guess to me, this piece is really not about a potential pregnancy so much as it's about Jim and Pam's feelings about the future of their relationship, and the point I was trying to make was that a baby might seem romantic to readers of fanfiction, but for them, at this point, it would throw everything into question again, and they've just started to settle things between them. So I guess I wanted to let them off the hook a little bit at the end, and I also wanted this to be a moment that would strengthen their relationship going forward instead of causing all that turmoil.
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