Penname: brokenloon Real name: Steve
Member Since: March 03, 2007

Bio:

Okay, first of all I'm a guy-are there any others writing here?  Yes, I am of course in love with Jenna Fischer and with the fictional character she has created.  And I would totally have a beer and watch some hoops with Jim Halpert.

I've never written romantic stuff in my life; this show just brings it out of me.  My stories here are sort of little daydreams that seem somehow therapeutic to me.  You can usually count on happy endings from my stuff; plenty of heartache on the actual show.      

Other stuff:  37, divorced, two kids, I live in Northern Virginia

Feel free to contact me.   

author of the month 2017


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Reviews by brokenloon
Fathers and Daughters. Women and Men. by Stablergirl Rated: M [Reviews - 250] 86
Summary: Past Featured Story

Member's Choice - “My father died, so I’ll need a few days.” She explained in an unaffected sounding voice that surprised even herself. The three other parties in the room were stunned into silence. Jim spoke first. “Jesus, Pam…” She stood with her back to him and addressed Michael as if Jim had not made a sound…as if Jim did not exist. It was the only way.


Categories: Alternate Universe, Jim and Pam, Past
Characters: Jim/Pam, Karen
Genres: Angst, Childhood, Inner Monologue, Romance, Travel
Warnings: Adult language
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 40335 Read Count: 157535 ePub Downloads: 42
[Report This] Published: April 20, 2007 Updated: June 03, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 15, 2007 Title: Chapter 14: Goodbye, Rand McNally.

I love so much about the way you choose to write.  This story...I think each chapter can't possibly be better than the last, and yet it is.  You have such a sure hand and go so deep into these characters.  Wonderful, wonderful storytelling.

Author's Response: thank you so much.  I'm so enjoying this exploration of them and how they can heal.  Glad you are too ;-)

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: May 25, 2007 Title: Fathers and Daughters. Women and Men.

I love this story.  Always will.  But since you asked, yeah I would have wanted this part to go a little differently.  Pam regressing to behavior that would embarrass a 15 year old?  I'm trying and I just can't see it.  It's a measure of how invested I am in this story that it's truly bothered me that it's taken a turn that doesn't sit well with me.  Of course you're absolutely entitled to your own vision, and others may not feel the same way.  I will still be looking forward to the next chapter and hoping for Pam to redeem herself.



Author's Response: Clearly Pam will redeem herself.  But I'm definitely taking your review into consideration.  This chapter is still in the works so I'm definitely up to editing some of it out.  Making it shorter.  idk.  I'll figure it out.  Anyway thank you for the honesty!! Stay with me and keep your eyes peeled for this chapter to change.  ;-)

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 29, 2007 Title: Chapter 17: You have no idea...

Okay, that's more like it.  I could have lived with an angsty step backwards that was more understated and in character, but I think it's more organic to have Pam continue to grow and move forward.  Your characterization here returns to being perfect and as always the writing itself is simply incredible.  You are an amazing talent.   

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: June 03, 2007 Title: Chapter 18: Forget Me Not

Truly a masterpiece.  I add my voice to those who are hoping you write more here, although in all honesty people should have to pay to read your writing.  The scale and complexity of this and the quality of your writing are truly impressive.  And where can we order the painting?   

Author's Response:

lol uh guess you'll have to paint it yourself.  it only exists in my imagination ;-)

And thanks for everything! Great compliments from a great beta.

LUNCH THEFT by kgreene Rated: K [Reviews - 21] 11
Summary: When Michael's mom-made lunch disappears he turns the office upside down to find the person responsible. Meanwhile, Jim plans a day trip to New York with Pam.
Categories: Jim and Pam, Past
Characters: Ensemble
Genres: Humor
Warnings: No Warnings Apply
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7417 Read Count: 7075 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: April 24, 2007 Updated: May 10, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: April 24, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE

Happy, funny stuff with good characterization.  I look forward to Act 2.

Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the good words!

Marriage Counseling by Binxbaby Rated: M [Reviews - 101] 24
Summary:

No matter how much this couple is perfect for each other, they are bound to have flaws. Jim and Pam head to marriage counseling, and learn to deal with their issues in a semi adult manner.


Categories: Jim and Pam, Future
Characters: Jim/Pam, Other
Genres: Angst, Humor, Married
Warnings: Mild sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 12 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 28635 Read Count: 35435 ePub Downloads: 8
[Report This] Published: April 25, 2007 Updated: June 05, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: April 26, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: The Trust Bubble

Really great idea, and very interesting.  I was intrigued by your take because I actually would have imagined almost the opposite...I think Pam would tend to be fine with arguing and see it as normal whereas Jim would be bothered by it.  Of course I'm probably projecting from my own experiences. 

Author's Response:

I can totally see your perspective, I don't think Pam would enjoy arguing and I think Jim would. Jim would kind of fight for what he wants I think where as Pam wouldn't because she's afraid she would lose Jim if she said the wrong thing. I do remember she stood up to Roy a few times (in the parking lot at Chili's and in season 3) but most of the time when Roy did something she didn't like, she didn't have much to say.  But I'm going to try to bring the argumentative side of Pam out a bit, I think she can be a fighter sometimes too. =-) Thanks for your imput!

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: April 29, 2007 Title: Chapter 5: Oh Brother!

Love this fic...great idea and each one is fascinating to read.  I hope you won't mind if I quibble with your characterization though.  Most of us guys, if we take a beating on the football field, we don't want to talk about it.  We're certainly not going to whine on and on to our wives and therapists about it.  I really think Jim is too proud, too stoic, too much of a guy to say stuff like "He tried to amputate me!"  

Jackpot by xoxoxo Rated: M [Reviews - 48] 15
Summary:

Jim, Pam and a weekend in New York - set in the fluffy future.  Not a spoiler in sight.


Categories: Jim and Pam, Future
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Fluff, Romance, Steamy, Travel, Weekend, Wet Pam/Jim, Workdays
Warnings: Moderate sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4947 Read Count: 15307 ePub Downloads: 3
[Report This] Published: April 28, 2007 Updated: April 29, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: April 28, 2007 Title: Chapter 2: All that glitters...

As always, a pleasure to read.  The way you give even the sunniest of fluff an air of substance and plausibility is truly an art.  Also, I hope Tiffany & Co hooked you up with some free loot in exchange for the product placement.    



Author's Response:

Thanks so much brokenloon.  You're entirely too sweet.   I'm glad my silly dream came across well in the translation.  And re: Tiffany & Co.  Don't I wish!!!   Especially due to the fact that there are pieces I actually own (and wear daily).  I give them free advertising all the time!!! 

Paper Jam by Morning Angel Rated: K+ [Reviews - 14] 6
Summary: Past Featured StoryJim would have never believed that a copier could be a catalyst for a major life change.  Nevertheless, it seemed oddly appropriate given his line of work. Spoiler free.
Categories: Jim and Pam, Present
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Angst, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2090 Read Count: 4728 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: April 28, 2007 Updated: April 28, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: April 28, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very well done.  It's interesting, they could finally coneect after some epic struggle, or it could be something as matter-of-fact as this.  I found their exchange very realistic and thought you did a particularly good job in writing Jim's voice.  One thing...the genre is misleading, I think, I would add "romance" as well as "angst".  I almost passed on it because I assumed it would be nothing but angst.

Author's Response:

I always though that it would be a little thing that would finally tip the glass over, and make them be finally honest with each other but I'm glad it works for others as well.  I'm glad it felt realistic because that is totally what I was aiming for. :)  Thank you!

Oh, thanks for pointing out the genre stuff!  I was a little distracted and missed adding the romance label.  Bad admin me.

Map of the World by Colette Rated: M [Reviews - 109] 43
Summary: Past Featured StorySummer picnics, maps, rain...things change year to year. (No spoilers.)
Categories: Jim and Pam
Characters: None
Genres: Angst, Inner Monologue, Romance, Weekend, Wet Pam/Jim
Warnings: Moderate sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3974 Read Count: 24286 ePub Downloads: 5
[Report This] Published: April 30, 2007 Updated: May 04, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: April 30, 2007 Title: Chapter 2: Summer Picnic 2006

The second person is very effective here...I am chomping at the bit for Summer '07 (and I'm guessing '08 may be pretty sweet too). 

Author's Response: Happy you think the voice works - I've always liked the sense of immediacy and intimacy of 2nd person fics, but had been kind of scared to try it. Summer of 2007/2008 coming soon! Thanks much, Brokenloon.

My Soul To Keep by xoxoxo Rated: M [Reviews - 23] 6
Summary: Pam sleeps, perchance she dreams.  A series of three nocturnal musings of one Ms. Pamela Beesly.  Absolutely spoiler-free.
Categories: Jim and Pam, Present, Future
Characters: Angela, Dwight, Jim, Jim/Pam, Karen, Kelly, Michael, Pam, Roy, Ryan
Genres: Angst, Dream/Fantasy, Fluff, Humor, Romance
Warnings: Moderate sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3006 Read Count: 7748 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 03, 2007 Updated: May 09, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 09, 2007 Title: Chapter 3: After

I have a new favorite bit everytime I read this (which is several times now).  Right now it's the whole idea of dream Jim wanting to reason with the wave of bobbleheads.

Author's Response:

What?  You don't think that would work?   Thanks so much for reading....and re-reading and for all your ideas.

Without you Zombie Dwight would have been only half as terrifying. :)

Stolen by oypoodle Rated: M [Reviews - 11] 5
Summary: Inspired by Jim's comment about a specific type of fantasy in the last episode, minor spoilers. Smutty smutty smut.
Categories: Present, Jim and Pam
Characters: None
Genres: Oneshot, Romance, Steamy, Wet Pam/Jim
Warnings: Mild sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1436 Read Count: 4308 ePub Downloads: 1
[Report This] Published: May 04, 2007 Updated: May 04, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 04, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow.  Very nicely done.  How much would I pay to see this exact scene next Thursday, censors be damned?  Quite a bit, I think.

Dream Myself Awake by macolly Rated: T [Reviews - 13] 13
Summary:

A Jim Pov. A little spoilery, as I used the Official Title at NBC, to assume one small point. It's fluffy and sugary. My official warning is:It May Cause Cavities. Proceed at your own risk


Categories: Jim and Pam, Present
Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2211 Read Count: 2300 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 06, 2007 Updated: May 06, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: May 06, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wonderful....I've read pepole say it wouldn't be realistic for them to get together in the remaining time of this season, but I so disagree, and this is one of a thousand different ways it could happen.  There's not a single thing here out of character.  Great job, brought a big smile to my face. 

Author's Response: Thank you brokenloon, I needed desperately to rectify this season in my head. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

The Fantasies of Jim and Pam by I Know This Much Is True Rated: MA [Reviews - 113] 45
Summary:

The title pretty much says it all: the fantasies of Jim and Pam and the naughty actings out of those fantasies.

This story will go as long as you, the readers, want it to.


Categories: Jim and Pam, Present
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Dream/Fantasy, Fluff, Romance, Steamy, Workdays
Warnings: Adult language, Dubious Consent, Explicit sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 22 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 54206 Read Count: 149004 ePub Downloads: 20
[Report This] Published: May 08, 2007 Updated: January 31, 2008
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: May 11, 2007 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: The Accident

I liked this one.  A lot.  That's all I'm saying.

Every Day is Exactly the Same by girl7 Rated: M [Reviews - 72] 22
Summary: Past Featured Story

A post-Beach Games fic.  Some glimpses of what might've happened after the cameras stopped rolling (not that enough didn't happen while they were rolling...). 

Spoilers through Beach Games.

 


Categories: Jim and Pam
Characters: Jim/Pam, Karen
Genres: Angst, Inner Monologue, Romance, Steamy
Warnings: Adult language, Moderate sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 10963 Read Count: 48645 ePub Downloads: 16
[Report This] Published: May 10, 2007 Updated: May 16, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 11, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: I believe I can see the future....

So sharp and insightful as usual.  I feel like I've come to know these characters, really, really well, but you never fail to bring something to the table that I just didn't think of.  Of course he would be proud of her.  And how you managed to whip this out, like, four minutes after the episode ended is beyond me.  Whatever it is you take, I want a prescription.            

Author's Response:

Wow - that's really a compliment; thank you very much.  It's what I hope to do, anyway (i.e. provide some insight/bring something new to the table).  Because it's such a subtle, understated show wherein so much goes unsaid (well, it didn't in this episode, thank god), I'm just fascinated by exploring what the characters might've been thinking, feeling, their motivations....

Still planning on checking out your stories - haven't forgotten, just haven't had time yet.  I'll leave feedback when I do, though.

Thanks again for the review! 

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 15, 2007 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: I can't remember how this got started, but I can tell you exactly how it will end

Well, more of the same from you...the same flawless writing that crackles with intensity,  the same deep insight into the characters and their motivations.  You write an especially great Jim...you write him as an actual man rather than an idealized projection.  Same old same old, I'll be hungrily waiting for updates.

Author's Response:

Okay, so coming from a guy, it's really flattering to hear that I write a realistic Jim.  (It's very odd, because I find him easier in a lot of ways to write than Pam, which confounds me given the gender difference.)  Thanks for yet another thoughtful review - and thanks even more for the gem that is your Newlywed Game fic.  I read it today (and reviewed), and while we're all fond of saying we laughed out loud, I literally did; I even clapped at one point (I believe it was Daryl's "Way to go, Mike!").  Just terrific stuff. My husband doesn't read fanfic and hasn't read any Office fanfic at all, but I found myself thinking I have GOT to show him your story. 

Thanks again! 

Things To Say by Pepper Rated: T [Reviews - 11] 2
Summary:

After the events of "Beach Games," Pam and Jim find themselves alone at the lake with plenty to talk about.

Nobody was writing the post-"BG" scenario I wanted to see, so I took matters into my own hands. It's my very first attempt at fanfic. Be kind!

Spoilers through "Beach Games."


Categories: Jim and Pam, Present, Episode Related
Characters: Jim/Pam, Karen
Genres: Fluff, Romance
Warnings: Mild sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2225 Read Count: 9580 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 14, 2007 Updated: May 14, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed
Date: May 15, 2007 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Welcome, welcome, to the Benevolent Order of Fluff Lovers.  We're glad to have you with us.  That was a great debut which I very much enjoyed.  I don't have any complaints about that one but next time you might try to do one with a little slower pacing, maybe letting a little more drama seep in.  But that was great fluffy goodness.  

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words, and the suggestion. I guess after this loooong, frustrating season of JAM-drought, I didn't want to be patient anymore, so I had them dive right in. :)

Apparently you can by nqllisi Rated: K+ [Reviews - 23] 9
Summary: Jim calls Karen after his interview. Spoilers for "The Job" (season 3 finale).
Categories: Jim and Pam, Episode Related
Characters: Jim, Karen
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 638 Read Count: 4868 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 18, 2007 Updated: May 18, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 9
Date: May 18, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: I can't just leave you here

Very plausible and well done.  Nice job.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Compass by NeverEnoughJam Rated: K [Reviews - 12] 7
Summary: Obligatory first date fic. Spoilers for S3 season finale.

Categories: Jim and Pam, Future
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1354 Read Count: 4426 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 18, 2007 Updated: May 18, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 18, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Compass

Wow...that was pretty much perfect.  A faint pink tinge climbed her cheek, but she looked him in the eye. She was doing that more lately, he thought.  One thing I noticed in my many rewatchings of the beach flashback is how squarely she looks him in the eye when she says "I wish you would." ...The way you infuse this with weight and drama even as you simply tell the story of them being seated in a restaurant is really remarkable, and on top of that you do it with such graceful, poetic language.  Splendid.



Author's Response: Gee, BL, you are very generous! Thank you! I think most of the poetic language belongs to John Donne, though. :D

Author's Response: I meant to add to your remarks that I think the beach conversation between Jim and Pam is the first real, honest conversation they've ever had. No agendas, no lies, no holding back, no denials. Both of them finally speaking the truth to one another. Fantastic scene. We need more fanfic about it!

Such a long road we've been walking on by traceace Rated: K+ [Reviews - 30] 15
Summary: Past Featured StoryShe can’t help but feel like it’s a good sign; a step in the right direction. Set post-The Job.

Categories: Jim and Pam, Present, Episode Related
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Fluff, Romance
Warnings: No Warnings Apply
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2275 Read Count: 5175 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 21, 2007 Updated: May 21, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 21, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Several perfect little moments and the whole tone was just right. A beautifully imagined and executed piece.  I think I've decided that this is, in fact, exactly how the first date went.

FNB loves BHC: The First Date by LoveFool Rated: T [Reviews - 46] 20
Summary: A First Date story, post The Job (contains spoilers if you haven't seen it yet). NOT part of my regular AU stuff -- a different AU all together! ;-)
Categories: Jim and Pam, Episode Related
Characters: None
Genres: Fluff, Romance
Warnings: Moderate sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6535 Read Count: 20742 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 23, 2007 Updated: May 28, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 24, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Bad Dates Start Like This...

Wonderful...I think there would be this dynamic, Jim being anxious to talk and apologize and Pam just being so happy she hardly knows what to do with herself.  It's fun to read about anyway.  A big smile from reading your work as always.   

Author's Response: Thanks Broken. I was having a lot of trouble getting this to be something that I really liked - especially this first part, so I'm certainly happy to hear that it worked for you!

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 25, 2007 Title: Chapter 2: Bad Dates Continue Like This...

When you dabble in angst you do it brilliantly.  (And it's nice to have the comfort that this is you writing and things will be okay in the end).  It's so interesting to think about them confronting and processing the past and it's very realistic to depict it not being easy.  I really think it will be hard for Jim to ever truly understand where Pam was on casino night; he just has no template to comprehend what it would have been like for her. 

The Question by Maybe Once Rated: K+ [Reviews - 9] 7
Summary:

"So, Pam. Who got that job in New York? And.....ROLLING!"

Stream of consciousness drabble from Pam's famous TH. Spoilers for "The Job."


Categories: Jim and Pam, Episode Related
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Drabble, Inner Monologue
Warnings: No Warnings Apply
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 507 Read Count: 2763 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 25, 2007 Updated: May 25, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 25, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: "So, Pam. Who got that job in New York? And.....ROLLING!"

That was fun...such a pleasure to relive that scene and your take on her thoughts is dead on.  Great stuff.



Author's Response: Thanks!   I would be embarrassed to admit how many times I've rewatched that scene....except I know that here, I'm among friends....who have also rewatched it a bazillion times....

Cliche by Wendy Blue Rated: T [Reviews - 83] 37
Summary: Past Featured StoryA series of vignettes centered around clichés, but with a JAM spin.

Categories: Jim and Pam, Future
Characters: Ensemble
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 10899 Read Count: 41956 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: May 26, 2007 Updated: July 22, 2007
Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: June 04, 2007 Title: Chapter 6: You Complete Me

Great stuff, really enjoying this series.  As someone with boxes and boxes of baseball cards in my basement I got a particular kick out of this one.  This was no trivial gift by Dwight, by the way.  That card is worth at least a hundred dollars.     

Author's Response: Let's just say that the value of the card was unknown to Dwight...one of the many things he's ignorant about :)  So glad you enjoyed the chapter, thanks for reading!

Reviewer: brokenloon Signed 10
Date: May 26, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: "My Way or the Highway"

Superb...Flawless writing, realistic, and the I love you moment was great and so in character.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!  I thought the "I love you" moment might be too corny, but then I remembered the title of my story ;)  Thanks again for reading!